Come one and all to the meta-writefag and help raise the quality of MLP fanfiction! Featuring: being ashame of you're english skillings!ITT: Wow, best pony!, poni a poni (poni), Your brother in language, Radiation fucking up a picture, Diamond Dog fics, /mlp/ x /an/, OCs v Canon, "YOU JUST COULDN'T HANDLE PERFECTION, YOU COULDN'T BEAR TO SEE BEAUTIFUL THINGS", Our dose of Hailey Potter, Why aren't you writing?, Taking a break from taking a break, "Haven't you read TPIIPMaaENAaPoS?", Increasing your reading speed, Another /fimfic/ denizen is incapable of reading, Depth Plunderer the fisherpony, ESLs will overtake us all, Pre-historical fics, The insidiousness of shitty upbringings, Mandatory reading of everything in the SK, and a true disservice to all horsewords. >/fimfic/ Book Club is now open!The fourth book is Vinyl and Octavia: University Days.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/13477/vinyl-and-octavia-university-daysIf (You) want to participate, read chapters 1-11 by the 6th of August.On Sunday we'll discuss what we've read.>Recommended stories:Tired of the same old 'Human goes to Equestria to fuck his underage waifu' formula? Burnt out after reading that Fallout crossover? Well, we've compiled the best of the worst in order to bring you our absolute average!New Starter Kit - http://mlpficreviews.org.uk/starter/Old Starter Kit - http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png>Common fic abbreviations used by the thread:https://ponepaste.org/7317>A list of reviews made by the Anons in this thread:http://www.mlpficreviews.org.ukUse the commands ">review <story link>" and ">discuss <story link>" to add reviews to a story.Userscript for extra features: https://u.smutty.horse/mfefjczbkvw.js>An easy to understand, in-depth writing guide for beginners:https://eznguide.neocities.org/>Can you pre-read my story?Post it on Google Docs or HackMD with comments enabled and give us a link.>Additional material for authors:Rhorse's Horse Behavioral Notes - https://ponepaste.org/932Politics and the English Language - https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/Authentic polish bigos - https://www.everydayhealthyrecipes.com/authentic-polish-bigos-stew-recipe/Vhatug's tips for anatomically correct clop - https://poneb.in/g4VpEg4fSetting a story in motion - https://youtu.be/ufO8LbwTdu0Taking criticism - https://youtu.be/-v4R2ZcxPlA>Various reviews and riffs:Fillyanon's Bookshelf - https://ponepaste.org/5555Notkickass222urmom's Reviews - https://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmomIHeartShinzakura's Reviews - https://ponepaste.org/user/IHeartShinzakuraAppleanon reads fics - https://poneb.in/wmGX7FPmDeluxe Big Master Review List - https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1z9Bz7UnEbxo-svlXa2tV49PJkP-yFuR7pRXiBUn-IeUA Guide to Rational Fics - https://derpicdn.net/img/view/2020/4/2/2312216.jpgThe Royal Canterlot Library's Top 16 Fanfics - https://royalcanterlotlibrary.net/top16/Previous Thread >>38893099
First for best duo!
>>38910968oh no
First for best horse!(Automated flaggot post does not count)
So just to clarify, we will be reading the starter kit as part of the book club, right?
>>38910998Damn, Pinkie does a really good Applejack costume.
>>38910998spbp
>>38911002Suuuure
>>38911002First one to do it gets a prize
Does anon mind if we post the stuff we wrote here?https://www.fimfiction.net/story/521025/1/the-thing-behind-my-eyes/chapter-1
>>38911086https://www.fimfiction.net/story/521025/the-thing-behind-my-eyesFixed that link for you bro.
Anon you are a miserable dirty poorfag farmer or wagecucking cubicle worker with boomer parents dumber than you who taught you nothing intelligent.I be you weren't even raised by gen-X parents, you were raised by your grandparents while your actual parents were busy making money. There was nobody to take care of you but your old-fashioned folk, your degenerate schoolmmates and heaven forbid the internet which you couldn't discern from reality.Please put down the pen/keyboard, turn your page into a paperairplane or deleted microsoft word from your PC because you have nothing, absolutely nothing to do with writing a good story.DID YOU EVEN OPEN A BOOK ABOUT HOW TO WRITE STORIES? What books did you even read in your childhood's formative years you dumbass? What media did you consume? Did you write an objective analysis and guidelines on what how they're paced, written, storytold/presented, etc?You are a phillistine. Plebeians like you have no business writing books. You can't even make fun of your workspace because you the lack the self awareness to make jokes about it like a true witty person. You are still a 5 year old automaton following orders, except without the curiosity and imagination of a 5 year old.PUT DOWN THE PEN. Become a drawfag instead. You will always and shall always be a brainless slave to the visual arts cause that's what drawfags do, they slave aware mindlessly copying images in their own style and scribbling endless sketches to copy their own sketches till their finalize they lineart.You're done, I can't make a writefag out of you, become a drawfag instead and work for other writefags and stop being a little bitch. You have no stories to tell.You see this? You can't even storytell THIS:https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nmQxzBHmWjs
>Read fanfiction>It's nothing but melodrama and hihi haha ogooo romance>it feels like a geeky dorky 12 year old wrote it who lacks the playfulness of a 5 year old and the maturity of a 20 year old, so he's like a tranny, unfinished, stuck in transition.>He can't do cool/badass scenes/characters, every insult feels forced, it lacks charm, it's dull as fuck, it feels like you're reading the script for Hazbin Hotel or Family Guy.Why can't millennials into writing?HOWMANYTIMESDO I HAVE TO TEACH YOU THIS LESSON, MILLENNIAL?NO MATTER HOW GOOD YOUR PROSE IS(it isn't, it flows like shit and you sound like a pajeet or a german)WRITING ISN'T JUST ABOUT PURPLE PROSE. YOU NEED TO BE IN A STATE OF MIND TO CREATE SOMETHING INTERESTINGAND AS FOR FANFICTION WHICH YOU ALL FAIL AT; YOU DON'T EVEN BOTHER COPYING Rob Renzetti's and Lauren J. Faust's' dialogue from her characters, let alone her overall writing style LET ALONE THEIR MENTALITY. Fanfiction is all about reproducing the atmosphere and style of a person's writing 111:111 and what do you disgusting millennials do? you throw it all out for "What if Fallout but with ponies?" HOW FUCKING LAZY ARE YOU TO REFUSE TO DO YOUR HOMEWORK? F- , you will never pass writing school. NEVER.Along with the fact that you refuse to copy good works, you also refuse to get into the state of mind of that person.You also refuse to open books about storytellingYOUT ttttuuut titiii you refuse anything and everything and then you wonder "Geeezzz why am I not improving? jeeez why am I not good at maths simply because I never learned a formula and how to apply it in my life?"What the fuck is wrong with you STUBBORN REDNECKS? DO YOUR FUCKING HOMEWORK BEFORE WRITING.GOD DAMNNIT you're exactly like those drawfags who refuse to do any of those but they believe "my visuals will tell the story xD despite the fact I have NOTHING TO SAY, NO STORY TO TELL, but hey my puppets humping each other is totally Shakespearen" "Fuck you and fuck your entire generation this is why cartoons and movies and books past 2008 have all turned to garbage. Every fanfiction written in 90-2010+ is absolute dogshit that refuses to copy the original style.
>>38911180>You have no stories to tell.When has that ever stopped anyone?
>>38911194cozyfag? is that you?
>>38911180>>38911194How many times will you copypaste that?
>>38911195Everyone who's worth a damn. What, you think the Harry Potter books would have sold like hot cakes without the help of the movies and conventions? Bullshit.
>>38911224I hope he's still making his anti-lesbian fic.
>>38911228Probably once per thread to have a semi-recent post and screencap to refer back to about ebil 4chinnes.
Can you upload incomplete fics on Fim Fiction? I'm new sorry.
>>38911270Yes, you can.
>>38911270You can, but you should probably use chapters unless you want to turn people off. Are you talking about uploading a story with the intention of editing it later as you go along? There are groups here and on fimficiton that can preview your work and give feedback if you're working on something longer.
>>38911168Thanks, anon.
The feature box has definitely delivered a story:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/520607/id-only-dream-of-you
>>38911458>Every time Luna falls asleep, her lover vanishes. Every morning, she must find who he's-dropped
>>38911458>>38911539What the hell does that mean?
>>38911539Ha.It is an unusual concept. He bit off more than he could chew with it, but I like how far he got. Thumbs down for first person, thumbs up for not having a mess of grammatical mistakes. Overall excellent attempt.
How long does it take for your submission to be approved?
>>38911657Shouldn't take longer than 30-50 business days.
>>38911666Oh...oh....oh.
>>3890845841 playlists of fandom music.>>38909155You have to know your OC before you write them. What's her personality? Her backstory? Her special talent? Her relationship with her kids? Ideally, you'd take those answers and put them at the start so the reader can connect with the characters and sympathize with them when shit hits the fan.Also, the monster sounds pretty generic. Apple Bloom alone has a whole cottage industry of monster attack oneshots. If you want real horror, make it a real kidnapping by a guy. That grounds it and can add to the foreboding horror of the situation since the readers can more easily identify with things.>>38909434Knighty's a britbong so he might have been worried about getting v& by the queen.>>38909443>will have to go on Ao3So long as she's not a disgusting anthro or human, it can be on Fimfiction. Foalcon's still allowed.>>38911657One anon got stuck in a kafkaesque nightmare for over a week once.
>>38909155The most important thing about writing horror is that, first and foremost, what you you write should frighten you before you publish it. Write it, read it, and if it doesn't make you uncomfortable, erase it and write it again. When you write the things that truly scare you in a sincere way, readers will be more likely to share the same feelings with you.
>>38911991>One anon got stuck in a kafkaesque nightmare for over a week once.Not as bad as the screaming Pinkie tulpa.
>>38911991Ah well, I don't mind I'll just keep making chapters, and I might post the fic on AO3 to the thread later today since it's early in the morning.
>>38911991>anthroOf course it is, how else can she force a destoned Cozy to get implants and be her slave partner, or go around naked?
>>38910968>literally cannot stop sucking dicksTurns out some people can if you go too far in.This is why you need oral training, kids.
>>38911002I really think we should do it before reading any more non-starter kit fics.Of course, the usual book club length limits still apply. I don't want to keep reading Fo:E for four months.
>>38912377>Of course, the usual book club length limits still apply.
Give me good tickling fics.
>>38912377We should read University Days then Bug on a Stick, and then start on the starter kit.
>>38912431Not when NS will beat Bug during the voting.
>>38912431I'm fine with that, too. Bug is on the Starter Kit anyways.
>>38911086I haven't read it yet but if you want more clicks, you should find a cover art for your story and add it to a few more groups.
>>38912377Fallout equestria shouldn't even be there.
>>38912640Bug Zapper is on the starter kit?
The Fimfic thread's season ending cliffhanger will be the revelation that the MILLENNIALS CAN'T WRITE poster is actually FillyAnon's evil alternate personality taking hold.
>>38912762Yeah we all knew that from the get go. It's nmmanon.
>>38912762Don't worry, filly is currently occupied with other matters.
>review https://www.fimfiction.net/story/520607/id-only-dream-of-youThis is a crackship shortfic with Doc Whooves and Luna. There is a mystery wherein Doc disappears every morning, but it is explained almost immediately in the fic.Besides being a crackship and in first person, the story is set pre-NMM and the romance is tied to Luna's downfall, all of which together you would expect to result in a terrible story. The thing is, the story would have to actually deliver on the expectations you have of cringeworthy garbage and other poorly written elements in order to actually be bad. Two things make this story unusual and recommendable, the first of which is that basically everything you would expect to be bad is simply missing. It's almost as if the author pre-skipped it for you, so you don't have to skip it yourself. Since those things are fairly bad, there's almost nothing left.What is left in the story is a few good scenes based on the disappearing Doc concept, which is explained just enough to make the story work and doesn't stand up to any critical thought. Those scenes are tied together with some bare scaffolding to turn them in a story, with smoldering wreckage of canon as a backdrop.The second thing that makes it recommendable is, obviously, that the disappearing Doc concept is quite unusual.
