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ITT: reading, writing, a third of the world's population manages to keep a secret, politics, nuclear R&D, nominations, "Bleeding is a staple of horse literature", shipping, stories that include its own sequel like a malformed absorbed twin, Numbers lost all relevancy, not writing, GAOA is still nonsense loosely tied together into a plot, non MLP fanfics, AOL accounts in 2019, trainwolves, miscegenation, inconsequential alicorns, nofap more like "no, fag", reading a bunch of rationalfics, Estee, AUs, and general shitposting.

>FiMFiction Starter Kit (recommended fics):
Winners:
http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png
List of nominees by category:
http://mlp-fanfics.herokuapp.com/

>How do I write fanfiction?
Ezn’s guide - https://eznguide.neocities.org/
Politics and the English Language - http://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/
Vhatug's tips for anatomically correct clop - https://pastebin.com/g4VpEg4f
Horse Behaviour - http://www.equestrianandhorse.com/equus/behaviour.html
Setting a story in motion - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ufO8LbwTdu0
Taking criticism - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-v4R2ZcxPlA

>Can you pre-read my story?
Post it on Google Docs with comments enabled and give us a link.

>Reviews and riffs:
https://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmom
https://pastebin.com/u/IHeartShinzakura
https://pastebin.com/wmGX7FPm
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1z9Bz7UnEbxo-svlXa2tV49PJkP-yFuR7pRXiBUn-IeU

>Voiceguy's readings:
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCt68MpmvEketmqOdHncHI2w

Last thread: >>33943949
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Scooterdude get
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>>33988654
>off by one
The Dude is UnAbiding in his grave.
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>>33988660
>in his grave.
at least its a freshly dug grave
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>>33988262
>stories that include its own sequel like a malformed absorbed twin
Stories that include their own sequel like a malformed twin
Story that includes its own sequel like a malformed twin
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Winter Bells reading when
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Has Daetrin written anything other than his Apotheosis universe fics? I like his writing style a lot but he has so little content. If not, can anyone recommend a similar author/fic?
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No, sorry
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Damn.
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I need tips for my commas, I feel like there should be a semicolon in this sentence and in the one that I'm about to quote. Anyone got any advice?
>The highlights should be good, the changelings really know how to suck dicks.
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>>33990501
Try a period. Semicolon would probably work, but not necessarily necessary.
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>>33990751
I can understand a semicolon, but why a period? The two sentences are clearly related.
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Anyone know of a fic where anon fucks a ton of fillies. I don't think it was on fimfic, probably fanfiction.net. I remember 3 pones in particular being Apple bloom, Babs seed and, another pony from manehattan
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What's the overall plan for the nominations? Are we going to compile them in to something?
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>>33990832
Hence why they're grouped in the same paragraph.
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Is Friendship is Dragons adding anything original to what it's adapting? I feel like I'd be better off just watching the show.
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>>33990931
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/428136/a-nice-game-of-chess

Not the best story out there by far but I like to shed light on little known stories plus I'm a sucker for reformation stories and unusual character pairings.
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>>33990934
Yes.
Speaking of which, what's the latest category we're nominating?
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>gaoa 2, ch.13 (Highfalutin')
I was going to wait and do 13-15 together, but there's one little scene in here that deserves special mention.

We already met Highfalutin', Divine Right's sister, an obnoxious entitled socialite. Basically Blueblood, except Blueblood is busy playing Depressed James Bond in this fic, so he needed replacing. Hf recently got ebin trolled by Sunbutt and Sunbutt, tricked into giving up her duchy in exchange for the worst barony in Equestria.

Today, we get to meet the REAL Highfalutin'. She's evil, obviously. And because this is a Shinzakura fic, she's evil in every possible way, all at the same time.

She meets first with her new assistant, Teeline, a cute young earth pony mare. Hf introduces herself, gives Teeline an impromptu lesson on assertiveness, molests her a bit, and sends her off to the landholders' meeting with instructions to tell them who's boss.

Next, Hf meets with her two most trusted lieutenants, Bizzlepop Ferrytwist and Trapper. These two exposit on her past a bit, like the time she seduced a stallion into falling in love with her, manipulated him for years, and then had Trapper kill him when he became "inconvenient". (Incidentally, Ferrytwist has already investigated Teeline's current coltfriend, and she's already got a plan for breaking them up.)

Now it's time for some felonies. Trapper actually already killed the old captain, so Ferrytwist can step in right away to train the local guards properly. Separately, Mayor Sunmane of one of Hf's villages might become a problem, so Hf has Ferrytwist start planning the assassination. She'll give the order (or better yet, manipulate Teeline into giving it) by the end of the week.

Finally, the warcrimes. The barony has long been plagued by griffon pirates and raiders, which Hf intends to stop. She orders a nearby warship to float on over to wherever it is that griffons live, shell a few seaside villages at random, and then set loose Trapper for some indiscriminate slaughter.
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>>33991520
If we've run out of steam for Comedy, how about Slice of Life?

