[a / b / c / d / e / f / g / gif / h / hr / k / m / o / p / r / s / t / u / v / vg / vm / vmg / vr / vrpg / vst / w / wg] [i / ic] [r9k / s4s / vip / qa] [cm / hm / lgbt / y] [3 / aco / adv / an / asp / bant / biz / cgl / ck / co / diy / fa / fit / gd / hc / his / int / jp / lit / mlp / mu / n / news / out / po / pol / qst / sci / soc / sp / tg / toy / trv / tv / vp / wsg / wsr / x] [Settings] [Search] [Mobile] [Home]
Board
Settings Mobile Home
/mlp/ - Pony

[Advertise on 4chan]

Name
Spoiler?[]
Options
Comment
Verification
4chan Pass users can bypass this verification. [Learn More] [Login]
File[]
  • Please read the Rules and FAQ before posting.
  • There are 70 posters in this thread.

08/21/20New boards added: /vrpg/, /vmg/, /vst/ and /vm/
05/04/17New trial board added: /bant/ - International/Random
10/04/16New board for 4chan Pass users: /vip/ - Very Important Posts
[Hide] [Show All]


Self-serve ads are available again! Check out our new advertising page here.


[Advertise on 4chan]


File: 1604896749081.png (30 KB, 251x308)
30 KB
30 KB PNG
ITT: camels are just Saddle Arabians, horseword drama, can anon's life be too sad?, restarting fic discussion, actual fic discussion, fake fic discussion, HiE tropes, HiE is good, HiE is bad, truly awful fics, Gildanon got the coof, guilty pleasure fics, autism, chakats, writing is hard, anons are obsessed with trannies' blogposts, Literal Hitler in Equestria, Harry Potter, and so much more!
>FiMFiction Starter Kit (recommended fics):
Winners:
http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png

Renomination of fics for an updated list is >definitely in progress:
http://198.27.67.67:8000/

>How do I write fanfiction?
Ezn’s guide - https://eznguide.neocities.org/
Politics and the English Language - https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/
Vhatug's tips for anatomically correct clop - https://pastebin.com/g4VpEg4f
Horse Behaviour - https://www.equestrianandhorse.com/equus/behaviour.html
Setting a story in motion - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ufO8LbwTdu0 [Embed]
Taking criticism - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-v4R2ZcxPlA [Embed]

>Can you pre-read my story?
Post it on Google Docs with comments enabled and give us a link.

>Reviews and riffs:
https://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmom
https://pastebin.com/u/IHeartShinzakura
https://pastebin.com/wmGX7FPm
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1z9Bz7UnEbxo-svlXa2tV49PJkP-yFuR7pRXiBUn-IeU
https://derpicdn.net/img/view/2020/4/2/2312216.jpg
https://royalcanterlotlibrary.net/top16/

>Voiceguy's archive:
https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL-VuBo5xPdifNsnXXGGySudMIgnVLvLQI

Last Thread: >>36116377
>>
This thread opener reads like schizophrenic ramblings jesus christ
>>
File: 11e.png (119 KB, 423x427)
119 KB
119 KB PNG
>>36176281
I know. Isn't it great?
>>
>didn't even name the thread properly
good effort
>>
File: buckle up.png (267 KB, 1004x614)
267 KB
267 KB PNG
>>36176270
>[Embed][Embed]
>>
>>36176362
I want to lick and stroke that neck.
>>
>>36176362
Stop making me want to go out of my way to write a western when I have other stuff to do.
>>
>>36176281
I thought this was a /mlh/ thread at first.
>>
>>36176346
I only know the general because some said they will use Russian after Arabic.
>>
>>36176281
I don't think you know what that word means. I know because I'm a studied psychology faggot. Calling others schizophrenic, any other mental illness, or self-identifying, are hallmark traits of histronics. Not they are schizzo, you are suffering of acute histrionic phases.
You give off the same vibes, another phrasing of intuitive reaction, as that sociopath Starlight Glimmer.
>>
>>36176376
Is any of those things as important as writing a western?
>>
>>36176596
Probably not.
>>
File: 1604635614627.jpg (362 KB, 765x680)
362 KB
362 KB JPG
I once again request your best Gildafics, anons
>>
>>36177242
seconded
>>
File: 2691048.jpg (487 KB, 2560x1707)
487 KB
487 KB JPG
>>
>>36177242
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/154030/4/oedipal-panties/anger-management
>>
>>36176442
>Implying we've got HPD
>Implying anyone here is a sexually active
>Implying anyone here loves parties
>Implying anyone here has anything other than autism
I don't buy it.
>>
>>36177253
what the fuck is this shit anon
>>
>>36177305
'orse!
>>
>>36177305
I'm retarded
>>
>>36177269
I don’t have autism, I’m just retarded
>>
can anyone recommend any good derpy fics? something where she's clumsy but smart, instead of some idiot savant bullshit
>>
>>36178231
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/56774/alarm-clock
>>
>>36178259
Something similar
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/164668/the-corner-of-our-eyes
>>
>>36178302
I really like this one.
It's a nice story.
Not heavy on horror, but interesting nonetheless.
>>
>>36178302
>>36178524
Also recommended, though the ending kind of petered out for me
>>
File: 1605843282279.png (352 KB, 800x600)
352 KB
352 KB PNG
Oh nice, /hlgg/ is into ponies enough to edit some of pony classics into their own stuff!
https://pastebin.com/MZdM1jEc
>>
>>36178822
>/hlgg/
What's that?
>>
>>36178827
>>>/jp/hololive
>>
>>36178231
This one's nice
https://ponepaste.org/85
>>
>>36178842
holy fucking jesus I regret going into that thread
when did people stop being able to have fun? I watch every hololive stream with chat turned off and just chill. What's got people so worked up? There's a fucking million of these bitches to choose from, if you don't like one just watch a different one.
>>
>>36179506
Yeah it's pretty terrible. hololive is a lot of fun but /jp/ and those threads are awful.
>>
>>36179506
Half of the fun is coming up with narratives for random shit, when you can make sensible sounding theory for Gura being pregnant you know you are on top level of shitposting
Also discussing ongoing streams and voting in poals
Protip: most of people in global thread don't hate holos
>>
File: Mom's gonna freak.png (10 KB, 532x51)
10 KB
10 KB PNG
>1 hour
Just kidding this isn't actual writing these are just stream of consciousness notes I was typing to a friend to explain my setting. So not real writing.

Still, imagine writing 3400~ words per hour. Possibly an entire fucking novel over the waking hours of the day.
>>
File: 1600059131282.jpg (214 KB, 767x1024)
214 KB
214 KB JPG
Does anyone else here type using solely their index fingers? It's a trait I picked up ages ago when I used to play WoW as a kid and had to move using the mouse and type to my party members when riding a mount with only one hand. I eventually got so fluid with it I can clock about 50-55 words per minute which is apparently well above the average person, so I guess it worked out in the end.