>>38911194I earnestly can't even tell what this is complaining about. It's just schizophrenic nonsense like 90% of this thread.
>>38912808Please let filly out from under your desk, faggot.
>>38912810Oh sweet, a personal servant to tell me which fics I should never read.
First NMMflaggot, then fillyMan all that's left is fucking lunaanon .Fuck this thread
>>38912844Anon, I'm not gone, I've posted a review just yesterday. I just have my >no hooves full, but I'm still actively reading the thread.
>>38912944He's dead! He's no more! He has ceased to be! This is an ex-filly!
>>38912944>I just have my >no hooves fullJust your hands?
>>38912944You've got a nonzero count of locomotive appendages out the door, though. We could be back to 404ing as early as next month, how exciting!
>>38912810I didn't think it was possible to fill a review with this much vagueposting
>>38913168The story has almost no substance, if I explain the disappearing mechanics, it will be worse than the presentation in the story. You can just read chapters 1 and 2 if you want that. The only thing left is vagueposting.
>>38912944>>38912990
>>38912815I think you misunderstand who's currently under whose desk. Or on top of which bed actually. Filly's desk is a little too small for me to fit in there.
>>38912810It must be pure liquid dog shit if you liked it, thanks for letting us know to skip it
>>38912944What's making you so busy, you little green fag? I thought you college lads have a full summer free to do things
Attention, I hate Doctor Hooves. That is all.>>38913504kek
>>38913504Is that blood?
How do you write a word ("now") being screamed and drawn out without being over the top?
>>38913584"NOOOW!"Or something like that. Don't think too hard about it.
>>38913584>Rainbow screamed, drawing out the word, "Now!"
>>38912810You could've turned off your flag for the review. Half the thread will go 'lmao tunaflag ' (mind you, they're not wrong) and you gain nothing for signing that post with your favorite avatar.
Since FiM Fiction is taking it's time with going through my fan fic, I thought I'd show you all the first three chapters of my fan fic on AO3 first.https://archiveofourown.org/works/40759227/chapters/102132033
Is it bad if I make a very obvious Morrowind reference at the climax of my story?Like, at this point, I think it counts as a pretty obscure game. Do you think many fimfic readers would notice?
>>38913705Bait? >>38893059
>>38913705>Do you think a group of the most autistic men on the internet would catch a Morrowind reference?I'm pretty sure they would.On that note, do you think they would catch a Paths of Glory reference?
How to get over writer's block: tutorialopen google docs (or whatever it is you write in)align keyboard so that typing is natural and there are marginally less spelling mistakes on averageclose eyeswrite thoughts at the speed they arriveif no thoughts arrive start typing words until they form sentencesprofit
>>38911086I dig the concept, but the execution leaves a lot to be desired. Typos are one thing, but - and I don't mean to insult you - I feel like you're going for prose a bit too purple for your skills. Making metaphors like calling tree branches "bones" is fun, if a bit disorienting, but once you've made the comparison once the second time just feels awkward.>A face like a skull, maybe, or, maybe, like wood. Gnarled as if by lightening.For instance here I understand the intent, but for one I'm not sure if a face can be gnarled, for two it's "lightning" not "lightening" (which means "to lighten something"), and for three while indeed branches can be gnarled lightning usually isn't referred to this way.>In my eyes, when the lights are out, there’s still a ghost of it in the violated sanctuary of my resting eyes.Be careful with word repetition like "eyes" here. It's not very nice to read, unless it has a very good reason to be there.As for the plot, I have a few recommendations, but it's up to you whether you agree with them or not:- I feel like Evergreen's reaction is a little bit too nonchalant. You make it clear that she too was h(a)unted by the creature, yet she speaks of Zecora like she merely cured a cold for her, instead of practically saving her life. How did she even know to visit her anyway?- Another thing to her: It could've been a nice "plottwist" if Evergreen was actually the first pony who became the prey, but she substituted Rose for herself. And the reason why she comes to her home and tells her to visit Zecora is out of guilt.- Finally I would cut the last sentence. I think the realization would hit a lot harder if it is the very end of the story. Plus I'm not really sure what "scar" is meant to stand for there. Did you mean "scowl"?All in all, neat concept and there are ideas in this fic I very much enjoyed, but it's a bit too short and a bit too full of grammatical and prose issues to really work. Keep it up, Anon.>>38913451It's not the 'what', it's the 'who.'>>38913179Based. I already intended to stay, but if even the captcha wills so.>>38912990Oh ye of little faith! I've made over fifty threads now, don't think I'm ready to leave just yet.
>>38913992How can you suck cock and type at the same time?
>>38914003Wait, some of us aren't sucking cock and typing at the same time?
>>38914003Silly Anon. You use your mouth to suck the cock and your fingers to type.At most you use one hand to pump the dick while you suck the upper part while the free hand types.
>>38914003Like >>38914058 says (and like Jason's bio still says), you type stuff using your hands.Though filly isn't on sucking duty. His mouth is mostly for kissing.
>>38914003You have to learn how to edge him. He only gets a break when you've got a post to reply to.Seriously, edging has revolutionised my masturbation. Explore it.
>>389141064 channel is just edging your post lmao
>>38913504poor doggo
Fuck everyone who voted on University Days for the book club. Something about it makes me nostalgic as all hell even though in 2013/2014 I only read the first two chapters. I don't even fucking read shipfics usually.
>>38914161>I don't even fucking read shipfics usually.What are the shipfics you have read?
>>38913523It's an edit. It's vomit.
>>38914299Not counting OCs: Daetrin's first three fics, a few of Mono's shorter stories, K'awka Supay, Eyes on You and probably a few others I'm forgetting.
>>38914161Save that discussion for the Sunday.>Something about it makes me nostalgic as all hellIt's the university setting.
>>38914161I dont even contribute, i just vote to make sure bug on a stick doesnt win
>>38910968Hi fimfic I missed you <3 lunafag please kill yourself I would be so happy
>>38914625Bug on a Stick is good sans the ending but we've been over that
>>38913584“NOWWW!” All caps and italicized. Stay away from extra exclamation marks and keep it phonetically.
>>38914764Wouldn't the "O" be the part that is naturally stretched out while screaming "now"?
Ummm, based?
>>38914826>*goes off to take care of that*kino
>>38914826Alondro is probably the strongest character across all fiction at this point
>>38914826>2013You'd think he'd have grown out of that cringe by now.
>>38914907Speaking for myself, I like to go back and look at posts and comments I've made years ago. Sometimes I feel good about whatever analysis or thoughts I put forward, and sometimes I feel physical pain from how retarded I sounded, but I try to use it as a way to refine my posting and thinking.But this? Him? He looks back at his insane rambling cringe posts and says, "Hold my beer."
>>38914930How do you view your old comments?
>>38914998Usually just happening across them on stories I reread. A handful of good ones I remember where they were posted. Fimfic doesn't have a feature for finding all your comments everywhere, as far as I know, which is a shame.
Is Origins of Hollow Shades good or bad? Don't bait me into reading 165+ comic pages for nothing.https://www.canterlotcomics.com/comic/en/the_origins_of_hollow_shades-102
So what was The Royal Canterlot Library? I am assuming a group on FimFiction? Why was it shut down?Captcha: Ga8a8
>Have a character introduce themselves to Rainbow Dash by saying she has a really eye-catching mane>Realized when looking back at a past chapter that I had his brother say the exact same thingI wish I could say it was intentional but now I'm just embarrassed for not realizing what I did. Oh well, none of my readers will know.
>>38915045If anything, you're the one doing the baiting. How many times have you posted that?Nobody has any interest in reading that comic. If you want to read it, do it. Don't pass the buck to us.
>>38915066Do they also like to stretch their legs?
>>38915066If anyone notices it, I'm sure you can play it off as a sibling quirk.
>>38913992Thanks for the honest feedback, anon. I appreciate it. No offense taken.
>>38915051A group of people with a moderately sized following used the power of nepotism to have a their review group feature stories they thought were noteworthy, interview the author, and make siteposts about it.
>>38912762>evil alternate personalityCan't wait for that plot to die like every mirror universe fic does.>>38912810>the disappearing Doc conceptWhat even is this? Like a POV of someone who knows him and tries to figure out why he fucks off suddenly?>>38913514The actual character or the fanon? His appearance in the pandering episode was pretty nice and I liked the characterization but the fanon's godawful.>>38914161>makes me nostalgic as all hellThere's something about 2012-2013 fics. Maybe there was more optimism and enthusiasm in writers back then that bled into their fics and gave the whole era's fics a different feeling. Same thing happened when I read Winning Pony despite reading it in 2019 and never previously giving it a second glance. It just reminded me of the energy fics from that time had.>>38914907Could be worse. You could have a whole rule on Fimfiction created just because of your posts.--Skeeter the Lurker>>38915051It was a review group founded by RBDash47. Stories would be nominated by readers and the group's "curators" would then pick winners to read and review. The main shtick was they'd interview the author with some general and story specific questions which would then get a site post on Fimfic (this is why RBDash47 is a "Site Blogger").It was considered pretty prestigious in the realm of horseword fame to be featured by them--second only to EQD--to the point that when they featured a trollfic, it created a shitstorm and pissed off a ton of people.>Why was it shut down?From the sound of it, all the "curators" hopped off the ride and they never bothered getting new ones to keep the circlejerk active, I'd assume because they didn't want their creation to fall under new management. It was effectively dead for over a year before the official announcement was made.
>>38915488>they didn't want their creation to fall under new managementFuck it, let's fill the niche and create /mlp/ficinterviews
>>38915502We briefly entertained the idea back when they entered that hiatus.Come up with a list of questions, or just copy the RCL ones. Make each of the thread regulars or authors we know talk about a fic they wrote they like a lot or feel is their best.Can't remember why nothing ever came out of it. Probably because we were too busy arguing about what Applejack should do during the superstorm.
>>38915488>Could be worse. You could have a whole rule on Fimfiction created just because of your posts.>--Skeeter the LurkerA rule which they then refused to ever enforce, which accomplished nothing but making the staff look incompetent and impotent.
>>38915488Which rule?
>>38915488>all the "curators" hopped off the rideBoth FoME and PP are still active on the site, the first is still actively publishing fics. Things just got too busy for them to do both.>the other rule Is specifically about forum-style signatures, and Skeeter is specifically exempt from it. I'm not sure if you have any experience with forums but you'd understand why that kind of signatures are banned.
>>38915622>>the other rule>Is specifically about forum-style signatures, and Skeeter is specifically exempt from it.Ah yes, selective enforcement, one of the earliest signs of corruption and abuse. If certain people are "exempt" from following the rules, then they aren't rules; they're excuses to use against anyone the moderators don't like.
>>38915721Please don't be a cretin. Everyone is exempt from that rule if you do what Skeeter does. GM does it. AAIQU does it. The rule has been repeatedly clarified to refer to Forum style signatures, though I understand you're a sheltered zoomie who never had to deal with that fuckery.
>>38915740Lick the boot harder.>zoomie>anon tried to use buzz words!>it's not very effective...
>>38915765Please anon, stop acting like a child if you don't want to be treated like one. >Signatures at the bottom of your post are unnecessary and make the page harder to navigate, especially on mobile. Please refrain from using them, if you have any information you want everyone to have access to, place it on your profile page instead.Does putting your name there "make the page harder to navigate"? Is your name extra "information you want everyone to have access to"?In the time and internet environment the rules were written (and I'll agree they should be clarified now but lmao >Knighty doing something) signature meant one specific thing. It referred to the cancerous block of links quotes images and animated gifs automatically attached at the bottom of every forum user's post. Signature was not a vague term as we see it now, it was very specifically that.
>>38915810Signature is a static attachment to your every post. No more, no less. Slapping your name on every post isn't any different from the blocks of bars and links, and both should have been banned entirely, or proper signatures complete with ability to hide them from view implemented. To do any less is cowardice.
>>38915868>Slapping your name on every post isn't any different from the blocks of bars and linkst. Downloaded more RAM
>>38915810Eat my ass, anon. Yes, every extra line is one more piece of noise to filter and scroll through. It's mostly inconsequential on desktop, but on a mobile device with limited resolution it adds up. Also, the signatures don't contain any new information, which automatically makes them redundant and pointless.>t-. anon>posted from my iPhone>on Thursday>August 4th>2022>11:49amBut hey, it's not a block of links right? That chunk of crap is perfectly fine by you, for every single post on every single thread and story. Eat. My. Ass.