Also OP is a faggot and didn't include a link to the current nominees.

http://198.27.67.67:8000/
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>approve https://www.fimfiction.net/story/101769/triptych for adventure
First off, I do agree with the Secret being autistic, even with the explanation later given. Okay now, Jesus fucking Christ, what the fuck is wrong with the anon who gave that rejection. Get your head out of your ass you Low IQ pretentious autist. As if expanding on already existing ideas is cancerous, and """fancy""" names are vexing, WTF is world building? It isn't trying to be original, an AU, it's trying to expand while trying to stay true to the show. It has other problems which the dumbfuck was probably too distracted TRYING to understand """hard""" concepts like Estee's Differentiation. Like how a lot of it is full of vague monologues which are irritating.
It has other negative comments like how it can be ">le edgy racism", which is just stupid, since it explores racism in a true way. Though AJ can be somewhat retarded at times, it's very much passable.
As for the plot, it's basically the races coming to learn about each other, like ponies are in their teenage years and are just spreading their legs and seeing their nice, tight and ripe pussies.
There seems to be a plague here of pretentious faggots who clearly think they know more than they do. So to future people reading this, take these comments likely. Note that a lot of these anons called quotes by Joyce, Shakespeare and Blake "purple trash" because it was labeled as written by SS&E. And that they also masturbate themselves reading shit/rational fics, as to feel better about themselves that they aren't AS autistic as those writer.
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>>33992402
>>approve https://www.fimfiction.net/story/101769/triptych for adventure
>what the fuck is wrong with the anon who gave that rejection
Hi, that's me, and please note that that comment was specifically in reply to the nomination that praised Triptych's worldbuilding. That's why it starts with "I don't understand why people praise the worldbuilding."

>It isn't trying to be original
It sure looks like it's trying, when it repeatedly brings up trivial concepts that the characters, if the worldbuilding was done correctly, would consider so commonplace as to barely be worth mentioning, and gives those concepts capitalized/italicized names to make damn sure the reader notices each and every occurrence.

>it's very much passable
This is the closest thing to a positive statement I can find in your post. Why is it an >approve?
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>>33992402
Is this written by the author? Or is Bleedin' a fan of Triptych?
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>>33992822
It's more coherent than Bleeding and much more concise than Estee
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AAG next week GET THE FUCK HYPE FOR TRUE SHINSANITY ON THE 4TH BECAUSE MERICA FUCK YEAH.
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>>33977258
>it takes some effort to get it up
>not scheduling your fapping days in advance so you can optimize the blue balling for maximum horniness

>>33982904
>Mortal's in the rationalfic group
That explains why it has a basilisk-tier ending.

>>33985641
That's not how the AU tag works. For a story to have it, it needs to substantially deviate from the setting presented in the show.

>There is no failed alicorn in the show
A Parliament has also never been mentioned. That doesn't mean one doesn't exist. When canon gives no answer to a question, it doesn't automatically mean that the answer is no. That's why so many "happening in the present" adventure fics kick the action to outside of Equestria, where canon has no real answers.

>>33990501
Semicolons are either used to connect closely related independent clauses or to separate items in a list that have commas. Generally, a semicolon replaces a coordinating conjunction and comma in a sentence:
>I am going home, and I intend to stay there.
>I am going home; I intend to stay there.
>It rained heavily during the afternoon, but we managed to have our picnic anyway.
>It rained heavily during the afternoon; we managed to have our picnic anyway.

Since your quote doesn't work with a conjunction added after the comma, it's probably a run-on sentence and needs a period.

>>33990832
>>33991029, this. All sentences in a paragraph are supposed to be related.
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>>33990934
Nah. we'll do this for a little while, then get bored, drop it, then not mention it again for a couple of years
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>>33993158
I'm hype.
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>>33993550
>not scheduling your fapping days in advance so you can optimize the blue balling for maximum horniness
>he fell for the Chinese one week meme
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>>33993550
>Semicolons are either used to connect closely related independent clauses or to separate items in a list that have commas
I often wonder why people think that these sorts of responses are helpful. If a person doesn't know how to use a comma, then they sure as Hell don't know what the different types of clauses are.
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The more the second arc in The Olden World comes to a head the more I'm certain that the author has an addiction to making things overly complex.
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>>33995379
If you want to get anywhere with anything, at some point you have to learn to figure things out from context.
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/402043/the-dark-art-of-the-dress

This is a great comedy fic I stumbled across earlier today that I thought you anons might enjoy. The premise is entertaining on its own, it has a few solid jokes, and it's well written with a nice moral at the end. Give it a read, it's short.
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Got any good fics where a human is suddenly stuck in the bodies of one of the main characters and has to haplessly flail their way through the story? I'd prefer to avoid randumb or them using it as an excuse to be an asshole.
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>>33996021
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/410819/so-you-want-to-be-a-princess
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Looks like nobody cares about Slice of Life. Mystery? Horror? Dark? Drama? Pick something, anons.
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>>33996687
Are you that dumbass that is complaining that comedy nominations are closed because nobody's nominated a comedy story this thread?