Anyone else here as retarded and malformed as me?
>>
File: pathetic.png (214 KB, 800x450)
214 KB
214 KB PNG
>>36179967
No. I type with both hands and do 120 wpm like someone that actually spends hours every day typing.
>>
File: 5g_corona.jpg (17 KB, 480x270)
17 KB
17 KB JPG
>>36176442
>>
File: 1540084411227.jpg (29 KB, 400x396)
29 KB
29 KB JPG
>>36179967
Type with all of your fingers, you fucking degenerate. Anything below 60-50 wpm max speed is fucking pathetic tbqh
>>
>>36180322
Not that Anon.
How do I use my pinkie fingers to type?
>>
>>36180323
Same way as all the others? Put it on a key and press down.
>>
>>36179506
I don't understand them at all. Do people just listen to these streams as background noise?
>>
>>36179967
I can't think of what caused my insane typing speed other than RuneScape. I can't remember getting faster while playing it, but I also can't think of any other thing that I've done online that could've made me as fast as I am now. Back in school, I used to have people on computers stop their work just to stare at me. It happened more than once.
>>
>>36180323
I mostly use it for the space bar, enter key, and anything requiring two keys at once. It depends on the size of your keyboard and what you're doing with your other hand.
One of my greatest discoveries in life was that porn games are designed to be played with one hand. Being able to game while eating meals was a life changer.
>>
File: typing-finger-chart.png (311 KB, 1712x1242)
311 KB
311 KB PNG
>>36180323
I'm going to assume you've never had a QWERTY typing lesson in your life and work from there.
You know how your keyboard has little nubs on the 'F' and 'J' keys, right? You position your pointer fingers on each hand over those keys. Your left hand has the pinkie on "A", the ring finger on "S", the middle finger on "D", and the pointer finger on "F". Your right hand has the pointer finger on the "J" key, the middle finger on the "K" key, the ring finger on the "L" key, and the pinkie finger on the "; :" key. Both thumbs rest on the space bar. This is your resting position, from here you can use your fingers to access every single letter on the the keyboard quickly and efficiently. Consult the attached chart to see which fingers are used to hit each key. Now, practice, and your typing speeds will fucking skyrocket.
>>
>>36180517
I've never even attempted to learn that stuff and I'm by far the fastest typist that I've ever met.
>>
>>36180525
Well, how many typists do you know?
>>
>>36180566
Point.
>>
I find myself overusing the phrases "even worse," and "worst still,". Anyone know some alternatives? I've already exhausted "furthermore", "moreover", and "in addition".
>>
>>36180708
What exactly are you writing that you need to use phrases like that with regularity?
>>
>>36180854
Mostly rants about Goldenwing, with occasional Hitler in Equestria metafiction.
>>
So I've come up with everything I need to do to write this western fic I've been thinking of except for the title. The best thing I could come up with was "Big Iron on Her Hip" and it makes me want to shoot myself out of embarrassment.
>>
>>36180883
>and it makes me want to shoot myself out of embarrassment.
Seconded
>>
>>36180883
The Good, The Bad, And The Friendly.
>>
>>36180883
What's the story about? Any particular theme you're going for?
>>
>>36180883
The Mare with No Name
>>
>>36181009
It's an anthology series that will essentially just be all kinds of western stories. The major overarching narrative would be Celestia as a lone gunman traveling across the lands in search of her sister for as of yet unknown reasons. But Applejack would essentially be the main character, another gunman who left for the road after a "disaster" at her family farm. She soon becomes famous and a lot of tall-tales are told about her, which she hates because it keeps attracting the attention of idiots looking to prove themselves against her. Eventually she comes into the service of Filthy Rich to protect his daughter from kidnappers, and she ends up traveling with Diamond Tiara for the rest of the story.

>>36180910
Might be a little too dark for that.
>>
>>36181036
The Good, The Bad, And The Unfriendly?
>>
>>36181036
The Friends We Made Along The Way
>>
>>36181036
>and she ends up traveling with Diamond Tiara for the rest of the story
They better fuck or I’m not reading it
>>
>>36181036
>Celestia
Sun of a Gun.
>>
>>36181046
Damn, that's actually good.

>>36181076
Could be a chapter title.
>>
File: tiredCelestia.jpg (393 KB, 2263x1404)
393 KB
393 KB JPG
>>36181036
Into the Sunset
>>
Looks like the story in Rekindled Embers is about to evolve.
>>
>>36180481
>Back in school, I used to have people on computers stop their work just to stare at me. It happened more than once.
I used to get this too. It was like a performance art to them, and sometimes I'd get girls come up and cover my eyes and challenge my to type things. I had a trick I'd do where I'd just stare at them as I typed out Mary Had A Little Lamb as fast as I could. Guess you could say I was pretty cool.

I learned how to type from playing MUDs in middle school. In those games you type fast or die hard.
>>
How I describe something that's tense in retrospect? I'm trying to explain how I enjoyed a recount of a serious battle. I can't really say that it's tense, because we already know most of the details and that everyone that we cared about survived, so what can I call it?

>>36181709
I used to creep people out with something similar. Someone would start talking to me midway through me finishing a line of maths homework. I'd look away from the page and talk to them, with my hand still solving the problem.
>>
>>36181721
"I don't know how this will end" isn't tension so much as suspense. Things can be tense even when you know the end result, as evidenced by plenty of good movies that don't lose tension on the second viewing. If you have a good storyteller then there's no reason a story can't be tense when you know all the details.
>>
>>36181267
>entombed on a closely guarded throne
>not quite alive, not quite dead
>connected to an artifact that both sustains her and allows her to project a shield to defend her subjects
>periodically can be half-woken to speak to her closest descendants
So Cadance is basically the God-Emperor of Mankind?
>>
>>36181845
I hear all of you anons talking about it so enthusiastically and I want to read this shit to but the whole gay stuff totally irks me.
>>
>>36181952
roll with it, anon. the best fiction is all about unreal things.
>>
>>36181952
>he doesn't enjoy the sight of two mares that care about each other
What are you, gay?
>>
>>36182108
It gets a little distracting at times.
>>
>>36180036
>pisspoor word edit
>>
>>36181952
I don't think you're going to find much disagreement in this thread, anon. People seem pretty well in agreement that it's gone from a character trait to a plot tumor which the story can't keep itself away from.
>>
Im back, baby. Got a new phone and time to kill with fics. Feeling good anons ngl
>>
>>36182348
I hope you write a lot.
>>
Decent chapter, Goldenwing.
>>
>>36182845
It was really great seeing Rarity finally get to piss on someone else for a change.
I'm calling it now, that nervous crystal pony has a wyrd too and is hiding it.
>>
>Ded thred
>>
>>36183729
Busy writing and planning.
>>
>>36176442
Diagnosing strangers as sociopaths based on having taken a 101 course is the sort of thing a narcissist, self-aggrandizing sociopathic personality would do, tee-bee-aytch.
>>
>>36176362
>magitech dampening ring
>western lynching
That gives me a reading itch I know will never get to be scratched.

>>36179506
This. I went there a few weeks ago to see if there were any funny meme shitposts or waifu arguments and it was just constant twitter screencaps and trying to stir up drama. If I want petty drama, I'll go watch Bravo.

>>36179967
I never learned proper eight finger typing and have been using the "hunt and peck" method with my index and middle fingers since my first computer. At this point muscle memory pretty much makes learning it properly impossible.

>>36180708
>that's not even the bad news
>oh, it gets worse
>but now we're really fucked
>You thought that was bad?
>Things are even more shit than you could have possibly realized
>that was the glass half full
>things only get cheerier from there
Generally, if a word or phrase is being overused, the solution is to swap the sentence out with something else that conveys the same meaning.

>>36180883
>Big Iron on Her Hip
Dear god. I completely forgot about the discussion months ago over how hard a Western fic would be without guns or properly elaborating on their use by horses.
>>
File: 1605453659250.png (1.31 MB, 836x1080)
1.31 MB
1.31 MB PNG
Thoughts on Substitute Demon?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/255419/the-substitute-demon

It's an incredibly interesting start and premise that, after a few chapters, ruins itself by focusing almost entirely on Changelings - how do longfics always manage to center around their most boring aspects?
>>
>>36183996
I'm reminded of Cowboys vs. Aliens, and how excited I got about the idea of a sci-fi western.
Movie was alright. Didn't really satisfy on that front.
>>
>>36184040
Did you stop reading or are you still reading it? I felt that it wasn't really moving anywhere and it seems like it was getting stuck in the jungle that was a minecraft map that the author made.
>>
>>36184108
Finished (what has been written so far, at least). It eventually picks up, but it stays focused on the changelings, and eventually the entire plot itself centers around using the hive mind.
>>
>>36184120
>and eventually the entire plot itself centers around using the hive mind
I was actually reading it and enjoying it at first, but what the fuck? it isn't even tagged Changeling and it becomes all about Changelings? The author has poor pacing/story sense.
>>
>>36184130
I suppose the cover art being a Pokémon reference should have been a red flag.
>>
>>36184040
Between the two, I'm more found of the author's other fic, Twisted Fate, which is set 1000 years ago in the pre Nightmare Moon period, where the MC is the changeling.
>>
>>36182315
>literally replying to a meme
>>
File: wh.png (329 KB, 1081x902)
329 KB
329 KB PNG
So what's the take on this absolute behemoth? I see it around occasionally.
>>
>>36184560
There's a ton of interesting layers of plot and quirky characters, but all shades of fucked-upness as well (the only way I can reconcile this being T when Immortal Game was forced into M is that no mod has read more than a fraction of it). I stopped reading sometime last year for possibly petty reasons of taste (an apparent comic relief character crushing on the MC despite the latter supposedly not swinging that way suddenly apparently becoming one of his actual love interests), but even then I haven't fully dropped it.