>>38914747So minus all the parts where it's bad it's a good storyWhat are you? A Phaggot?
>>38915558I missed this, what would apple jack do in the superstorm
>>38914930I cant hover over the private messgae button without being reminded about the response I got from an author, after I sent a message gushing over one of their stories. What makes it painful is the measures I took in order to not seem too sperg like, which ironically made me look much more so
>>38915988Tell us about it. The last time I did that we ended up trading dick pics.
>>38915930Seethe.
>>38915985Obviously remlve the giant glass shard from the brain of that guard
>>38912431>and then start on the starter kit.Everything we've read so far has been on the starter kit.
>>38911086>discovers are dark presence
>>38916002Read CoPE.
>>38916003Aj is a surgeon?
>>38915981Not him but practically every story has some issues, else we'd see every reviewer give them 10/10s. In the case of Bug on the Stick, you get 125k words of an excellent story and less than 5k of dogshit epilogue that has no bearing on the fic and should simply be ignored. For context, the epilogue happens several thousand years after the main fic.
>>38916009>so farTechnically true but University Days isn't on there.
>>38915994Not much to tell, I really enjoyed the fic and felt compelled to tell the author about it. By that point the story was [value] years old - and I didn't want it to be a public comment - so I sent a private messge. Reading it back, it was a sloppy and 'tismful, but it came from the heart. Also way longer than I remember>The last time I did that we ended up trading dick picsI really shouldn't be getting surprised by this thread's homo levels but this still caught me off guard
>>38915098Make them a whole family of mane-fetishists."W-welcome to our sanctum sanctorum, Rainbow Dash.""Why are the walls all hairy--are those pony manes?""W-we just need a clipping, Rainbow Dash.""A cl-cl-clipping for our c-c-collection.""What the fuck? Let me out you freaks!"
>>38916447Ah yes. Maneschizos.
>>38916240Sounds like PHaggot logic
>>38916516It is your right to remain ignorant.
>>38912431I'll let the people who actually participate in the book club vote on whether or not we should limit ourselves to the starter kit or not on Sunday/Monday.
>>38916247>but University Days isn't on there.Well maybe it should
>>38916727Not if the book club drops it to get to Bug on a Stick faster.
i gave up
>>38913992>It's not the 'what', it's the 'who.'Is there a Miss Reviewfilly?
Picrel are stats for Fimfiction. Why are Bermudas so high, are these VPNs? Are there any Bermudians here?
>>38915985BUILD A BARRICADE TO STOP/SLOW DOWN THE SUPERSTORM
>>38917016What's the basis of your assertion that those stats aren't bullshit, when they look like bullshit?
>>38916739Why would we drop a fic we're already reading
>>38915994How the fuck do you even get to that from "hey man I like ur fic :)"
>>38917047Why do they look like bullshit? Everything except for the Bermudas looks perfectly reasonable
>>38917065Well, for one, it's tricky drop a fic without having started reading it.For two, it was a joke.
>>38917074It could start with a typo: "hey man I like ur dic :)"
>>38917083Your basis for asserting that the stats aren't bullshit is that you like the numbers except for the numbers you don't like?They look made up to me. What's the data source? FiMFiction has Google Adsense and I bet that's not a Google Analytics report. FiMFiction has close to (or actually) zero other trackers besides its own access logs.
>>38917132My basis for accessing the credibility of the stats is how realistic they are. I believe that Poland, being a country with a population of almost 28 million people, can take up 4 perfect of fimfiction's traffic. I don't believe that a couple of islands with a population of 64 thousand people can take up more than 6 percent of fimfiction's traffic, it's just not realistic unless every single resident of those islands is a pony fan.I took the stats from this sitehttps://www.similarweb.com/
>>3891717238 million*
>>38917172Looks like they can't get FiMFic's traffic, then. In order for them to get Google Analytics data, Knighty would have to connect his account to their service, which costs money and provides little to no value.I very much doubt he did, so they have to get their statistics from spyware installed on the user's PC. Since their data sources are so poor, I assume that all their numbers are very wrong. Even more so, since it's saying that those percentage swings are over just the past month.
>>38917228I remember when AID paid to get Fimfic's Google analytics to attempt to prove a point, unironically believing people actually doxx themselves to big G.t. Has his Google account set to female
>>38916993>MissAnon, I...
>>38917246What point was he trying to prove?
>This story is gonna be insanely long, and I frankly do NOT care how long it takes to write. I got years on my hands…
>>38917257We are not talking about the Hellblog again.
>>38917272Oh. THAT.
>>38917228Ha. It's still not Google Analytics, but it is probably a better data source considering whose spyware it is. No useful country information in that post, except the US is the primary source.
>>38916993Refer to >>38895741
I think I might have broken my filly. She twitches if I boop her in certain spots.
>>38915066>"Hey, your brother said the same thing."Easy. Now it blends into the story seamlessly.
>>38917261>fucking dies
Maybe you guys are joking but I unironically want to read everything on the starter kit as part of the book club.
>>38832569>>38917687The starter kit list is not very good, and even more importantly has way too many dark fics that have no business being foisted on people.The thread is ostensibly about finding fics that are good and more realistically about finding fics that are fun to discuss. Fo: E is effectively a perpetual book club topic already, but The Immortal Game should only be read by people who find it fun.
>>38917700This is the single worst thing I've ever seen said about the starter kit.
>>38917700Please stop distracting people from our vague gayposting.
>>38917785https://derpibooru.org/tags/princess+of+gay
>>38917700Starter kit list confirmed to be perfect.
>>38917320What the fuck is this genuinely gay circlejerking? Why is the Paprikafag so obsessed?
>>38917929Anon...
>>38917122
>>38917228>Google Analytics data, Knighty would have to connect his account to their service, which costs moneyNot necessarily. You can use it for free.
>>38917957>they do it for free
>>38917687I don't think anyone's joking.>>38917700Fuck off.
>>38917937>vaguepostingIs there a fucking Discord server you faggots are sitting in, or do you singlehandedly make every single one of these posts?
>>38917976>Is there a fucking Discord server you faggots are sitting inThe only thing we're sitting in is a bed. Together.
The secret gay /fimfic/ Discord server is why the thread has been so slow, isn't it?
>>38917995>>38912990
For a thread supposedly populated by readers, you all sure are bad at piecing together information.
>>38918035Information provided by an anonymous vagueposting retard isn't viable information
>>38918040>>38913992
>>38918066>vagueposting
>>38918066Did I fucking stutter?
>>38918035And a lot of people seem to have taken the "show, don't tell" thing a little too literally.
>>38918110Are you asking them to post pics?
>>38918115Yes.
>>38918115>>38918163>unsolicited fic pics
>>38918173
>>38918204Rampage a cute!
>>38917976It's almost like the thread has a history and general knowledge people not paying attention or new to it lack.Lurk moar faggot.
>its a sunset shimmer returns to equestria and drops everything without a second thoughtJust write a world were she never leaved in the first place, as someone that watched all of the hands franchise is very distracting the absolute ooc behaviour.The concept of "the student before twilight" sure did spawned alot of angsty fics that made the writter twist a knife into my heart in the first chapter>bruh scheming MolestiaOdds are twilight would accept to be part of Celestia's shadow government before she would even consider exposing her, and her having muh schemes seems to be working because everything outside equestria is full of garbo races with even garbo societys so who knows maybe i would be fine with mother celestia watching me, Luna already likes to invide the citizens privacy and no one minds
>>38918530Autism, esl, or underaged. At least one, but still completely right.
>>38918550Drunk >:) thats all, thanks for coming to my Ted Talk
>>38918040>>38918066>>38918086Okay, what's going on? What all of this has to do with the filly?Or are you all just memeing?
>>38918818Go back.
>>38918857No way. I need those caps for my Discord server first ^;-)
>>38918230
>>38918230>what if zebra, but blood?
>>38919087PH, condensed.
>>38919058>>38919087I don't really see her as a zebra.
>>38919087>zebra butt blood
>>38919189That means you're fucking her too hard.
>>38919130"I don't see stripes."
>>38919218She has some zebra in her, but she's not a zebra.
>>38919225I mean she's probably had some zebra in her over the years, but if you're a race purist I suppose you're right.
>>38918818Okay, so Filly's going full troon now, HRT's starting in September, that's it. Happy now?
Is https://twibooru.org/2765803 just a ponification or straight up a Hailey fanart?
>>38919381It's disgusting is what it is.
>>38919381Hailey's pony form is dark blue with a black mane, as I recall
Is the a group for fics that are strictly pony? No human, no eqg, no OCs, ect.
>>38919451Possibly, you'd just have to look on FiM Fiction and pay attention to tags for fics.
My first fic on FiM fiction just recently got published, hope you enjoy.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/521039/a-little-trust-goes-a-long-wayArchive of Our Own Linkhttps://archiveofourown.org/works/40759227/chapters/102132033
>>38919499>first comment is some brainlet confused by the descriptionDon't worry, I understood what pins meant without having to think twice.
>>38918204I remember when I spent several hours shitting on this pic ITT just to trigger PH fans.
>>38919868>Starlight NovaOf fucking course
So once we finish University Days will we just continue voting on stories from the starter kit until we've read them all, then move onto other stories?
>>38918329I've been here since 2014 faggot. Your gay online ERP is not part of the thread's history.
>>389201451st, that anon isn't even related to what's going on.2nd>gay>online>ERP1/3
>>38918530What fic are you even talking about in the first place
>>38920148I'm gonna need you to point at the motherfucker who asked.>>38920076Sounds good to me.
>>38919499I've read the new chapters too, I like the pacing, being somewhat fast feels right for this story and I hope you'll be able to keep it up till the end. While the prose definitely stumbles a bit at places, I like how you wrote the characters, FS's and Twilight's exchange at the end of Ch.1 was particularly amusing.However, I'd recommend changing up at least the short description if not both.While it is somewhat interesting that you're writing this story based on a dream, it has no place in the short description. That one is purely to hook the reader with as few words as possible and your short biography of how you recently got into the horsey cartoon and wishing people will enjoy your story isn't really that. I would personally put this entire thing into the long description and keep the short description as something like:>After the Cutie Map calls for them, the Mane Six goes on a road-trip all over Equestria to solve friendship problems - An alternative retelling of S5.I admit this isn't particularly great either, but it might give you an idea how to approach it.Keep it up, Anon! I hope your fic will be successful.Also KMExperience continues to not disappoint, his autism is mighty.>>38918204J-jannieeeee! Help mee!>>38919316Yeah from male to alpha male, obviously.
>>38919316But anon, he's literally bluepilled.
>>38920188>alpha maleYou'll be my alpha cocksleeve if anything, Filly.
>its a HiE story where Earth and Equestria are in contact and there are background politicsnea->RGREDIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE FUCKINGLITERALLY ME
inb4 >reading HIE
>>38920260I want to read it
>>38920188Thanks hoss, I'll definitely change the short description! Glad you're enjoying the fanfiction thus far. I'm almost done with Chapter 4.
>>38919499Current new descriptions. Short description was partially made by this kind anon >>38920188After the Cutie Map calls for them, the Mane Short Description:Six goes on a road-trip all over Equestria to solve friendship problems, but friendship problems won't be the only issues facing our hero's.Long description:Waking up bright and early has its benefits, but today is Twilight Sparkle and her friends' exception. With a strange glow on each of their Cutie Marks and pins all across Equestria going into the Griffinlands. The group must prepare for big changes as they pack up for the long journey ahead and prepare themselves and Ponyvile for their departure.This story takes place after season four, and this (hopefully completed) series of mini-fics should be treated as an alternate season of Friendship is magic.Changed it for quality sake and due to some people being confused.