And it's *finally* just about finished- if I remember the author's blogs correctly, there's just an epilogue to go.
>>
>>36180517
Just looking at that it sure seems like puny little pinkie finger has to carry a whole lot of responsibility while big strong middle finger slacks off. And lets not even get started on "I'm responsible for the success of the species" opposable thumb.
>>
>Write 7k words in three days
>No longer have the energy left to proofread it
>Don't want to do anything else until this is done
Fug
>>
>>36184842
that's why you take a break between writing and proofing. quite apart from getting some mental separation from the text, it's good to rest and restore your energy.
>>
>>36184803
The layout of a keyboard puts the least frequently used keys at the edges, so the pinkie is only pretending to work hard.
>>
>>36184889
>He doesn't use apostrophises
>He does not use right shift
>he does not use >
he does not use enter he does not use his arrow kyes
>>
>>36184901
Do you really think people use the arrow keys as much as the letters when typing something? Do you think they hit enter or shift more than they hit letters? You’re beyond saving.
>>
File: 1536938997382.png (663 KB, 1000x1200)
663 KB
663 KB PNG
Alright so I do have my western fic planned as a 20 chapter "half-anthology" with a number of stand-alone stories and a couple of other stories that will all converge at the end. Each chapter will essentially be its own self-contained episode at about 10,000 words apiece, that's what I'm aiming for. However I have other stuff to write and there will be no steady update schedule for this. Be on the lookout for the first chapter in January.
>>
>>36183777
Trips of truth.
>>
>>36185444
The trips bless you.
>>
>>36185757
>>36185872
Both me.
>>
>>36185889
>off by one
Good.
>>
>>36184040
It's a guilty pleasure of mine and I reread it earlier this year when the corona lockdown started and classes were delayed a couple of weeks. The first 20 chapters or so could use another thorough pass from an editor but it gets somewhat better after that.
I don't really mind the changeling thing but I dislike how much the focus and scale shifts at times. It even seemed the story was finally going towards some kind of resolution and then the author just stopped being active on the site.
>>
>>36184901
>pushing arrow keys with pinkie instead of moving the whole right hand over to them
>>
Hey skirts if you're around how come Eljunbyro has 9.5k views, Innavedr has 7.5k views, but then Odrsjot has 25k views. What's up with that?
>>
>human protagonist violently murders anyone who calls him a "monster" or hurts him in any way
>takes a hardline, near fanatical stance against slavery and killing
>>
>>36187302
My vote goes for magic.
>>
File: 1604781991745.jpg (47 KB, 512x346)
47 KB
47 KB JPG
>>36187302
>>
>>36187449
Never read anything like that, thank god.
>>
4,000 words today. Even for a weekend that's more than normal.
>>
>>36182953
Story?
>>
>>36188318
Sunken Horizons, sequel to Empty Horizons.
>>
>Try to write an interesting description and do my best
>Don't have the outsider's perspective to KNOW if mine is good or not
>>
>>36188964
and yet you are in a thread full of outsiders
>>
>>36189130
Ah I meant like, I personally can't tell, because i'm not an outsider to my own work. It would be cool to view the stuff you create from the side of a consumer, y'know? A neat power to have.

But I do have people to get feedback from, which is nice.
>>
>>36187449
Wasn't Darth Vulcan the only one like that?
>>
>>36189412
I don't think Ted has (intentionally) killed anyone yet
>>
>>36176281
I actually thought an ai made the thread kek.
>>
Just started Rekindled Embers because of you faggots, and except for the overly preachy bits and the borderline Mary Sue, it's fucking amazing
>>
>>36189859
Yeah, it is honestly a great story with a really interesting and intriguing world.
>>
>>36189873
I'm just susprised that this thread of all places is able to enjoy it. I'm probably pretty close to the author politically, but even for me they're laying it on a little thick.
I like that thing fics do where you first get a nagging feeling that something is wrong, and then slowly realize the sheer extent of how fucked up things really are. Having that covered halfway thru the first chapter is like premature ejaculation, it's fun but too short to be enjoyable.
>>
File: appul pfft.gif (65 KB, 502x503)
65 KB
65 KB GIF
>>36189882
It's almost like we don't care about politics and are just trying to find good stories.
>>
>>36189882
>>36189918
Yeah my personal politics have absolutely no influence on the stories I write. And for reading I only care if it's clearly messing with the characters and plot, which unfortunately it has a little lately in Rekindled Embers.
>>
>>36189918
I also like to find shit stories every now and then.
>>
>>36189955
Spot the rationalfriend
>>
>>36189987
Not me. I'm busy staring at a copy of Deathy Hallows and wondering if I've got the courage to read a book that I'm certain will be shit. If I liked shit, I would've ate it up already.
>>
>>36189882
Don't get me wrong, you scroll through the last few threads you'll find plenty of people commenting that the anvil-dropping is getting a little overwhelming and starting to detract from the story. But they're crafting an otherwise-interesting-enough world and narrative that people can look past that for the most part. Time will tell if that opinion holds by the end of the story.
>>
File: 1497815327701.jpg (17 KB, 440x428)
17 KB
17 KB JPG
I signed up for the Christmas story exchange thingie, and it just hit me it's entirely possible someone will ask me to write a story with the Student six, or whatever new characters appeared in the last seasons/movie that I didn't watch.
Dang it.
>>
>>36190537
Just look up the most popular meme images for them on derpi/altbooru and go with that. You'll probably do the characters more justice than the actual show.
>>
File: gaoa3-cover.png (136 KB, 350x467)
136 KB
136 KB PNG
>gaoa 3, ch.28
It's not dead, I promise

It's time for the court-martial and/or impeachment trial of Prince Captain Divine Right (Pony Edition) at Nobility House. (DR is the captain of Princess Twilight's Friendship Guard, and also her coltfriend.) The charges are bullshit but Marquis Riven Oak has set this up as a way to strike at the princesses in advance of Celestia's own impeachment trial, which is the first step in his plan to become king (and an alicorn too, if he can).

Celestia starts by dismissing the case, the trial turns into a huge shouting match, and we get four rounds of this:
>sunbutt: I dismiss the case
>bad guys: You can't do that, you need another princess to second the motion
>sb: You're right, but Sunset will support it
>bg: You still can't do that, it's a conflict of interest
>sb: You're right, but I'll activate the ESCALATION PROTOCOL to promote myself to queen
>bg: You can't do that, you're under impeachment
>sb: You're right, but I'll abdicate, making Luna crown princess, then activate the ESCALATION PROTOCOL to make her queen
>bg: You can't do that... oh wait, I guess you can
They call a recess at this point, but Celestia doesn't bother coming back afterward. She just sends Kibbitz to announce that I'M OUT, BITCHES, Luna is now Queen of All Cosmos, parliament is dissolved until all the nobles have sworn fealty to Equestria and Queen Luna, and by the way, Divine Right's case is still dismissed.

Celestia didn't bother to tell Luna about this plan in advance. The actual purpose of the recess is to fill her in and make sure she agrees to it. You'd think she would have explained it last night, you know, when Luna walked in on Celestia and Faust discussing this exact plot. But it's far more dramatic for Celestia to give an impassioned, last-minute speech about how she just wants to be a teacher.

The main plot is over, and now the replacement main plot is over too, so GAOA as a whole should be ending some time within the next 3 to 6,000 months.
>>
>>36190560
this sounds ridiculously autistic
>>
>>36189918
>>36189952
I try to subtly inject my politics into my stories, but only if it isn't heavy-handed and fits the plot
>>
>>36190723
Despite making an effort to try and keep any prevalent political or religious themes from popping up in my writing, one of my plotlines seems to be calling very strongly for a socialist revolution. Which I guess is just communism? I don't know, but the Soviet Anthem came on as I was writing Rarity inciting a worker's revolt and it fit too well.