>>38920274>reading
>>38920322>re
>>38920287>facing our hero's.*heroes, hero's would be singular and possessive.Not to mention it's a bit weird to make the inanimate concept of "issue" into the subject, when you already have the M6. How about:>but friendship problems won't be the only issues they [or "our heroes" if you insist on that] will face.I'd also probably replace "issue" with "obstacle," just sounds nicer to my ears since "problem" and "issue" are practically synonymous.>but today is Twilight Sparkle and her friends' exceptionI understand what you're going for here, but in its current form, this reads super ESL.>Usually waking up bright and early has its benefits, but for Twilight Sparkle and her friends today is an exception....or something like that.The second sentence lacks a connecting clause, so I recommend rephrasing it in a way like this:>With a strange glow illuminating their Cutie Marks and a myriad of new friendship problems popping up all over the map, the group must prepare themselves for the long journey ahead and make sure Ponyville avoids calamity during their absence.Finally,>this (hopefully completed) seriesThis doesn't really inspire confidence in your story, Anon. You're the author, either own the fact that the fic is not yet complete or don't phrase it in such an unsure way.
>>38920368Thanks for the help, I really want to make a good first impression. You all have been so helpful.
>>38920368>filly>smilingDisallowed. Purple has learnt that the green faggot smiling means it's about to get painful for the smartass unicorn and to stop it immediately.
>>38920260Lmao cry more gay nigger
>>38920368This is such nice effortposting. Usually, I can't work up the motivation to take such broken sentences, extract as much original intent from the context and then recreate them to say what they are supposed to say without some kind of emotional connection to the text.You did a good job!
>have the most enticing title>a short desc that just makes the potential reader want to know more>great cover art commisioned from a famous artist>only for them to hide the most mediocre story ever>get featured despite of itGee Anon, when will (You) learn how to market your fics?
>>38921388>using effort>when all it takes is using cropped pornNgmi, anon.
>>38921390>hot cropped picture>story description is an enticing scenario>it's the worst most bland writing possiblealternatively>somehow a male OC makes it into the clop story with no previous mention
>>38921388>shitty mspaint covers>okay descriptions>nice but nothing special stories>>get occasionally featured despite itThat's how you do it, Anons.>>38920600Aww shucks, I don't think this was a super high effort post, but thank you Lunanon. I try.
Reading more of The Gate. I think I've finally found the words to describe what's wrong with it. It's not "shit just happens" or "the characters are reactive, not proactive"; It's that arcs come out of fucking nowhere. Once an arc has started, we see it resolve over other chapters. However, we almost never seen what drives an arc. Out of nowhere, students will be stuck in a ceiling, Fluttershy will be suspicious of Scabbers, and Petunia will begin to regret abusing Harry.I'm not sure if that means the author was correct in their identification of the story's faults. They said that it doesn't have arcs whereas I'm saying that it has them, but that they materialise from nothing. We rarely if ever see the character decisions that lead up to an arc or how they tie in to previous events. At times, the best answer is "because that's kind of when this sort of thing happened in canon".
>>38921462
>>38920260RGRE in what way?The "Equestria is 2/3rds - 9/10ths female" way or the "stallions just act like modern women" way?Oh who am I kidding of course it's the latter. It's never not the latter anymore.
>>38920260Boundary Point? It's pretty shit, the latest chapter has Twilight telling the human that she's his head mare because of the heartsong bullshit and being confused on why he doesn't want to be in a relationship, despite knowing he's a foreigner who she just had to explain the concept of a heartsong to
>Finally having my signature OC reappearing after being away for a million wordsAh, I missed writing her so much.
>>38922175You only hate it because it forces you to look in a mirror.
>>38922387What?
I've never written anything before. I'm thinking of writing a story that takes place in a sort of alternate universe Equestria (similar but not the exact same) 1000 of years after the events of FiM where the mane 6 are legendary heroes and Celestia and Luna are revered as deities. Another version of Tirac/Tirek will be the antagonist. Having destroyed most of pony kind many hundreds of years ago, Equestria is a kingdom of ruins. It'll kinda be like my idea of a G6 or whatever. There will be a core 7 ponies based off of previous generation pones. If literally one anon here says that they'd be interested in reading something like that, I'm going to give it a try. I'm sure I didn't do a great job of describing what I'm thinking, but I've never done anything like this before.
>>38922536Take a look at other fics like the one you're describing to see what they did well and where they went awry.https://www.fimfiction.net/group/198106/post-apocalyptic-futurehttps://www.fimfiction.net/group/200092/the-equestrian-futurehttps://www.fimfiction.net/group/1333/fics-set-in-the-future
>>38922536>"I'm gonna make G5, but good!"
>>38922619How hard could it be, eh?
>>38922387I fucking wish lmao
So this is where we can share our fan stories eh? Or do we post it on fimfiction first? Cause I'm gonna be taking a crack at it. And write up my first story for this world. I'm going to try to stay in line with the spirit of the show and not veer to hard into anything edgy. And have the stories revolve around my own characters with fleeting references to things in the rest of Equestria.Now I've been thinking up some names for my main characters. tell me if they're good pony names or ones that are already overdone. >Twinkling Lance>Breath Easy >Night Horizon >Strong Wind
>>38922387Here's the problem guy; when a fic does the "stallions act like modern women" version, that's not actually what "modern women" are like. It's an overblown stereotype, an incredibly exaggerated version of what women are actually like, and it's incredibly obvious that the writer has never actually left their house and talked to another human being irl in years, let alone a woman. Obviously all stereotypes contain a grain of truth, that's not the point you goddamn sperglordTheir understanding of social dynamics is shit, their knowledge of social cues is obviously autistic, and none of the characters they create act in any way, shape, or form, like people. Also, the main character is usually a painfully obvious self-insert that makes ponies "woah" with every fucking sentence, unless they are some kind of super-edgy torture porn victim who then takes over-the-top revenge against all the women who rejected him mares who did fucked up shit to him.There are a few stories that don't do this, but it's been along-ass time since I've read one.
>>38922802>Here's the problem guy; when a fic does the "stallions act like modern women" version, that's not actually what "modern women" are like.No, the issue is that stallions shouldn't be acting like that at all.
>>38922848Stop being sexist
>>38922848You really can't separate reality and fiction? At all? You poor fucker. What's it like, having brain damage?
>>38922738Post wherever you want, but you will get feedback quicker here.Speaking of, them there pony names are totally fine.
>>38922802What are "modern women" like, in your tiny corner of the Internet? >inb4 real life, not the InternetIt's like you don't understand the idea of fiction. You're upset with a genre of horse words because it doesn't match up exactly with how you see real life (even accounting for the reversal). You realize how absurd that is, right?
>>38922925Thanks, will do.
>>38914823You could do that, too. Toy with it and see what you like, then roll with it.
Where is your "incomplete/deadfic" line? Three months without an update? Six? A year (mine)? Cancelled tag? "The author killed himself" blog post from a friend?>>38919499>lowercase titleAnon...The synopsis isn't terrible but isn't that great either. It doesn't draw in my curiosity at all since it does that "summarize the whole story in two sentences" thing that's pretty common.>>38920287This synopsis looks heavily front loaded. Is the fic focusing on them getting ready to leave for their adventure or actually going on it? Might not seem like a big issue but it can throw off new readers. I put off reading Immortal Game for years because I thought it was just an evil Twilight fic due to the synopsis missing 70% of the plot.>>38921388Why do that when you can complain about pornfics and people with hundreds of followers?>>38922738>Twinkling LanceA bit awkward. You want to shoot for words that go together, like "Twinkling Star" or "Lance Charge."
>don't want to write much anthro>still want to explore the different body types at least once>decide to shove everything I can into one story so I'll write one or two at most>leave it unfinished since 2019>start working on it again days ago>see thishttps://www.fimfiction.net/group/216529/dezmos-nsfw-contestAlright. I have a serious shot at winning something, maybe, and decent motivation to finish it this month. I barely noticed this contest, so I'll help others learn of it.
>>38922877Retard.
>the Rarafag is actually delusional enough to think he can win that
>>38923184I feel genuinely tempted to participate.
>>38923342Would you care to read the draft of what I'll be submitting? I first released it at the beginning of the month. I'll warn you, it's much more fetishistic than my usual work.>>38923348I'm glad to help.
>>38922536That sounds interesting.>never written anything beforeMy advice would be to read the Ezn's guide first, it's an excellent resource. Then make a plot outline that covers all of the important events in your fic and stick to it. Some authors don't do it (and if you don't want to then of course you shouldn't do it either) but it's a good way to stop yourself from committing the writers' equivalent of feature creep, especially when starting out.
>>38923419Anthro impreg is kino so sure, shoot me a link.
>>38923442Anthro Chrysalis mpreg is kino.
>>38923442Alright: https://u.smutty.horse/milxxjrtbce.pdfIt's a hyper pregnancy story, actually. It was inspired by an anthro image to which I can't link here, but it's not extremely important. Everything but the first paragraph on the sixth page is completely new, as are the four on the last.
>>38923493>It was inspired by an anthro image to which I can't link here,Tell me the artist name and where to look.
>>38923493>can't linknewfag
>>38923513No I want to give him the benefit of the doubt, maybe he means it's paywalled.
>>38923527>>38923513>>38923510>>38923493I bet it was https://derpicdn.net/img/view/2022/2/24/2813613.png
>>38923530How did you know?
>>38923530>Diabeetus style legs rather than slender and graceful>Pregnancy
>>38923534>See the fic is about anthro hyperpreg Octi>See Vinyl is there and hyperpreg too>search for "hyper pregnancy, Octavia">less than two pages of results>see anthro one that also has Vinyl in it>bingo
>>38921986I can't wait to read the rewrite.
>>38923536Shut it, metrosexual furry reject. I've seen the stuff you draw.
>>38923544Thick legs like that don't work on pony.Very simple.
>>38922387Of all the defences for RGRE I've seenThis is the one that made me laugh "what the fuck" out loud
>>38923510The artist is Funble.>>38923513I just didn't care enough in the moment.>>38923530>>38923534No. That image didn't exist in 2019. It was this, notice the title: https://pregchan.com/.media/1527a59adc8a3f49580e4c22a2f9dacc9f319a251ecb2627a2ea5eb909cf3986.pngIt seems no one ever bothered uploading it to a booru. In case anyone cares, here's the thread containing the link: https://pregchan.com/f/res/100.html>>38923542I may not bother rewriting too much actually. I'm lazy.Now, what did you think of the story itself?
>review https://www.fimfiction.net/story/294455/twilight-accidentally-mails-celestia-porn'Twilight Accidentally Mails Celestia Porn' is a six thousand-word anthro, comedy oneshot. The synopsis should be fairly obvious.Based on the M rating, the Anthro tag, and the Sex tag, I was expecting quite a different story, but if anything this is a good example that there is a big difference between it and the Porn tag. While the fic presents some pretty shameless implications and plenty of 'flavorful' descriptions, there is - strictly speaking - no porn in this plot. However, what this story (intentionally) lacks in the wank department, it makes up for with a hilarious little glimpse into Bookhorse's slow inner death of shame. Twilight flailing around like a fish cast ashore has not been so entertaining since 'Lesson Zero' as she plans up more and more convoluted plans to placate Celestia and by the end Luna as well. Despite the obviously not show-like topic, she feels surprisingly faithful to her canon behavior and though the story doesn't shy away from being deeply melodramatic, there is nothing I would really call out of character.I also have to mention Spike. To my biggest shock, he is actually done justice here. It may have taken an anthro, almost-porn fic to do it, but everyone's favorite dragon in this story acts out the "one sane person" role he sometimes took in the show in a great way. He is sardonic and clearly fed up with Twilight's shit, yet doesn't act in a mean way for a moment. What I also liked is that though he technically causes the conflict in this story, it isn't handled as "haha retarded dragon messed it up again," but rather as an honest accident that still manages to be funny due to situational comedy.Speaking of, the humor in this fic is not really the knee-slapper type, but I'd be lying if I said I didn't audibly chuckle at some of the jokes. Most of the comedy comes from horribly awkward situations and Twilight's abject horror, which is something I can personally appreciate. It's earnestly and unapologetically over-the-top, but because the story never even implied it wants to be taken seriously, it all works out nicely.The only real negative aspect I can bring up is the fact that there is nothing in this story that really warrants it to be anthro. This is a bit of a dangling criticism to make, because the reason could easily just be "because the author wanted it so" or "because it makes talking about Celestia's tits possible/easier" but IMO the story would have worked just as well, if not better with ponies.Overall: 7/10 While this fic didn't have quite the same impact as the other I've read from the author - probably intentionally, considering this is a silly comedy fic, while that one was far more serious romance (and porn) one, I still thoroughly enjoyed my time with the story and, if the lack of (fore)hooves and lewding Sunhorse doesn't disturb you too much, I can easily recommend it.