This is doubly ironic because I'm suppose to be a fascist.
>>
File: Udklip.png (210 KB, 943x858)
210 KB
210 KB PNG
Tell me about this big fat block of 2 million words.
Is it worth reading? Both on its own and as a HiE fic?
>>
>>36190762
>Tell me about this big fat block of 2 million words.
>Is it worth reading?
By default, the answer is no
Looking at the title and description, the answer is hell no. That shit's got more red flags than the Kremlin
>>
>>36190760
everyone's a fascist once they fall foul of the party. either that, or they're a wrecker, or a reactionary. welcome to the outer darkness, with the wailing and the gnashing of teeth and so on.
there is absolutely nothing wrong with politics in fiction, as long as the world and plot are internally consistent, the message is coherent, and the story is entertaining to read. it also helps to not be an obnoxious jackass.
one of my favourite authors is china miélville, a man who so thoroughly wears his politics on his sleeve that he wears nothing else. all of his books are written from the perspective of a man who believes, utterly, in the cause of socialist revolution. they're also damn good stories, with well-developed characters, understandable conflicts, and solid, stimulating prose.
he's also not a complete jackass.
it helps.
>>
>>36190762
>M
>Sex, Gore, Violence, Death, Romance, Comedy, Slice of Life, Human, OC
If you still need to ask, you deserve it.
>>
>>36190760
>socialist revolution
>communism
As a citizen of a socialist country, what the fuck young man.
Communism is top-heavy, it is corrupt just like every other hero-worship political system.
A worker's protest is the purest expression of the people, in all their infinite stupidity.
And you're still a fascist in my heart, whatever that means.
>>
>>36190856
Isn't the big meme that socialism is the peaceful version of communism? Communism is inherently a violent revolution while socialism achieves similar goals through democratically? So would a violent "socialist" revolution not be communism?
>>
>>36190900
We bisected our monarchy, and animated worker's protests are practically a national tradition.
And yet, the local communist party is an unpopular joke that mostly attracts teenagers angry at the world.
Socialism doesn't mean what americans think it means. It's basically just that you get something back for what you pay in taxes. Like healthcare, etc etc.
Communism is pretty extreme shit in comparison.
>>
>>36190923
What country is this? And it's actually socialism full stop, not democratic socialism?
>>
Has anyone here read the Austraeoh series? What do you think of it? No spoilers, please.
>>
>>36190929
"Non-democratic" socialism is basically synonymous with "Soviet bloc", so that would be the latter yes.
Most of western Europe is operating under some more or less distant form of democratic socialism, with a lot of regional variation. Some only in name.
>>
>>36190940
Well you might note that I didn't say "democratic socialist revolution," but "socialist revolution," which, I think, it would be fair to call communism, since a socialist revolution—not a democratic socialist revolution—has an end state of basically communism.
>>
>>36190762
>42k chapter
Nigga, that's an entire book.
>>
>>36190963
Well, that sounds like a problem of terminology.
When we say socialism in Europe we always mean the one that functions and that we live in, not the caricature that collapsed some 2500km east and a few decades ago.
What you call "proper socialism" is basically a strawman, in the sense that even countries that call themselves socialist countries find the idea ridiculous.
The workers in the story you're writing are probably not fighting towards a communism end state, if they have any good sense left in them.
Unless they're fictional authoritarian socialists, the kind that you won't find very much at all in the real world, in which case I suppose that would be appropriate.
>>
>>36190997
They're not fighting towards any particular end state at all, as they're largely uneducated and have no concept of communism nor socialism nor any other -isms. I was using the term in the form of meaning what it means when you're talking to a historian or political scientist and they don't assume you're an uneducated American raised on FOX News talking about modern Europe. I don't see a problem in terminology besides your assumption that anybody who says "socialism" actually means "democratic socialism."
>>
>>36191041
>I don't see a problem in terminology
Clearly we have different ideas on what socialism means, and there are good reasons for that.
Much like "facism", depend on where you get your education from the word will have different definitions.
If you start by assuming that the american definiton is the One True Socialism, and anything else results from watching FOX News, that's going to make any discussion more difficult.

>your assumption that anybody who says "socialism" actually means "democratic socialism."
As I said, that's invariable what we mean in Europe.
I'm happy to acknowledge that americans have a different idea of what socialism means.
So do communists, for that matter. What we call communists, sometimes call themselves socialists.
That's why I say there's a problem of terminology.

>as they're largely uneducated and have no concept of communism nor socialism nor any other -isms
As are most people, however not knowing the names doesn't preclude knowing what they fight for. I think your own workers would find that idea very pretentious and elitist.
>>
>>36191041
unless they're mr numbers, in which case they mean perpetual revolution and rule by the autists
>>
>>36191069
Anyone I disagree with is literally Hitler.
>>
File: angry horse noise.gif (870 KB, 304x336)
870 KB
870 KB GIF
>>36191068
Honestly I don't really care about any of this and I don't want to continue clogging the thread with fucking POLITCAL SEMANTICS of all things. Especially when you've immediately fallen back on "the word means something else everywhere you go," which just makes this entire conversation even more moronic. The only thing I hate more than semantics is political semantics.

The point is that political themes aren't inherently bad and sometimes will sneak into a work despite an author's best intent. I don't fucking care what you call them.
>>
>>36191073
bite me, trosky
>>
>>36190934
First book is good on its own. But the series changes pretty abruptly after that
Books 2-4 are a real drag, but provide the setup for book 6
Book 5 is okay
Book 6 is pretty good
I think I dropped it partway through book 8
It's still unfinished (mid-book 9, I think) but gets weekly updates now
>>
>>36191209
>>36190934
I never got past the 2nd book, and I always say that I would've probably enjoyed the 2nd book if I hadn't read the 1st one. The 1st one is pretty good standalone as long as you don't read the last sentence.
>>
>>36190560
That's about as contrived as a game in yu-gi-oh
>>
>>36191802
Yeah, I don't really get it. The eventual solution (making Luna queen) was her plan all along, as far as I can tell, so I don't see why she didn't just get to it. She makes this big speech about how the nobility is full of corruption, which she could have just ended with "and that's why I'm dissolving the parliament and setting up my sister as supreme leader". But of course it's more dramatic if it looks like she's flying by the seat of her pants. (Shinzakura wrote this particular chapter, in case it wasn't obvious.)
>>
>>36184040
>Nightmare
Is this the shitty "it's obsessed with eternal night" nightmare entity or the based "it amplifies your deepest desire or passion to the point of insanity" entity?

>>36184560
I just can't see how a noir/murder mystery plot can sustain a story that's 200k shy of beating A Song of Ice and Fire.

>>36190560
So what's stopping Parliament from impeaching Luna after the early elections? And how could Celestia appoint Luna as queen if she already abdicated? Equestria's constitutional system in this fic seems utterly fucked.

>>36190762
>Slice of Life/Adventure
>Comedy/Sad
>Triumvirate tags (Sad, Dark, Tragedy)
>seventh element story
>three times as long as the Bible
Anon, are you trying to find a fic with every possible red flag?

>>36190900
Communism is a form of socialism. Socialism's the broader government ideology, while communism is a specific implementation of it.
>>
>>36192358
>I just can't see how a noir/murder mystery plot can sustain a story that's 200k shy of beating A Song of Ice and Fire.
What if it's several cases, like different episodes on a tv cop show, but the author puts everything in the same story because he doesn't want to deal with diminishing returns if he were to make several standalone stories.
>>
>>36192358
>Communism is a form of socialism. Socialism's the broader government ideology, while communism is a specific implementation of it.
To be more specific:
"Socialism" as described by Louis Blanc and Karl Marx properly means a political/economic system where officials of the state control all the means of production (farms, factories, any wealth used to create more wealth). Families, individuals, and corporations are not allowed to produce wealth on their own initiative.
"Communism" properly means a socialist system where the state distributes the products equally to everyone.

If Starlight Glimmer isn't advocating for these things, she is presumably neither a socialist nor a communist. She just hates cutie marks.