>>38923083>>Twinkling Lance>A bit awkward.It can work. I mean, if Sword Glitter works, that name can work too.t. the author
>>38923579Please learn to follow a reply chain.
>>38923580Why did you read this?
>>38923580I can confirm he did chuckle audibly.
>>38923579>I may not bother rewriting too much actually. I'm lazy.Anon...>>38923586Because I was asked to. Months ago, in fact, I'm just horrible at keeping schedule.
>>38923579>>pic>everyone has unguligrade legs>even the table
>>38923580>reading M rated anthroSeeing this, one does slowly lose the faith in you
>>38923598Were you not here the last time he read anthro clop?The day of him reading FiMC draws ever closer.
>>38923598Anon, I read a variety of stuff and out of the slowly 200 reviews I've made, only two were anthro.Please don't lose faith in me just yet.
>>38923586That drawing is adorbs
>>38923616>AiE
>>38923595Everything I write is mostly my first draft with only minor corrections and the like. The only reason I considered rewriting most of it is how long it has been; I thought my style had changed so thoroughly that I should, but now I'm uncertain I should bother, and I'm also lazy.That story of mine you reviewed and which you praised a little, Hot Dam, was my first draft, and I only added some paragraphs when editing it and correcting flaws before release.
>>38923644So what? Celestia is pretty cute. Are you going to shit your panties over that?
>>38923644Monkey ladder banana water.You monkey.
>>38923648The point is that the comment you've been replying to has been aimed at a completely different fic, (>>38921462 to be precise.)However, since we're here, I don't think there is an issue with releasing "first drafts" like that, but I also wouldn't really call something a first draft if you've went back and added paragraphs and corrected mistakes. I guess it depends on your perspective.
>>38923651>>38923652You need to be purged. YAGTH. AiE needs to be nipped in the bud. We mustn't allow it to spread into fics. It needs to be killed here and now. AiE is a cancer and you need to be cleansed.
>>38923674I wonder how much of this is unironic.
>>38923586Fics for this feel (human romance with Celestia)?
>>38923674lol, lmao even>>38923679Hey whoa plagiarism! Not cool! Would it matter if it was?
>>38923683Speaking of plagiarism, did Fo:E plagiarize Fallout's intros?
>>38923672>The point is that the comment you've been replying to has been aimed at a completely different ficOh, damn. Well, aren't I silly?>I also wouldn't really call something a first draft if you've went back and added paragraphs and corrected mistakes.It's easier to delete paragraphs in the mind than on the page. It's really easy to go back and scan through for minor mistakes, so I wouldn't really consider that making it a second draft. I'm always adding paragraphs until a story is published, so the haphazard ordering doesn't make a difference to me. It's a matter of perspective, sure.
>>38923686Don't ask me, I don't read garbage.
>>38923694
>>38923701>AiE
>>38923702
>>38923704Oh hey I have a few of those too but animu edition.
>>38923707No one cares.
>>38923707Have a Trixie version
>>38923711>AiE continues forever>>38923713Hey thanks, always happy to expand my collection.
>>38923715My pleasure, J>>38923711>picrel
>>38923603I was, that's why I am losing faith. One can be an exception, but two is a starting trend.>>38923615>only two>onlyYou'll have to convince me harder than that, Filly.
>>38923727Piss off already
>>38923727If it helps, both times I asked him to.
>>38923727A little premature anon, but you're probably used to that eh? I kid, I kid. Once is happenstance, twice is coincidence, thrice is enemy action. Third time is when it's a problem.
>>38923727Look, my motivation in this thread is to provide hopefully useful feedback, both to readers and to writers. I'm not exactly a great writer, so this is the best way I can contribute. This hasn't changed since I joined and I like it this way. It's true that I was a lot more picky when I first started posting, but that was largely because I'd rather be known as "that rando guy who tries to be helpful" than "another coomer" and this hasn't changed either.However, I am a pretty curious person and I am interested in almost all forms of horse literature, even those that might not personally appeal to me. This is why I read that AB rape story, why I read Preganon's story, why I gave a short AiE story a shot, etc. and this is why I'm not against reviewing anthro either, even though I am mostly interested in T-rated, adventure/drama, pony-focused fics.As much as it makes me happy when people engage with my reviews, just feel free to drop them if the subject irritates you. I understand that handling a broad range of things means you can't please everyone. Due to that I try to be very transparent about what sort of story I'm reviewing in the first two sentences by mentioning any exceptional tags (i.e. anthro) and by giving a short synopsis.I'm not sure what else I can say to convince you... nor exactly what I'm supposed to convince you about.
>>38923778Blink three times if you're currently held captive and being forced to review anthro clop against your will.
>>38923778Not him but I just see no reason to ever read anthro. It's the lowest of the low. It's almost fundamentally bad as a concept.
>>38923785I think you accidentally misspelled anon.
>>38923788You aren't funny, anon.
>>38923674You know what's funny, I do share your sentiment. I dislike the bastardization of Anon in AiE and how is stereotyped into qualities, shaping him into a caricature of le horny quippy bald green man. >>38923693Hey, Fallout isn't THAT bad.
>>38923785Well, I don't see much reason for it either, except being a porn-crutch. As I mentioned in the review, it mostly felt like the only reason why the author went for it is to make a bunch of lewd comments about characters' tits and thighs. Considering EqG is the only practical alternative ("proper" humanizations don't really seem to be a thing, though I might just be very ignorant,) I think this is still the lesser bad.I do wonder if any anthro story exists that isn't porn and the anthroness has a proper "purpose." I can't even really imagine such a thing, but you know, love to be proven wrong and all that.>>38923796>/fimfic/. /fimfic/ never changes.
>>38923803>I can't even really imagine such a thing, but you know, love to be proven wrong and all that.I hate that I have to do this, but-HiE story where Twilight is inspired by the human form and wants to take it on herself, yet obviously knows that giving up magic wouldn't be worth it, so tries to invent some fusion of human and pony that will be the best possible combination. She runs to the human to show him what she's accomplished, proclaiming to have created the ultimate lifeform, but is surprised and dismayed at his abject horror and disgust, and is also slightly hurt by him calling her an abomination.Or a sort of reverse Pandemic story where humans invade Equestria and want to make use of its population but don't want to bother with the various forms of all the different species, so they unleash a bioweapon that turns them all into humanoids. I think this one is far weaker than the first though.Doubt that a good anthro story actually exists though.
>>38923820>would turn down titty Twily gfngmi
>>38923820>Or a sort of reverse Pandemic story where humans invade Equestria and want to make use of its population but don't want to bother with the various forms of all the different species, so they unleash a bioweapon that turns them all into humanoids. I think this one is far weaker than the first though.Sounds pretty interesting. I would read it.
>>38923083>Where is your "incomplete/deadfic" line?About a year. Of course it's possible it will come back, but if i see a fic hasn't updated in a year, I don't want to read it.
>>38923579>It was this, notice the title: https://pregchan.com/.media/1527a59adc8a3f49580e4c22a2f9dacc9f319a251ecb2627a2ea5eb909cf3986.png>there are "people" that get off to this
>>38923443>Anthro Chrysalis mpreg is kino.Is your /mlp/ phrase of the week
>>38924081Hello, I am people.
>>38923803>I do wonder if any anthro story exists that isn't porn and the anthroness has a proper "purpose."There's that one western, which is anthro so the characters can handle guns like a humanhttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/416114/bulletproof-heartNever read it myself, but there used to be an anon ITT who swore up and down this is the one good anthro fic on the site
>>38923674There is absolutely nothing with wish fulfilment.
>>38923778>As much as it makes me happy when people engage with my reviews, just feel free to drop them if the subject irritates you
>>38923803>Considering EqG is the only practical alternative ("proper" humanizations don't really seem to be a thing, though I might just be very ignorant,) I think this is still the lesser bad.Pony >>>>>>>>>> EqG >>>>>>>>> humanised > anthro
>>38924195I don't understand what makes EqG that much better than humanised, what's your reasoning anon?
>>38924232Simple: it's canon.
>>38924232The ass was fat.
>>38924091Can we make an advent calendar outta these phrases? Maybe put some German or Swiss chocolate in there too?
I never got the whole anthro argument. All ponies are anthro by the baseline definition.
>>38924307>Sundown
>>38924342Context. Anthro in the context it is used online refers specifically to furry characters. People here know that ponies are anthropomorphic by definition, but referring to them as such invites self-defined fans of anthro content, who are typically not welcome here.
>>38924342in the context of a non-human sapient(which by definition, and perhaps only because we do not currently know of any, IS in fact anthropomorphism) anthro tends to mean bipedal with all major traits humans have ([at least]2 legs and 2 arms, head on top). So yes, by existing and being fully sapient, a bunch of the creatures are already anthropomorphic. So when they are FURTHER described as anthro it is assumed that their physical characteristics are then more aligned to human-like traits. Such as becoming bipedal with probably 4 limbs.
>>38923803"Proper" humanizations were a thing a long time ago but eqg mostly killed them off. Apparently they're still popular in the Asian branch of the pony fandom. I don't think I've heard of a fic with humanized non-anthro, non-eqg characters.Good riddance, I'd say.Although they're a hundred times less bad than eqg/anthro but they're still objectively inferior to pony in all aspects.
>>38924159It's not just "the one good anthro fic" it's objectively one of the best written stories on the site. Seriously, the author's writing level is simply above most other fanfic authors. And Bulletproof Heart is a great story.
>>38920260>>its a HiE story where Earth and Equestria are in contactYou are literally getting what you fucking deserve, that shit is 1000 times gayer than RGRE ever could be
>>38924380>I don't think I've heard of a fic with humanized non-anthro, non-eqg characters.Obedience is Magic
>>38924195More likePony>>>>>>>>>humanised>>>>>>>>EqG>>>>>>>anthro (honestly though, it shouldn't even be allowed)And no filly, it's still not cool. I get it that you want to indulge in a wide variety of content, but this way you cannot be >ourguy. Anthro is where the line should be drawn
>>38924491Why anthro behind eqg? I've always been confused by this. The only thing I see eqg has going for it MAYBE is >canon. But Anthro is far closer to pony than eqg is and that's why I prefer it. For me it'sPony>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>anthro>humanised>>>>eqgwith the justification being anthro is closest to pony, and then at that point just abandon pony and be a human story with the pony characters. And then there's gross horribly proportioned color people who's entire world is on or around varies high-school campuses
>>38923778Anthro is different. /mlp/ isn't a hivemind, anons are allowed to love & tolerate opinions that go against the "ideal" nor/mlp/erson canon but that said there are a few exceptions and b&thro is one of them.
>>38924491More like anthro>EqG>humanised>pony
>>38924512Not him but for me it's just the connection to furfags. For as bad as eqg looks and how badly it affected the """brony fandom""", at least it's clearly not an on-ramp to furfaggotry. Fuck all non-pony though, I don't care which is closer to pony, they're all shit.
>>38923681No.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/400082/guilty-pleasure
>>38924533>connection to furfags.This. There's a reason why we have a no anthro rule here.
>>38924533>>38924559>I can't like thing because ______Pretty bad take but I understand>Fuck all non-pony though, I don't care which is closer to pony, they're all shit.This is the best take though. If someone's greaterthan list doesn't have multiple arrows between pony and whatever is the first loser then it's a bad list
>>38924570Goats > pony
>>38924559>>38924533>>38924515/147/We will win
>>38924570The derg thread disagrees.
I was thinking about writing a 'Keepers of Discord' style fic, but about Cozy Glow instead. Discord is a perennial god of Chaos, so it's easy to believe that he'd effortlessly maintain his sanity after centuries trapped in stone, but Cozy is just some random, smug mortal filly. After a few days of vengeful introspection, I'd see her reduced to a sobbing, mind-broken, penitent retard after just a few weeks of enduring nonstop total sensory deprivation. That'll teach her.
>>38924625That sounds kinda hot
So no one has any thoughts to share regarding my draft story?>>38924380>I don't think I've heard of a fic with humanized non-anthro, non-eqg characters.>>38923803>Considering EqG is the only practical alternative ("proper" humanizations don't really seem to be a thing, though I might just be very ignorant,) I think this is still the lesser bad.Here's a proper humanization: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/520221/eight-inside-enquire-withinOn this note, I relied upon Pinkie Pie having pink skin, a natural skin colour, so that those who insist on reading it as closer to EqG can, but should I change the cover art to be a more realistic colour? Is her skin there still too pink?>I do wonder if any anthro story exists that isn't porn and the anthroness has a proper "purpose."I'm only writing mine because I can't describe what I describe otherwise, but it's porn, so I suppose it's no counter-example.I certainly agree with overwhelmingly writing pony, but it's fun to do something different once, every few years. I only do it when suitably inspired and in a way where the story and my descriptions take proper advantage of it.
>haven't been in a reading mood all weekDo I really wanna read 11 chapters for the book club? hmmmm
>>38925014The chapters are really short, you could easily do it in one sitting.And not to spoil the fic but I did find it pretty charming.
>>38925020>psychology common groundrolled my eyes, but I guess that really is how what little college I experienced works
>>38925014Yes.
>>38925082Yeah yeah, I'm going calm down, I'm on ch4 and about to make some lunch.
We should've done ch1-10, I feel like that was the natural break. But I suppose this is fine too
>>38910968>On Sunday we'll discuss what we've read.>mfw I speedran the entire 11 chapters in one day because for some reason I thought it was saturday
>>38924390Fucking fine, I'll put it on my RIL.>>38924512Anthro fucking sucks. If I want something "normal", I'll go with humanised or EqG (fucking fight me, I've grown used to it and even find some of the scenes hot). If I want something else (which is most of the time), I go with pony.At no point do I ever feel like fapping to some abomination sitting inbetween. It hits none of the appeal of either of those things. I used to find some of it attractive when I was younger, but now... meh.>>38924533Also this, kinda. Anthro is for weak faggots tightly clutching their pussies in defense at the sight of a pony.
>>38924597What did he mean by this?
>>38924994>So no one has any thoughts to share regarding my draft story?I don't think anybody here wants to read an impreg anthro story. At least I hope not.>I'm only writing mine because I can't describe what I describe otherwiseLearn to write, bitchass.>>38925297It's not like we know what's going to happen in these stories, it's just divided by length. We've gotten pretty lucky with the breaks so far, but this was bound to happen.
>EqGIt's aon on-ramp to weebfaggotry. If the given artist writes or draws anthro, he'll end up doing furries (100% guarantee if he has a -sona and changes it to a deer or any kind of hybrid including bat ponies seriously I have seen ZERO bat ponysona owners who hadn't dropped the "pony" part and went full furshit). If the given artist writes or draws EqG, he'll end up doing anime humans.
>>38925592Much preferable to furfaggotry, tbqh.
>>38925544>I don't think anybody here wants to read an impreg anthro story. At least I hope not.It's hyper pregnancy, not impregnation; I thought at least one person was interested and would look, but that's fair enough.>Learn to write, bitchass.It's a valid sentence. Now, if that weren't the complaint, do I need to go into detail about the differences between quadrupedal and bipedal pregnancies? I wrote the story specifically to explore the latter in ways my human story hadn't. If I could've written it as a true pony story, I would've done so. I can't.>>38925592I understand, but I do plenty of other writing, so I'm not compelled to write about other things with this name. I don't want to try to branch out from this name. I'd make a new identity in that case, but won't. I lost an artist acquaintance that way; now he's drawing hyper pregnant bunny girls, instead of ponies, as if those weren't a dime a dozen ten years ago.The only reason I'd write about something distinctly non-pony with this name is if I were doing a trade with an artist in exchange for pregnant pony artwork, but all of my trades so far have been writing about ponies, and canon characters at that.
>>38925592I never became weeb but that's still much better than furshit. Greatly inferior to ponies but from what I've seen a similar kind of autism is driving the two fandoms. Also I don't think what you're saying is necessarily true. Humanized maybe, but eqg doesn't look anything like anime. It's closer to Monster High or even (yes) Barbie. Granted, the only "eqg artist" I follow is Mkog.t. probably would've become a weeb if not for ponies
>>38925635>>38925604>Much preferable to furfaggotry>but that's still much better than furshitYou're mistaken. They're exactly same inasmuch as both do not belong in PONY spaces, both keep trying to weasel their way in, and artists who do either end up dropping ponies.
>>38924535Thanks, tunafag. I can always rely on you to do nothing of value.
>>38925677
>>38925592God you're right.
>>38925936I knew he wasn't going to do pony forever, but I enjoyed his content before he went vtuber.A real shame.
I have just realized why exactly Lacunae is present on PH's roster. She's the Xenith turned to 12. A different-species character who is telepathically different from the rest... just that instead of being immune to the Goddess, she's part of her.
>>38923530Amazing. You could have said this was vore or fattening and I would have 100% believed it.>Vinyl's nipples and areola are blueIs using the mane color a thing in anthro art or is just some additional bizarre trait of the image?>>38923580>M rating, the Anthro tag, and the Sex tag>I can easily recommend itFillybros...>>38923803>love to be proven wrong and all thatYou won't be. Anthro exists because authors can't or won't be imaginative enough to use full pony. Porn's the common example of relying on an anatomy crutch, but it happened with that western, too. Rather than invent some great worldbuiding and gun design (or even go in a totally different direction than guns) to give things extra depth, he just turned them into bipeds so they could use revolvers.>>38924380>I don't think I've heard of a fic with humanized non-anthro, non-eqg charactersThat was one of the defaults for PiE back in the day, which made them even more wish fufillmenty than MLD when it was a naked human Twilight teleporting into your garage without a cultural nudity taboo.
>>38926543>That was one of the defaults for PiE back in the day, which made them even more wish fufillmenty than MLD when it was a naked human Twilight teleporting into your garage without a cultural nudity taboo.The Twilight character in SPNATI matches that, it's pretty good. Shame they use the EQG models though.I can't help but chuckle in self-aware, autistic exasperation whenever I see or am in a conversation about the distinctions of horsefucking. Any decent anon can explain the differences between furry, bestiality, brony, horsefucking, Doug Funny...fucking I guess, anthro, and humanized. For most people in the fandom, and indeed every single person outside of it, there's no distinction, and trying to articulate why fucking a pony with correct anatomy isn't the same as fucking a HVOP pony or an actual horse just comes across as insane.
>>38926543>You won't be. Anthro exists because authors can't or won't be imaginative enough to use full pony.Or because they're autists demanding everything be "realistic" or incapable of grasping the deeper implications of Aragorn's pants.Namely, that not everything has to be explained or shown in detail.If you think about it, anything with non-unicorn ponies and without magic hooves is nonsense even if you consider dexterity of horse lips as it's still nowhere near as good at tool-use as opposable thumbs - but YOUR JOB AS AN AUTHOR IS GET AUDIENCE ENGAGED AND DISTRACTED ENOUGH THAT THEY WILL NOT THINK ABOUT IT. If you have to rely on a pre-existing knowledge of "this works" instead of your readers/viewers believing it can be, you have failed as an author.The magic is not and never has been in the known. It has always resided in the unknown and the unknowable. The gaps, the hidden places, the mysteries. By trying to omit them or explain all of them away, as retards are wont to do, you rob your story of the spark of life, its soul, rendering it a cold, rational husk.
>>38926652It's hard to overstate just how easily this can be taken to a worthless extreme used to justify blatantly retarded decisions and massive amounts of handwaving.But yes, you are correct.
>>38926686If you have to justify blatantly retarded decisions and so much handwaving it becomes noticeable, you're not succeeding at having the audience engaged and distracted, are you. For the gaps to be alluring, for them to have magic requires the non-gaps to have substance. If it's all the gaps, you're just asking the viewers to pretend. And they don't need you, or your story, to play that particular game.
This is one of the funniest comments sections that I've seen in a while. Let me set the scene: In chapter 36, Malfoy and Hermionie find Voldemort drinking the unicorn's blood. They kick his ass and he's hospitalised. In chapter 38, he's nearly got The Stone. This happens without any explanation of how he's escaped capture or any attention drawn to it being surprising that he's suddenly out and about. This also implies that he's somehow defeated several Equestrian Secret Service staff despite getting his ass kicked by two Papa Tango'd Hogwarts students.Even the author's fans aren't putting up with this blatant bullshit. The author's excuses are a laugh.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/437266/38/the-gate/chapter-38
>>38925615>If I could've written it as a true pony story, I would've done so. I can't.I suppose that's fair enough. Does this stuff actually have a sizeable enough audience?
You know, with the amount of "horde"s in FoE, Hand of Doom can be excused in its lack of proofreading.
>>38927278What?
>>38925677Okay schizo.>artists who do either end up dropping poniesYou're telling me people who prefer humans and anthro to ponies, end up preferring humans and anthro to ponies????
>>38927278Que?
>>38927278Fallout Equestria has hordes?
>>38927081Gotta love authors "expanding" on the lore outside of their works in response to fans finding plotholes.
>>38927298Anon probably means the various roaming gangs that move through territory and set up faction conflicts in the different books.
>>38924994>he actually came here for help improving his writingOoooh nonono ahahahaha. Homeboy you'd be better off asking your toilet for tips after a diarrhea dump
>>38927315He's very obviously talking about FoE commonly misspelling hoard as horde.
>>38927338But are we talking about FoE?
>>38927334to be fair a toilet might know a thing or two about diarrhea
>>38927081Pretty close to dropping this shit. It makes for easy reading since the chapters barely connect and are rarely beyond 3,000 words, but this is some shit writing.
>>38927422>Pretty close to dropping this shit.Please do. You'd be doing us all a favor.
>>38927426But anon, this shit tastes delightful!
>>38927432>British magicNONONONO DAVID BLAINE
>>38927432Why the fuck are they calling it papa tango when pony transform is the same number of syllables? That's stupid.
>>38927602They've got call signs for fucking everything. Voldemort is "Victor Victor".
>>38927609That's really, really stupid. It's so stupid it hurts. It's some fat slob larping about using the phonetic alphabet because the army turned him away with prejudice, right? No one who has actually had to use it just inserts it into everything.
>>38927621I used to work in a call centre. I'm amazed that it doesn't unironically trigger me. Those places are soul destroyers.
Alright! I think Golly left. It’s safe. Time for the Book Club! /FSBC/Maybe because it’s not as plot heavy, but I don’t have as many opinions on this one as the others. I suppose it’s some fine romance, but it doesn’t stir anything in my mind.Ponies with cell phones? What?! But they don’t have cars… would Octavia really get somewhere faster in a cart being pulled by another pony? And how did this turn of events come to be? Do Equestrians lean much more heavily on trains than us, realizing the environmental benefits? Perhaps we shall see.I am consistently surprised by Octavia never going full Joker after Exit Through Canterlot. I keep expecting her to sperg out yet it never comes! Wow. Octavia being the mature one. Who’d have thunk it.But speaking of sperging out, Lyra seems casted as the villain here. Though really her teasing never goes beyond ‘OMG! YOU TWO ARE LIKE KISSING!’ what is she, 8? Why are the others even unnerved by this? I guess because they’re still ‘totally straight’?And already Lyra’s in an abusive relationship with Bonbon.Still not sure why either of them were taking psychology in the first place. Maybe they’ll let us know some day.>Important!Anyway, we’re going to try and have it so only people posting about the story get to vote. Post your thought about University Days so far and put your vote at the end. We’ll see how that goes. If we can’t manage, it’s back to strawpoll.Options include: Bug on a Stick, Chasing Winter, The Best Night Ever, Celestia XVII, FiM Extended CutALSO. Vote on whether or not you want to limit the selection to the starter kit for now.My votes will be: Bug on a Stick and no.
>>38927633You forgot about Northern Stars.
Filly has been awfully quiet as of late, anyone else notice that?
>>38927654Oh, right. We can add Northern Stars. To:>>38927633If anyone wants to vote for that one.Sorry.