>>36190174
If you don't want to read the whole thing, at least read the fairy tale of the Three Brothers in Chapter 21. (If you like fairy tales, that is.)
>>
>>36192458
That doesn't make sense. Socialists and Communists do and will not identify with rightist implementations of state control over the means of production.
Additionally I like to headcanon Glimmie as a commie, it's more fascinating to think about her in that way and provides for more story opportunity.
>>
File: 1602783287884.png (256 KB, 1068x594)
256 KB
256 KB PNG
>>36192485
>socialists and communists do (sic) and will not identify with rightist implementations of state control over the means of production
Anon, I don't know if you're trolling or just retarded, but every single attempted implementation of socialism (good and bad) or communism has depended on establishing some state control over the means of production and a corresponding limitation on the ability of the individual to produce what he desires. Enforced redistribution of good and services requires the coercive power of the state, to pretended otherwise is to ignore reality.
>>
>>36192458
I'll read the whole thing, but I'm really expecting to hate it. Aside from books 3, 4, and maybe 1, this series is 1 million words that I already regret.
>>
>>36192458
>If Starlight Glimmer isn't advocating for these things, she is presumably neither a socialist nor a communist. She just hates cutie marks.
But what is a cutie mark if not the means of production?
>>
>>36176362
Give me pony fanfiction in Russian.
>>
>>36192358
>Equestria's constitutional system in this fic seems utterly fucked.
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/457722/my-little-minister-bureaucracy-is-magic

I feel like I did a good job making it work.
>>
Is someone writing that Hitler fic here that was talked about last thread? if you are, what do you think of collaboration?
>>
>>36194629
Anon, you don't collaborate with Hitler.
>>
>>36194629
The proper term is "appeasement."
>>
>>36194629
Right after I finish my superstorm chapter
>>
>>36194660
But you promised to help me with my entry for the Equestrian Encyclopedia...
>>
So mono is printing TEL.
I bought the thing.
Hope the fic's actually good.
>>
>>36195645
It's the best story in the site, haven't you heard?
>>
File: 34r3q3.jpg (6 KB, 250x248)
6 KB
6 KB JPG
>>36195802
No anon - that's Fallout: Equestria!
>>
File: pony-chan.png (427 KB, 427x546)
427 KB
427 KB PNG
>>36196055
No anon that's EMPTY HORIZONS by GOLDENWING
>>
File: 2de.jpg (139 KB, 650x785)
139 KB
139 KB JPG
>>36196446
I really want to think this is Golden himself, but only so I can work myself up/down to his level of shameless promotion.

Also bump.
>>
File: back on the farm.png (3.55 MB, 2544x1080)
3.55 MB
3.55 MB PNG
>>36197113
Think what works best for you, Anon, but I only pretend to be a reader to try and stoke conversation. Which never works.

That said I will gladly accept the title of best story on the site, even if I don't deserve it.
>>
>>36197485
nobody deserves it. quality is subjective, anon. it's people who decide what's bad, and what's readable.
>>
File: bad math.jpg (75 KB, 1024x1024)
75 KB
75 KB JPG
>>36197573
>quality is subjective
Yes, but any artist that uses that as an excuse to get out of being compared to their peers is lying to themselves. Even if the fine details of quality are subjective, you can still generally and pretty reliably gauge how objectively well-written a story is. Obviously TEL is better written than most fics on the site, including my own, even if "best story ever" is just a meme.
>>
>>36194629
I thought about it, but I put it on the backburner for now
>>
>>36197485
In that case, I'll back you up.
"Empty Horizons -- /mlp/'s best story of 2020"
--Anonymous
>>
File: 1358584.png (86 KB, 1080x1080)
86 KB
86 KB PNG
>>36177242
I repeat the call, give me Gilda stories please
>>
>>36198448
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/81217/mine
>>
>open fanfic
>it mentions or acknowledges Starlight Glimmer in any way
>downvote
>close the tab
>>
File: calarts dash.jpg (46 KB, 750x500)
46 KB
46 KB JPG
>>36197969
Thanks, Anonymous. That means a lot coming from you.
>>
>>36190934
In my mind, the first book is a sample of everything the series has to offer. If you like the first book, and you want to see a huge-ass grandiose adventure starring RD, read it all.
Books 2-6 have a ton of different environments and characters, putting the AU tag at its best. Books 7-8 all have more or less the same environment, but the characters are still very good. Book 9 is more darker than the rest (more literally than metaphorically) but if you made it that far, you'll keep going.
If you don't have time to read it all, stick with the first book.
>>
>>36193988
Seconding.
>>
File: wut.png (28 KB, 367x106)
28 KB
28 KB PNG
Found a fic fan.
>>
>>36198812
It’s people like you that make this a terrible world to live in.
>>
>>36200057
>6.5M views
Confirmed. DoaM will end at 6.5 million words.
>>
>>36199438
Except there's not even any RD in the second book for like 100k words. That pissed me off and it's why I've never gone back.
>>
File: featuredmetal.png (171 KB, 1273x416)
171 KB
171 KB PNG
I saw this in slot 7 this morning and took a screenshot, since I knew it would fall out of the box within an hour or so, and I still wanted to be able to complain about it getting featured at all once I eventually had time to read the thing. Turns out I shouldn't have bothered. It's moved up to slot 6, and I think I saw it at 5 earlier in the day.

The story itself is, if anything, actually worse than the description makes it sound. It's a thousand incoherent words and is only comprehensible if you've seen the comic it's based on, and then only barely. As best I can tell, this fic was written, upvoted, and featured entirely on the basis of its cover art. Without a doubt, this is the worst fic that's been featured in at least three days.
>>
>>36200915
How long do fics stay in the feature bin?
>>
>>36200967
Three days tops for new features.
Until something else bumbs it off for updated stories.
>>
>>36200915
It's a 200IQ strategy actually.
The description is so stupid people click out of morbid curiosity. Heat algorithm props it up, which means more views.
You get lolrandom upvotes from people who will upvote anything in the box, and a few downvotes but not enough to matter.
>>
>Ut sano illae magus non poterat
>To hælan þas magice cuðe noht
Which one sounds/looks better? I'm leaning more toward the faux Latin, then the Old English, but everyone uses Latin in their fics.

>>36194036
>state-sponsored assassins run around the interior of the country murdering people because they didn't double check to make sure the kill order was legit
Still seems kind of fucky.

>>36197969
"Empty Horizons -- /mlp/'s best story of 2020, even though it finished in 2018"
--Anonymous
>>
>>36201201
>Which one sounds/looks better?
The to haelen pas magice cube noht one looks cooler because it has retarded not-letters thrown in.
>>
>>36201201
>Which one sounds/looks better?
The ð seals the deal for me.
>>
>>36201201
When Twilight speaks Old Ponish in the show, it sounds more like Old English than like Latin to me, but what's your context, and what are you trying to say? "So that the wizard could not heal her?"
Whichever one you do, make it grammatically correct. My Latin is weak, but that sentence doesn't look right to me.
>>36201216
English should have kept those letters for voiced and unvoiced "th." It would have made much more sense.
>>
File: 1 800 3 BEAM UP.gif (1.84 MB, 325x244)
1.84 MB
1.84 MB GIF
>>36201366
>English
>making sense
Good one!
>>
File: 1551981237191.png (241 KB, 421x500)
241 KB
241 KB PNG
>Got a new reader going through my stories who has praised me getting the characters down perfectly
I hope they're not turned off by my Starlight fic since she's admittedly out of character in it.
>>
File: heh heh heh.jpg (36 KB, 258x372)
36 KB
36 KB JPG
>>36201435
Hey, ignoring her character can only lead to improvement.
>>
File: an adorable execution.jpg (9 KB, 250x231)
9 KB
9 KB JPG
>>36201201
>"Empty Horizons -- /mlp/'s best story of 2020, even though it finished in 2018"
Don't take this from me.
>>
New chapter of Estee out.
>>
>>36201880
>Estee
>>
File: 1600043978804.png (51 KB, 500x500)
51 KB
51 KB PNG
>>36201880
>Estee
What is the appeal of taking ten paragraphs to describe a single action? I don't get it.
>>
>>36198448
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/482992/the-griffon-of-paradise-the-full-account
>>
>>36202806
>What is the appeal of taking ten paragraphs to describe a single action? I don't get it.
It's basically literary realism, if Equestria were real.
Get /lit/, fuckboi. rd sum buks
>>
>>36201435
I already consider Starlight to be a bit of an oddball, so I'm sure it'll be fine. The description for her story looks great, though; really makes me want to read it afterwards.
>>
>>36203066
Thank you, hope you enjoy it.
>>
I wrote something: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/483142/goldengrape-hated-winter-wrap-up
>>
>>36203388
I misread that as goldenrape for a second.
>>
>>36203388
>E
>not golden
>not rape
0/10
>>
Do I read the final volume of the fic series that I've lost faith in, knowing full well that even the fans hate it, just to finish the job, or do I shelf that task for later?
>>
>>36204703
If you've lost faith in it, why bother?
>>
>>36204723
I just want it done. If I kill it now, I know that I'll never be lured back. I don't want the remaining plot threads to bait me in to nostalgia.
>>
>>36204739
If that's a real risk for you, then go ahead and get it done.
>>
>reading HiE story
>author spends thousands of words developing a human protagonist
>protagonist gets transformed into a pony
>immediately drop story
Why do authors do this shit?
>>
>reading HiE story
Why do readers do this?
>>
can I get a word on this?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/483240/derelict
>>
>>36205531
>It was a low tone in color today, the area above was littered with floating waters filled to the brim. Light was inconsistent and drowned out from these crying sacks of air. A broth of simmered elation and sorrow was combined into a cocktail of enormous weight.
Is that just rain? Because it's your first paragraph and I already recognize your writing style, and I think you can do better.
Lots of purple prose just to write "It was a dark and stormy night"
See also https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Laconic/SesquipedalianLoquaciousness
>>
>>36205602
I'm having trouble getting the idea for show dont tell. Its pretty difficult to figure out. I guess I should do this but with smaller words? I'm sort of lost, show vs tell is deeper than I thought.
>>
File: 1570935780709.jpg (2.58 MB, 2502x4032)
2.58 MB
2.58 MB JPG
>>36205614
Show vs tell is very deep, but you can just keep working on that as you improve. There's even more important stuff you should work on in my opinion, anyways.
For instance I'd really like to see you write a story that's simple and using only simple english, but really well executed.