>>38927633I'm a bit out of my depth when it comes to SoL shipfics but I like it so far. The story is sweet, both of the main characters are very likeable and I don't mind the relative lack of conflict compared to other genres. There's that plot with Octy's mother who might eventually intervene leading to a 'dramatic' ending but so far the fic has been an SoL story through and through. Maybe something comes out of Vinyl fighting with Lyra but I doubt it, those encounters didn't seem to be setting up anything.What I didn't like the most initially was the pacing in the early chapters. Vinyl and Octavia go from being complete strangers who fight in class to "friends forever" over the course of two weeks (and 7k words). Later the pacing slows down to a much more reasonable state, mainly due to what I feel is a very generous use of timeskips.Another thing that I must criticize is the setting. Not so much Manehattan University but the fact that it's barely a ponyfic. This isn't Manehattan, it isn't McCarthy's revised Manehattan either, it's simply a modern US city with ponies acting accordingly. Aside from keeping FiM's Manehattan carts and that one sidenote about unicorns using smaller mobile phones (!) than the non-magic ponies, I don't recall anything that couldn't have been ported 1:1 to a story about {current_year}-10 humans. I know that some disagree with these types of arguments but I think that if you're writing a PONY fanfic, it should have a stronger connection to Friendship is Magic than just the names of the characters.Voting for the Bug and yes.>>38927633>But they don’t have cars… would Octavia really get somewhere faster in a cart being pulled by another pony?This is the one element of the worldbuilding that I liked. In canon ponies do use carts to get to places faster, see pic rel.>Lyra seems casted as the villain here.Eh, I wouldn't go so far. She's being a bitch but if there's going to be a villain in the story, it will be Octy's mom.
>>38927625Sweet Christ, the number of times I had to spell out "ipconfig release/renew" for clueless retards. Even worse than that was when they tried to use it back with zero experience or prep, without understanding why it's a thing in the first place. And it was always so painfully slow. When I see it being misused in media, especially for non-radio communication, it flashes me back to all of that.>air>bold>clear>dear>ear>fear>gear>hear>imac>jeer>keen>leer>mean>near>old>preen>queen>rear>sear>tear>until>veer>where>xylophone>year>zen>what do you mean I wasn't clear, I used the code words like you did!
>>38927669>zilofon>zen>>38927657His hands, mouth, and everything else is busy.
>>38927666>This is the one element of the worldbuilding that I liked. In canon ponies do use carts to get to places faster, see pic rel.I suppose my real problem with it is that it doesn't mesh well with the cell phones (which already seperate this from Canon).Like, a civilization with advanced computers should probably have some kind of sophistitcated transportation system. I would certainly prefer, as well, for the author to be a bit creative rather than leaning on cars, of course. Say, in a world where there's tons of teleportation and portals it doesn't make sense for anypony to buy a car.But I do thin it begs an explination.And yeah, I do agree that it's better for the pony society to be at least somewhat alien to our. It always makes it more interesting if there are at least some cultural differences.
>>38927669I had to do %AppData% a lot.>ipconfig release/renewNever actually fixed anything for me.
>>38927694I suppose you're right, if the story already uses the -- in my opinion -- terrible approach of "it's just a modern world with tiny changes" approach, there's no reason to keep the quirky non-tech elements from the show.But the reason why I'm willing to overlook it here is that it doesn't actually matter too much. Normally I'd already be up in arms at the first mentions of a smartphone or a computer but it's extremely unimportant for the story that University Days tries to tell. The fic has a laser focus on Octavia and Vinyl's characters and it's their interactions that drive it. Everything else is in the background.It does kinda suck that, for example, not a single pegasus so far flew anywhere or that the unicorn spells have had zero relevancy to the plot (again, with the tiny exception of Vinyl thinking that she should some day learn the hangover curing spell). If an adventure fic did that, I'd drop it in an instant but here it's not nearly as annoying.
>>38927633One thing that really stood out to me after reading this again after so many years is how fast paced it felt. Compared to my memories, at least. Not in a rushed way, either. It all happens quick but it progresses at a nice rhythm.It's true it kinda slows down once Octavia and Vinyl become closer, like >>38927666 said, but overall I still felt it was quite brisk. Maybe it's just me.Character-wise, I like the main two girls. Everyone else feels good enough. They're not just window dressing, but they never really stand out beyond doing what they have to do in their scenes. If memory serves right, Lyra and BonBon get more characterization later on, but so far I'd call everyone else serviceable.>Ponies with cell phones? What?!It predicted G5.Also.Voting for Chasing Winter and no.
Are there any canonical sources or references to chaos magic? Also, what are some things that I can't do with Discord, whether literally with his character or just a turn-off for readers?
>>38927786Honestly? If Discord isn't evil or the focus of the story it's usually best just to not mention him at all.
>>38927823Counterpoint: Made in HeavenThat story would be hollow without the one scene he's in, and he's more or less the only character you could have Twilight bounce off of in her situation.
>>38927823I don't want to shill my fic, but Discord wants to protect Ponyville in Twilight and Co's absence while Starlight fucks shit up in the background.>>38927829Most of the Discord stuff in the story revolves around Twilight and her distrusting opinion of him. While Discord is doing/saying things that get under her skin but is still well-meaning despite his rather antagonistic posturing.
>>38927823I had Discord pop in for one scene in my story just to explain that he wasn't going to solve the plot for everyone else. And make Twilight feel a bit better.
>>38927939Yeah. That seems to be his main role in adventure fics.
>>38927602>Why the fuck are they calling it papa tangoIn HP4, they use a code name for the spell because the fact that the Equestrians are ponies is a state secret throughout the entire fic so far. But it sounds like HP1 doesn't have such an excuse.
>>38927633This story started a bit weird for me. For one thing I expected them to not be friends by chapter 2 and bffs by chapter 3. It left me wondering what else could possible happen in the other 20 chapters, but this isn't exactly a problem in a SoL, I just had the impression the bulk of the story was this relationship developing but it appears to almost all be about the romance since they were fast friends. >"Alright ladies."Almost the first thing the psych teacher (tutor?) says. Wtf are ladies? Gross. Also I certainly was not in the habit of calling all of my professors tutors or calling classes tutorial. I thought that was a single period in high school, but maybe it's different in Equestria. >teacher assigns them on a date on the first day of class,Wtf, That's just absurd.>"Go on! Don’t be such a… you!”Vinyl says Tavi is acting like herself, with about 30 minutes maximum interaction time with her (and that's being generous) which does not seem like a natural thing to do. Stood out to me as weird, but they're also on a school assigned date so maybe it isn't.>next class the teacher holds a vote on what new positions Vinyl and Octavia are going to try over the weekendfucking kekSo Lyra. I don't understand this subplot. I thought Lyra was cheating with carrot when vinyl and her have some sick bants in the empty classroom, since she shows up with a black eye. But then it turns out carrot is just her friend? So Bon bon just beats the shit out of her for no reason? >It's a 'You aren't allowed to like mares story'>Even moreso it's a 'vinyl helps octy be in lesbian against her parents orders'I feel like I've read this before. I also fully admit I cannot relate to this extent of the overbearing parent trope.> tutor-cum-councillorThis is an easy read so far though. Which I suppose means the SoL is working. And I'm thankful for, considering I couldn't make myself keep going on contraptionology.
>>38927959Don't forget to vote.
>>38927633>Lyra seems casted as the villain here.>And already Lyra’s in an abusive relationship with Bonbon.Yeah seemed weird. I specifically thought Lyra was cheating on Bon Bon but then in ch10 or 11 it's revealed she's just friends with carrot and hangs out with her, which mean Bon Bon just likes giving her black eyes I guess? Also the real villain has now become Tavis mom, but I didn't mind the short lived school bully/rival dynamic with Lyra. Although I think that subplot finished when Octavia showed her the magic of friendship.>Still not sure why either of them were taking psychology in the first place.It's college, that's just what you do. That or Sociology.ALSO I FORGOT TO VOTEI vote Bug on a Stick and no as well.>>38927666>The story is sweet, both of the main characters are very likeableI completely agree, and I'm so glad for it. I have to drop SoL if a main character isn't likable because that isn't comfy at all. Also I think the 'evil mom' is a perfectly proportionate villain for a SoL>What I didn't like the most initially was the pacing in the early chaptersAgreed as well, Chapter 1 and maybe even 2 seemed like a prologue almost in that they already became such good friends.>>38927716>It does kinda suck that, for example, not a single pegasus so far flew anywhereIt is a little weird that the opening description of the University was the massive floating sections, and thhen they're never mentioned again. There's even a point where it mentions the sun beating down on them, would that really happen when like 50% of the campus is cloud buildings? Just put them over the rest of campus on a hot day. All in all though, I don't have a problem with lack of PONY stuff, I mean they're living day to day lives. They've eaten some salad already and done hoofbumps/shakes and I'm not sure how else we can show much more in the day to day.>>38927969Thanks, I remembered when I started looking at others' thoughts.
>>38927939>>38927945>Barges in>Says he's not gonna help>Refuses to elaborate>Leaves
Speaking of Discord in fics, in Behemoth he's still fucking off in the library dimension I'm pretty sure.
>Get writer's block>Beat dick>Feel better>Look back at fic>Writers block
>>38928039The secret is to stop midway through
>>38928082Writing or masturbating?
>>38928089Edge in all things.
Hate to be requestposting, but there's a Fimfic story that I remember reading that I now can't find for the life of me. It was about a woman missing an arm and an eye getting isekai'd into Equestria, and being turned into a filly despite being 30-something because ponies have a lifespan of around 200. It was mostly slice-of-life, with the filly now working on creating prosthetics using powdered gems as a medium for magic so the prosthetics had actual feedback. It later on went in a completely different direction, and went into the comic book mirror universe with reversed villain roles (good Chrysalis, evil Celestia, etc.). It's supposedly fairly well known, but my google-fu is failing me something hard on this one. Does anyone have the title or the author?
>>38928151My Life as a Bipedal Quadruped
>>38928197Fucking thank you. Not being able to find it felt like having something stuck between your teeth and not being able to get it out.
>>38928207 Glad I could help
>>38928216Man. I wish I could have helped. Been useful for once in my life. Feels bad.
>>38928222Is that art by CBT?
>>38928233certainly looks like it
>>38928245>furshit>>38928233Cock&Ball Twilight is easy to identify - all his ponies look like sweaty piglets.
>>38927958They're not open about it in HP1, but I don't recall it being a secret. They don't hesitate to tell Hagrid that Spike's a dragon.
>>38910968So this Book Club thing is just people voting on fics for the thread to read? Sounds cool. I'm far behind on a bunch of fics though so I can't really participate. Still, cool idea for promoting thread participation!
>>38928322It's not too much reading to be fair, this story is just over 30k words per week. Also it seems like there's just a handful of people participating.
>>38928322Yeah, it's only like 30-40k words per week with a discussion on Sunday. Neat idea, I wish more anons participated in it.
>>38927274>Does this stuff actually have a sizeable enough audience?I suppose. My relationship with my audience is basically showing them the new thing I wrote, and some of them liked the draft well enough. On Fimfiction, my earliest stories are mature and, despite not being my best works, you wouldn't be able to tell based on the votes. Since this story will contain sex and everything else, it will also probably end up getting a better score than the stories I think deserve it more.>>38927334No. I came for opinions, because I was already sharing the draft.