Here's my challenge to you: Write something E-rated (no gore, violent deaths, or mature topics) and don't use a single metaphor, or flowery language, or far-fetched comparison, or deep allegory.
Just plain simple descriptions, actions, and dialogues. Basically forcing you to work on your basics.
Hell, I'd commission it just to see if you can pull it off!
>>
>>36205646
I'll try it out.
>>
File: pleasedLuna.jpg (24 KB, 500x284)
24 KB
24 KB JPG
>>36205680
I'll be waiting!
>>
>>36205614
>show dont tell
I'm obliged to also point out that it's actually "show versus tell," not "show don't tell." Telling isn't inherently bad and has its place alongside showing.

But yeah, "show don't tell" doesn't mean "add extra words." "It was a dark and stormy night" is actually showing, even if it's very cliche, and spending a whole paragraph describing the sound of the gutters overflowing and the splattering of the rain on the windows and the smell of a sodden rat carcass in an alley, although more immersive, is still showing.
>>
>>36205683
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/483253/pinkie-pies-picnic
>>
File: councilOfTwilights.jpg (604 KB, 1920x1080)
604 KB
604 KB JPG
>>36205830
Hey, that was fast!

First of all you're doing pretty good on the challenge. The plot is still full-on crazy (and I expected nothing less), but the writing is now super readable. Only a couple things I'd comment on with regards to technical stuff:

>Pinkie Pie twirled around herself.
This can just be "twirled around", no need to say around herself.
In general, always try to remove words that don't serve any purpose. (Omit needless words! — Strunk-boi & Whitey).

>If only her friends felt the same and weren’t galivating out without her.
The sentence is good as a whole, but galivating is a slip up!
Remove that word entirely from your fics and they'll be instantly a little better. Words like these are too complicated, messy, and confusing.

>There once comfy structure now food for the fire.
"Their". Go get yourself something like Grammarly for this type of stuff. It doesn't fix just the basic stuff for you, if you get into the habit of following what it says you can always improve your writing a little.

>Pinkie Pie kicked with all her might as the team of white shirted ponies grabbed her. She twisted and shook with all her power. They pinned her down and pulled a funnel down her throat. Her loud screech was accompanied by a large smack of her fat plot. One of the ponies was frisky today.
That's stretching the limits of E-rated a little, but if the show can get away with Party of One, I'll take it...

Overall I feel like just restricting yourself to less flowery prose already makes your writing a lot cleaner. You don't have to write like this all the time, but please keep trying to write in simple English when you can. Rare words rarely improve anything.
Keep it up!
>>
>>36205886
sweet, this helps a lot.
Whats next on the menu?
What could I work on next?
>>
>>36205901
I'd say work on making the plot more traditional too if you want to try something less 'surprising', but I'm probably not the right person to help you with that.
>>
>>36205905
okay, i'll try more normal story lines.
>>
>>36205886
>galivating
Is a typo for one thing. And two, "gallivanting" is a perfectly usable word, especially for developing the voice of certain characters.
>>
File: berry bump.png (3.03 MB, 3450x2400)
3.03 MB
3.03 MB PNG
>>
I always thought "slice of life" meant stories where the conflict is something mundane, like the episode where Twilight tries to hold a slumber party that both Applejack and Rarity can enjoy, as opposed to one where the conflict is about saving the world. But Wikipedia says:
>In literary parlance, the term "slice of life" refers to a storytelling technique that presents a seemingly arbitrary sample of a character's life, which often lacks a coherent plot, conflict, or ending. The story may have little plot progress and often has no exposition, conflict, or dénouement, but rather has an open ending.
Which doesn't sound like much of a story at all to me. Am I retarded?
>>
>>36207213
The wikipedia answer is technically more correct, but I think the term in common usage has evolved to take on something closer to your interpretation: There's still a narrative, the stakes are just lower and have more in common with recognizable everyday lives of the audience. In practice, I think you'll find both types on fimfic: Admiral Biscuit, for instance, often writes "wikipedian" slice of life stories that just cover the daily life of a pony with no real plot; but there are also innumerable examples of your definition of slice-of-life stories on the site too.
>>
>>36207213
You've confused "slice of life (episode)" with "slice of life (genre)".
>>
File: dab.png (36 KB, 1248x129)
36 KB
36 KB PNG
bump
>>
>>36208057
>and dabs
based rares
>>
File: yeet.jpg (109 KB, 1280x782)
109 KB
109 KB JPG
>>36208103
>>
>>36208057
I just recently read whatever fic this came from but I can't recall which it is. Care to enlighten me?
>>
File: Nope.png (35 KB, 900x294)
35 KB
35 KB PNG
>>36208855
You're beyondmortal help.
>>
>>36208855
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/82419/a-stitch-in-time
>>
>>36208870
>>36208902
>7 year old fic
>Google can't find it
How?