>>38927633Finally I'm on time!>Maybe because it’s not as plot heavy, but I don’t have as many opinions on this one as the others. I suppose it’s some fine romance, but it doesn’t stir anything in my mind.Exactly what I thought. I barely even wrote anything down, cause there's little to say so far. I enjoy it well enough though.I don't like how the narrator just spoils the story. "But of course, nothing turns out as we expect" oh fuck off, we know, I'd rather see the situation as it develops than be reminded that they're going to end up together...On that note, the prose is really nothing to write home about. It's serviceable. Maybe better than the first half of ETC, much worse than Contraptionology.I dislike the modern setting, I generally don't much care for fics that could have been written about *anything* but pony without big rewrites.>Perhaps we shall see.I doubt it. It seems to be just Equestria but with whatever technology or societal standards are necessary for the story to happen, with no further elaboration.>I am consistently surprised by Octavia never going full Joker after Exit Through Canterlot.Feels weird, doesn't it?>But speaking of sperging out, Lyra seems casted as the villain here.I don't think so, it seems like she's already been called out by Octavia and Carrot Top and realised her mistake, and we're only halfway through the story. Seems like a weird subplot to include, unless it progresses in some way I'm not expecting.>Still not sure why either of them were taking psychology in the first place.>"Take psychology, they said. The teacher’s nice, they said," muttered VinylEasy credit, maybe? Though that's probably not in Octavia's character. >put your vote at the end.Gonna go with Bug on a Stick. I was memeing about voting against it, but it's high time we got to it.>Vote on whether or not you want to limit the selection to the starter kit for now.Yes, I think it makes sense. If we believe they're actually good recs, we should go through them. If some of them turn out bad, we'll have the opportunity to vote them out.>>38927666>What I didn't like the most initially was the pacing in the early chapters.Yeah. I prefer slow burn romance.>In canon ponies do use carts to get to places faster, see pic rel.I wonder if taxi drivers in Equestria have to be the fastest runners to make money. Could make for an interesting fic about an underdog taxi runner.>>38927694>I suppose my real problem with it is that it doesn't mesh well with the cell phonesExactly what I mean by "just Equestria but with whatever technology or societal standards are necessary for the story to happen".>Say, in a world where there's tons of teleportation and portals it doesn't make sense for anypony to buy a car.In canon teleportation is rare, Rarity can't do it.
>>38927633oh I almost forgot my biggest meta criticism>Hey guys, it's ya boi, DID YOU CATCH MY SICK REFERENCE???? DONT FORGET TO SUBSCRIBE AND SMASH THAT LIKE BUTTON, LEAVE A COMMENT BELOW IF YOU FAVORITE COLOR IS BLUE AND IF IT ISN'T LEAVE A COMMENT TELLING ME WHY NOT
>>38928546If your favorite color isn't blue, you'd better have a damn good reason.
>>38927843>While Discord is doing/saying things that get under her skin but is still well-meaning despite his rather antagonistic posturing.Wow, perfectly in line with canon then.
>>38928517>In canon teleportation is rare, Rarity can't do it.I mean, in canon they don't have cellphones either. I mean, a civilization at that technology level would probably have some means of advanced transportation.
>>38927959>I just had the impression the bulk of the story was this relationship developingThat's the main appeal of "opposites attract" ships like VSxO for me in the first place.>Wtf are ladies?Doesn't Rarity use that word many times? I'm not certain but I have this feeling.>Wtf, That's just absurd.Yeah. It was pretty jarring how quickly they agreed, too.>which does not seem like a natural thing to do.Her impression of Octavia at the time was pretty clearly "boring, stuck-up pony".>I thought Lyra was cheating with carrot when vinyl and her have some sick bants in the empty classroom, since she shows up with a black eye. But then it turns out carrot is just her friend? So Bon bon just beats the shit out of her for no reason?Wait. You're right. I didn't even notice.>>38928039Have you tried edging while writing?>>38928358>implying anyone here reads>>38928546Jesus Christ, can't believe I didn't make a note of this. These author's notes are annoying in .epubs. Who the fuck announces a reference like it's a treasure hunt?>>38928601You're right that there could be better worldbuilding, and it would be interesting if it took place in a properly developed futuristic version of Equestria. I don't think introducing some original method of magical public transport in a SoL shipfic is the right choice. The phones are only here for plot convenience, and because including them is easy.
>>38928594Here's two.
>>38927959>So Bon bon just beats the shit out of her for no reason?>No reason.
>>38928731>No>Reason
>>38928740>No>Fucking>Reason
>>38928688>Doesn't Rarity use that word many times? I'm not certain but I have this feeling.holy shit I somehow forgot this lmao
>>38928688I don't think I've ever seen author notes used in a way that wasn't awful, other than perhaps thanking editors and the like at the end of a story.
>>38928731>>38928740>>38928745When is Octavia going to beat the shit out of Vinyl?>>38928805True. Maybe it's only because I find these obnoxious. "300th person to smash subscribe gets his OC included :)"
>>38928833This was one of the first pony pics I saved.
>>38928864This was my first
>>38928864Fitting for a fic from 2012.
>>38927990>in ch10 or 11 it's revealed she's just friends with carrot and hangs out with her, which mean Bon Bon just likes giving her black eyes I guess?The anon who's re-reading it already mentioned that Lyra gets a bit more spotlight later on. Hopefully this is cleared up because I'm also not sure what happened there.>I don't have a problem with lack of PONY stuff, I mean they're living day to day lives.Yeah, I guess that's fair. It's just that like >>38928517 said, this story could easily be adapted to be about humans instead of ponies and I'm not a fan of that approach in general. I won't hold it against an SoL story too much.>>38928517>the prose is really nothing to write home about. It's serviceable. Maybe better than the first half of ETC,That's also how I feel about it. Though it's definitely better than ETC which had a surprising amount of errors that should've been caught in editing or prereading passes.>I dislike the modern setting, I generally don't much care for fics that could have been written about *anything* but pony without big rewrites.I'm not the biggest fan of the setting but to play devil's advocate for a bit, you couldn't write this fic about anything else since Octavia and Vinyl are pony characters. You could try making it a non-pony story but you'd still be stuck with characters who anyone from the fandom would recognize. That puts it above fics such as TWOLOT which not only change the setting but also essentially replace the canon characters with identically named OCs.>>38928546Eh, it's really stupid but I don't mind it too much. It makes me roll my eyes every time but it's not a part of the story and easy to ignore.
>>38928805>participate in an art pack>want to give my thoughts on it>question whether I should ask them to include a file next to my story>oh, I'll just write an author's noteI've only done it once.
>>38928928>First pony image saved>Named "2"
>>38928689I count zero.
>>38929100>can't read>can't countSuch is the tragedy of Lunerds.
>>38927958>In HP4, they use a code name for the spell because the fact that the Equestrians are ponies is a state secret throughout the entire fic so far.But why use a code name that starts with the same letters and has the same syllables as the thing it's used for? It gives away immediate clues and information about what it means, and using the phonetics gives away that it stands for something. The phonetic alphabet isn't really suited for "code names" by itself. The way most actual code names are chosen is a nearly random pull from a pool of words, and is then vetted to make sure it doesn't give away the secret to people who aren't already in the know.Market Garden. Normandy. Coffee Lake. Jellybean. We know what these names are after the fact, but they didn't give away anything just by existing. Papa Tango is lazy and retarded.
>>38929316>NormandyUh, what? Normandy was where American troops landed in France. That's about as obfuscated as a dictionary.The operation itself was codenamed Neptune, and was the first part of the greater Operation Overlord.
>>38929100
>>38929339Not even in the top half.
(of the m6)>>38929390cover art
>>38929325Eh, right. Aside from that one then.
>>38929390>>38929398Pink not even in the top three? Harsh; something that qualifies as personal attackI suppose we'll have to agree to disagree
>>38929421RarityTwilightApplejackIt can't be helped, sorry.
>>38929436
>>38927786>I can't do with DiscordDiscord's really hard to use as a non-villain because you have to invent a philosophical prime directive for him to invoke to explain why he doesn't bail Fluttershy's ass out when the main conflict rears its head. This is one of the reasons he tanked as the show went on, since the writers had to either completely ignore he existed or nerf him to justify the plot.>>38927959>Wtf are ladies? Gross.>Forget her ladies. Focus.>Hehe. Sorry about that ladies.>Ladies do not "flip out", Spike.>Welcome to the Gala. Which is why I... Ladies! Lovely to see you again.DYEWTS?
>>38929716>WTSWe don't do that 'round these here parts, pal
>>38929794The future is now, old man.
>10
>>38927694>I would certainly prefer, as well, for the author to be a bit creative rather than leaning on cars, of course.Streetcars. Please. Please for the love of God use trams. They're absolutely perfect for ponies. If you're going to do an industrial or later setting they should be everywhere in cities and present all the way down to just moderately developed towns.
You will have the Papa Tango and you will be happy.Oh boy, wait until I tell you about the Wizard Tango.
>>38928517>Yes, I think it makes sense. If we believe they're actually good recs, we should go through them.This. This is the important bit.I am curious why the people who voted no did so.
>>38930398Isn't it understood that most of the thread has already read through most of them quite recently for the voting?
>>38930398A huge amount of them are way longer or shorter than the book club limits at the moment, and I think reading the same story for 4 weekly meetings in a row wouldn't be very effective for our book club environment
>>38930434Absolutely not "quite recently." Not for many except for maybe the smaller stories.How many people have read every story on the starter kit? Anyone who hadn't already read some of the longer stories prior to the starter kit?>>38930446Of course. I'm not advocating for going to Fo:E or Triptych after the next story, but I do think every story on the starter kit should get read by the book club within a reasonable timeframe for the reasons he gave.
>>38930446I understood the question as simply adding anotherrestriction, not replacing the current word limit. So, we'd read all the 30-150k fics on the Starter Kit and then skip the rest. Maybe group a few shorter ones to read in one week. This interpretation made the most sense to me. If that's not the case, I'd want to change my vote to 'no'.t. >>38927666
>>38928955>I'm not the biggest fan of the setting but to play devil's advocate for a bit, you couldn't write this fic about anything else since Octavia and Vinyl are pony characters. You could try making it a non-pony story but you'd still be stuck with characters who anyone from the fandom would recognize.Good point, though my point stands. Even if you weren't able to recognise the loud DJ/quiet classical artist archetypes from the pony fandom, the story could have been written about any number of similar characters, including human OCs. I much prefer fics that take advantage of the show's setting or established characters. >>38930434Not everyone has read everything on the kit. We should just keep going until we reach a point where the anons participating have already read the remaining candidates. The voting system should be good enough for picking the fics we haven't tried.>>38930667This is what I was imagining as well. If at any point there's a fic one of us has read, let's just say it, and we should be able to avoid a situation where we're all reading something only one of us hasn't read.
>>38929316>But why use a code name that starts with the same letters and has the same syllables as the thing it's used for?Are you really asking about the reasoning of the author of 4 Hailey Potter rewrites?
>>38930386Sierra tango foxtrot uniform. India tango break india sierra break sierra tango uniform papa india delta. India tango break whiskey india lima lima break alpha lima whiskey alpha yankee sierra break bravo echo break sierra tango uniform papa india delta. India break alpha mike break november echo victor echo romeo break hotel alpha papa papa yankee.
>>38930702Yes god damnit.
>>38930737>STFU. It is stupid. It will always be stupid. I am never happy.Relatable
Any baker in here?
>>38930774>page 2
>>38930781Just asking.
>>38930774I made a sick flapjack last week
>>38930832for your rgre gf?
>>38930774I'm trying to get my hands on my grandma's recipe but I did make a few birthday cakes from my circle of friends. The most recent being around late march.
>>38930854No it was my sisters birthday. She didn't fancy cake
>>38930877If you're looking for recipes, keep an eye on the OP! We make sure to include a new recipe every week!
>>38930737Yeah, my typo was unforgivable. I meant "Whiskey Tango".
>>38930934It's been the same recipe for the last few threads.
>>38930881It was still a cake. It was always a cake.
>>38930967Yes, but this one you really need to try. It's my favourite dish and, in my opinion, the superior example of polish cuisine.
I am the best character writer in this thread because I take this anon's criticism to heart:>>38916320
>>38931005The moment the website stops being nazis.
>>38930321This is america. Pubic transport is communism. Hell, public roads are communism.
>>38931057Ponies aren't a "democracy", they're a monarchy.
>>38931053I have no idea what you mean. Loads fine with and without ublock origin.
>>38931043Could you summarise his point in a sentence or two? Cause that shit's all over the place.
ANY BAKER IN HERE?
Filly will return tomorrow.
Fine, I'll do it myself.
>>38931071Completely refuses to load with near-guaranteed cause being "Russia". Do I need to quote Hitler's opinion on russians?>>38931072"token flaws are as retarded as people who think that they're okay"
>>38931086>Do I need to quote Hitler's opinion on russians?I have a feeling it aligns at least a little with everybody else's opinion on russians.>token flaws are retardedStill better than no flaws.
Half-baked bread for everyone starving on page 9>>38931142>>38931142>>38931142