Anyway, I can't recommend A Stitch in Time. I'd say why, but I don't remember. Here's the pasta straight from my notes:
>Hard Reset - I was hooked for almost the entire fic and read the whole thing in a day. It's not an obvious 10/10 and I read it too quickly to make a clear statement about why it's good, but it's easily one of the best fics that I've read. The only issue is that once the time loop plot is almost resolved, it starts covering the effect that the loops are having on Twilight and this includes two fic-damaging reveals about her character. These reveals become the focus of the final chapters of the fic and the start of the sequel (A Stitch in Time). Although they're not terrible, they're much less interesting than the time loop plot that we signed up for and slowly become a genre shift. I'll say more about them in my review of the sequel, but it suffices to say that they drag an otherwise great fic down a notch.
>A Stitch in Time - I wanted to drop it before I finished chapter 1, but I skimmed as far as chapter 4 before I actually dropped it. The Twilight has PTSD now plot has bothered me since Hard Reset and the transition in to a strangely lesbian-focused SoL hasn't been the best. Long story short, the fic is no longer focusing on what I'm reading it for and what's been put in its place hasn't pleased me. Has it been occasionally funny? Sure, but sacrifices have clearly been made for the genre shift to work. For example, the way that they're stopping our new temporally-displaced friend from learning damaging info about the future is so obviously stupid that it seems forced. I've been assured that the sequels only get worse from here.
I've heard good things about Hard Reset 2, but I found it boring. It lacked a lot of the tension from the original. I dropped it when I was about halfway through because I couldn't care about what was going on. It's also crippled by being incomplete.
>>
>>36207213
>Am I retarded?
yes
welcome to the club
>>
MLP fanfiction is unironically one of the main things that keep me going. Every time i think of a couple hundred stories in my to read list I get this warm feeling in my stomach and the days ahead become brighter. Has anyone had the same experience?
>>
>>36209010
That's just the pleasure of being stuck in a routine that you don't hate.
>>
>>36208951
I sorta liked A Stitch in Time, but I agree that it and the ending of Hard Reset were unnecessary. I don't remember the exact details, but the author introduced romance into the plot and it just felt really out of place.
I think I'll check out the changeling spinoff later, but the synopsis of the last story doesn't really sound appealing.
>>36209010
Same, even looking at synopses of stories I'm not reading yet can put me in a good mood. Sometimes though I feel a sense of regret that I'll likely never be able to see as much as I'd like to.
>>
>>36208870
I genuinely thought it led to a fic I read recently. I was hoping it would spark discussion.
I'm not THAT retarded, anon, I promise.
>>
>>36208951
The Twilight has PTSD plot was all that kept me going. I've never seen a piece of media that shows the consequences of time loops on the psyche of the victim, and it was a competent exploration of that. Having to break out of the "welp did something wrong, time to kill myself" mindset and the paralyzing anxiety that comes from suddenly having consequences was intriguing to read. That being said, almost everything else the sequels did, they did poorly. Arbitrarily powerful time travel, shoddy romance, the FUCKING weathervane joke, the list goes on.
That being said, the alternate universe where Twilight has no way to break out of the loop and eventually creates a timeline where she's basically a grandmother to a happy daughter, right as time and reality breaks gave me the same sort of melancholy that Drakengard 1 and 3 did, which is rare enough that it almost made it worth it. Again, not totally competent, but it was at least novel.
>>
>>36209194
>almost everything else the sequels did, they did poorly.
That's sort of the problem. Like I said, the author had to make big sacrifices to transition in to the PTSD plot - too big.
>>
>>36209325
The PTSD plot did not in any way force the really bad shit the sequels did, such as canonizing the alternate "bad end" chapter from book 1, adding cross-timeline travel into the middle of a time loop, or making the EoH actively malicious.
>>
>>36209553
I remember the third one being really stupid.
Also, the two Discords fight offscreen and its solved offscreen as well.
>>
File: large.jpg (832 KB, 1230x914)
832 KB
832 KB JPG
How was your Thanksgiving, Anon?
>>
>>36210750
horrible
>>
>>36210750
Wait, Thanksgiving?
>>
>>36210750
Very happy, given how far from home I am
>>
>>36209074
>even looking at synopses of stories I'm not reading yet can put me in a good mood
>Sometimes though I feel a sense of regret that I'll likely never be able to see as much as I'd like to.
I feel exactly the same. It's nice to know that I'm not alone in my passion
>>
>Wake up to see a new down vote on my story that's unpopular enough where every single such vote is a big deal
>>
>>36211378
I know that feel
>>
>>36211378
Even on popular fics, every downvote is a big deal.
>>
>>36211378
It's worse when it's what breaks the 10 likes/dislikes requirement.
>>
Starscribe's Hour of Twilight is complete.
What a mess.

It began from a very fun prompt, appealed to my secret HFY fetish, and had some likeable characters (the dumb local AI). But the end was so shoddy. Instead of developing already established stuff in a dramatically satisfying fashion, it just added random new stuff whenever a reason for something happening was necessary. It felt really rushed.
>>
>>36212714
Yeah, I kind of agree. Things relevant to the ending appeared early on but there was no real indication of their value or significance until suddenly it was time to use them to save the day. (Thinking particularly of the time capsule portal thing, and Star counting as human so she can command AIs.) But mostly I wish it wasn't so edgy. It's Message in a Bottle but every single thing is done in the most horrifying way possible.
>>
>>36210750
My family is functional so I got free delicious food in large quantity.
>>
>>36211378
I once updated a fic and had somebody change their upvote to a downvote immediately after.

I spent like, 3 days worrying about that. Why am I like this
>>
>>36214086
On the flip side, I once checked one of my stories and found that I'd lost a downvote and gained an upvote.
Probably my most surreal FiMFiction experience, other than the time I criticised a story and the author agreed with me, thanked me, and explained why they'd done things a certain way.
>>
>>36214149
>I criticised a story and the author agreed with me, thanked me, and explained why they'd done things a certain way.
I don't believe you.
>>
>>36214163
>I don't believe you.
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/707897/zaid-rants-silverstar7s-more-about-time#comment/4425274
I can't believe it's been almost four years since then...
>>
>>36212714
I'm thoroughly convinced by this point that Starscribe is incapable of writing a satisfying ending. Good premise, great sci-fi elements, generally intriguing plot, but damn if I don't get blueballed almost every time by the ending.
>>
How do I get talked about by Zaid Valdaroa, I bleedin want to be talked about by him and what he thinks about my stories.
>>
>>36214303
I just hope he doesn't fuck up Fine Print. It's super comfy and he's actually doing romance reasonably well for once. (Unlike Hour in which the thing with Windbrisk just gets straight-up forgotten.)
>>
>>36214149
>>36214163
I actually had that happen once. Except that I was the assmad reader telling an author why I was downvoting and unfollowing their story. He was pleasantly understanding about it, and even talked to me for a bit about why he wrote it the way he did. Nice guy. Wish I liked more of his stories.
>>
>>36201366
>what's your context
Its supposed to mean "To heal those magic couldn't." Translated solely through using etymology origins. It's the motto for the Health Institute of Equestria--Equestria's version of the NIH. Lore has them founded after Luna used her OPed alicorn healing magic to stop a plague shortly after becoming princess, which gave a bunch of ponies cancer including her lover when it caused their bodies to regenerate out of control. The revelation of this serves as a partial climax to the rinderpest subplot involving them.

>>36205614
>show dont tell
Show don't tell is for character actions and behavior, not narrative descriptions.

>>36207213
Slice of Life is the Wiki definition. It's supposed to present what the characters are doing "off camera" when there's nothing exciting or funny happening that would normally warrant an episode's attention.

>doesn't sound like much
Believe it or not, there is a supreme level of comfiness in that kind of story, since it helps add a sense of realism and normalcy to the setting that can ground things for the reader.

>>36210750
Had a good time with family, though every year reminds me of the hole left when my aunt died seven years ago and that the sadness and longing for the past will only become inescapably worse when my parents die in a decade or two, followed by my brothers, until I'm the only one left.

>>36214303
>incapable of writing a satisfying ending
Ah, the Chengar Curse.
>>
Did anyone else read the new Rekindled Embers? While it was an interesting chapter I was disappointed that There was no Emberglow. Yes, I love Rarity and there was a lot of important information and revelations given this chapter, but I really want to see how Emberglow is doing back in the Diarchy and what's going to happen with her now.
>>
File: 1283236.png (232 KB, 1000x800)
232 KB
232 KB PNG
>tfw my practice writings are getting almost good enough to post
I can't wait
>>
>>36214887
I find it really interesting how so many folks enjoy an oc-centric story so thoroughly, going so far as to, in your case, eagerly await the return of the oc protagonist. Makes me feel all warm and fuzzy, and gives me hope for my fic in the future with a similar sort of aim.

And I completely agree. I enjoy seeing the world as a whole expanded upon, and it makes a lot of sense with the author mentioning they'll need to swap characters to take it all in fully. However, I still long for a return to the character we've learned so much about and her reaction to these incredible new revelations they're going through.
>>
>>36215274
Personally i'm starting with small, full fics to get myself into the routine of practicing EVERYTHING a story entails, and then scaling it up, trying newer or more complicated things later on when I feel more confident.

Glad to hear you're making some great steps forward, anon!
>>
>>36214887
Yeah, I wonder if this is a permanent POV shift or if it's going to switch back and forth
Did anyone else notice that out of four relationships mentioned in this chapter, not a single one was straight, same species, and monogamous? Discord + Terminus (gay), unnamed mare at the door + Ginger Spice (gay), Pastel Paint + Cobalt (mixed species), Bubblegum + Galileo + Wind Storm (mixed species threesome). Plus historical Discord + Fluttershy (mixed species), if you count that. Again I have to question how the population of this world hasn't totally collapsed.
>>
>>36215668
Oh yeah. Love the fic, but as i've said earlier it's getting a bit more noticeable. The doormare I kind of just thought "ah of course, she's a lesbian". Then the griffon and other mare. Then they reminded us of bubblegum and explicitly states it's a polyamorous relationship, and is implied to be pregnant with one of the two fathers (assuming the griffon, because it's an at-risk pregnancy?). I get it's part of the freedom aspect of this rebellion, open and carefree love and whatnot to contrast the Diarchy, but geez.

Am I wrong in feeling kind of put off by how easily Rarity accepts this thing too? Not to assume her character, but she seemed to have ideals of "one true love" and "her prince" in the show, which implies she has a roughly traditional view on relationships, that being one lover you devote to, but perhaps that's a weird tangential thought. I feel she would at least question it like "oh, how does this work? do they both have kids with you, or only one? how does this two lovers in the same house pan out?".
>>
Bump just to save us and say I'm going to start writing my Western next week.
>>
>>36216481
Will there be cowpoking?
>>
>>36216598
Only if he's willing to get into the ethical details of ranching sentient creatures.
>>
>>36215764
I don't really mind Rarity's not objecting to or questioning it, mostly because if the author just went "oh Equestria was totally okay with all of this and all the answers are known already" then I'd have just shrugged and moved on with the other, more interesting parts of the story. What I do object to is the author throwing it in the audience's face literally every chapter. It's become a character "litmus test" in a story I loved for nuanced portrayals.

>>36215295
Emberglow hit the sweet-spot for OC creation:
>In a new environment that the show didn't explore before, so readers can discover it alongside her
>Not in a self-insert-ey "everything is happy" kind of story; didn't seem like good things were guaranteed to come easily
>Has actual character goals that actually drive her story (become a knight, make her parents proud, uphold the ideals of the Diarchy)
>Has actual flaws that actually obstruct her journey towards those goals (terrible at fighting, tends to avoid conflict with individuals even when it will obviously come back and bite her later)
What was also good at the start is that we could obviously see a lot of these goals were going to fall apart over the course of the story. Obviously she's not going to end the story trying to embody the ideals of such an awful society, so what happens between A and Z? That made us want both follow her journey and learn about this new world.
>>
>>36217463
The fic is a humanized AU.
>>
>>36217564
Well, at least it's not anthro.
>>
>>36217564
Well, if you want guns, you have to go humanized/EQG. There's no other option. And a western just wouldn't be a western without guns.
>>
>>36218040
I've been debating whether to make it humanized Equestria AU or just an EQG AU. I feel like the mood and style fits the humanized AU better, but at the same time people are still probably going to picture the characters in their heads as the EQG versions and it would make descriptions easier. And the Shadowbolts are going to be a prominent outlaw gang in the first place.
>>
>>36218081
follow yr heart
>>
File: fuzzy eye highlights.png (555 KB, 864x1100)
555 KB
555 KB PNG
>>36214163
You won't believe this at all.
I've been rereading Method to his Madness and found that a scene that I harped on for a while during the editing process had been rewritten with significant improvements. I'm pretty happy.
>>
>>36204795
TF in general makes me drop any story, what an utter garbage plot device
>>
>>36218637
Humans is where I draw the line. Bipeds don't belong amongst my beloved ponies.
>>
>>36210750
It was refreshing, spent a few days with family completely cut off from the Internet. Came back to some updates for stories I like and watching B_25 start on his drama-laden path to eventually cutting his dick off.

Action adventure and comedy story updates, and a tragedy playing out live and in color. Very comfy.
>>
>>36218637
ur wrong, for example Friendship is Optimal is great.
tf is a great way to set up tension (in theory. In practice it attracts shitty writers). tf stories where the pony would be in the human world are shit though.

I'd like to see more tf stories where the human-turned-pony tries to keep anyone from finding out he was a human. Usually everyone knows it either immediately or it's revealed early, then the tension is gone. I want tension!
>>
>>36218603
Which scene?
>>
File: moon wand.png (189 KB, 671x790)
189 KB
189 KB PNG
>>36219740
The hospital rooftop scene during and immediately following Luna curing Equilibrium.
>>
File: baka pie.gif (206 KB, 800x615)
206 KB
206 KB GIF
Thanksgiving is killing my thread. I'd even take more Rekindling Embers talk over this silence.
>>
>>36220324
I'm busy writing. I'm trying to finish up one more chapter of the story I'm writing now before I leap over to start writing the first chapter of my Western.
>>
Has anyone read this?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/428517/local

Because it seems super slow to update, but holy shit that description is drawing me in.
>>
>>36220611
Sounds good, but that update schedule is bleak.
>>
>>36220611
What >>36220681 said.
It's been on my tracking shelf since it started. I hope it doesn't die.
>>
>>36220611
Oh yeah, I've been reading this! Good to see it actually fucking updated again despite being promised weekly updates and that the fic is basically all written.
The fic is interesting but I have mixed feelings about it, reserving final judgment for whenever it's actually finished.
>>
>>36220611
It's on my list of to read since it looks like it has that atmospheric horror vibe I'm always after, but damn does that six month gap look more horrifying than anything in the fic.
>>
3000 words today, feels good.
>>
>>36222222
>>
>>36222581
What was it?
>>
>>36222656
Wasted digits. https://s1.desu-usergeneratedcontent.xyz/mlp/image/1606/70/1606702996419.png
Anyways, Emberglow cute.
>>
I guess I'll read RE after I finish my current work. I might learn some lessons from it.
>>
Catchong up on the most recent chapters now.
> Also, bump
>>
>>36222928
Harmony's ain't free. The church of the diarchy needs to be littered with the horns of unicorns. Emberglow is not a cute. She is a heretic and probably a profligate whore. Faith and duty not creatures and love ok. Praise the saints.
>>
>>36176270

So I just caught up on the most recent chapter of Rekindled Embers, and... I'm pretty disappointed.

We finally get to meet the rebels, and they're completely devoid of any depth. Like, in a story that was so supremely fascinating because it asked "what if the evil empire wasn't populated just by jerks and assholes" and made sure to show a varying cast of characters, the rebels are completely and unalterably pure. None of them are bitter. None of them are vengeful. None of them engage in petty spats, hold biases or questionable positions, or blame Rarity or the other M6 for allowing the current shitty state of affairs to develop. Apparently they're all off in happyperfectland living happy little lives eating ice cream and fucking each other. The single worst "flaw" that's pointed out among any of them is Terminus being jealous of Discord's past relationship with Fluttershy and even that has no real impact on either character. They feel like an idealized stereotype, in a story that once rejected stereotypes. Maybe I'm being too hard on the author after such a brief glimpse, but recent chapters have led me to suspect that if it's that shallow, that's really all there is to it.

Then there are some other pretty severe issues with the backstory to this chapter, much like the previous chapter's revelation about unicorn horns. But I'll keep myself limited to one rant at a time.
>>
>>36224568
I require more spoilers, I'm only at chapter 20 and my girl is currently busy earning her second life sentence
>>
>>36212714
>But the end was so shoddy.
>It felt really rushed.
Sounds like Starscribe.
>>36224568
I think we just haven't seen enough of the rebels. All we've seen so far is them trying to get ponies on their side. There will probably be more angry and hurt rebels later as they're shown in more detail.
>>
>>36224568
I'm wondering how exactly they manage to have such a huge permanent base (an entire city, apparently) without getting raided hard by the diarchy. All it takes is one defector giving up the location.
>>
>>36217555
Heck, that's a good and concise summary. I hope I can do the same with my story in the future then and hit the right notes for a character.
>>
>>36224944
Especially since Cozy Glow founded the Diarchy post-S8 and should 100% have known about Mount Aris/Seaquestia.
>>
>>36224568
I'm willing to mostly give that a pass because we've only briefly seen it. But at the same time it's pretty clear that the heretics are unequivocally the "good guys" of the story even if the Diarchy has plenty of good ponies living in it.

Right now the Diarchy itself is still the most interesting place in the story and I really, really, want to get back to Emberglow right now.
>>
>>36193988
Thirding.





Delete Post: [File Only] Style:
[Disable Mobile View / Use Desktop Site]

[Enable Mobile View / Use Mobile Site]

All trademarks and copyrights on this page are owned by their respective parties. Images uploaded are the responsibility of the Poster. Comments are owned by the Poster.