There exists no restriction on timing, nor one on whether the category exists or not. Only on the motivation of the guy running it to create categories.
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>>33996149
That one seems really bogged down by an over-elaborate premise and a ton of offscreen pre-established character relationship stuff.
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>>33996697
I'm sorry, could you point out where I'm complaining?
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>>33997011
>>33995988
close enough
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>>33993550
>Since your quote doesn't work with a conjunction added after the comma,

The conjunction is an implied "because." The semicolon is permissible, but since both clauses are simple, a comma can serve the same function. Or they can just as easily be broken into separate sentences with a period.
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>>33995650
If I had that sort of intelligence, then I'd already know how to use a comma.

>>33996687
Clop.
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>>33997347
>If I had that sort of intelligence, then I'd already know how to use a comma.
You mean like you did just now?
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>>33997400
If then is the easier case because it pretty much always applies.
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>tfw fics aren't giving me that warm feeling they used to
Am I reading the wrong stuff, or is it time to die?
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>>33997742
Sounds like depression. Read BGP and if you don't drown in your own tears, you need to down in bleach.
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>>33997742
Could be depression or just plain old misery. Have a few orgasms, make some friends, do some basic fitness like walking, push ups, or going to the gym, visit /fit/, and make sure that you're eating right.
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>>33997754
I've read BGP and it didn't make me cry so much as it made me feel hollowed out. I don't think I felt an emotion for a solid 3 days after reading it. Great fic tho.

>>33997834
I take an antidepressant and have a job that keeps me physically active, the depression just flares up at times. I do need to eat more veggies though. Any feel good fics you know of, or perhaps recipes involving mushrooms and/or broccoli?
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>>33998672
>recipes involving mushrooms and/or broccoli?
I know a few, but they're not quite healthy.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UxZk762hZgM
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>>33998672
Look up mushroom quesadilla recipes. Once you get it right they're genuinely mediocre mexican restaurant tier, not hard to make either.
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I meant to reserve judgement until the end of this fic, but all that's left is a well-deserved wind down and sweet merciful Justice.

And despite the prevailing opinion in this thread, I did genuinely enjoy the lore.
But that said, even though it's interesting and fairly well though out, I have to admit that the Secret really is giving suspension of disbelief a run for its money. The way Differentiation ignores air but not water raises more questions. If not holes, the plot has structural weaknesses.

As for the characters, well the Powerful ones are truly at their best. Celestia and Discord inspire all the respect they're due along with a few different forms of awe.
The Bad ones are as vile as anyone can ask for. Some chapters are enough I think to make even the most jaded sociopaths' blood pressure gain a few percents in anger.
And then the mane seven are good. It's faint praise and that's how I mean it. They're well written, but that's not the reason I ended up loving this story so much.

But what's really setting it apart is that it feels like a story that was truly planned from the start.
I could see all the pieces but didn't realize they were falling into place. I was given numerous, repeated clues, chances, and foreshadowing — only some of which I caught. The author beat me fair and square, outsmarted me all the way through, and that's what keeps my attention and makes me turn the pages.

Now some people are going to feel that the style is hard to understand sometimes. That's nonsense, the prose is rich and if something doesn't make sense that's only because you missed that the obvious is currently in the process of crashing down around you and will only truly hit in a few chapters. And yes the pace is pretty slow — 90% through the story, plot's over, and 50k words remain — but at no point does it get boring. It's a long story and it's a damn good one.

Consider that a nomination, a favorite, and a thanks to the author.
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>>33998843
>consider that a nomination
>doesn't actually nominate
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>>33998899
Fuck your retarded nomination rules.
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>>33998843
>The way Differentiation ignores air but not water raises more questions.
He literally explains this in the fic, doesn't he? Magic can't go through things, it has to push them aside. Pushing through air is basically effortless. Pushing through water is harder, especially when it's a rapidly moving stream like Rarity deals with near the start. You can't go through solid matter, you'd have to destroy it.
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>>33999069
What's the point of making and operating a web app to catalog all the discussion of all the nominations if we're just gonna ignore it and let everything we say be lost within a month?
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>>33999226
He wants there to be no point, and for the comments to be lost.
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>approve https://www.fimfiction.net/story/101769/triptych for adventure
I meant to reserve judgement until the end of this fic, but all that's left is a well-deserved wind down and sweet merciful Justice.

And despite the prevailing opinion in this thread, I did genuinely enjoy the lore.
But that said, even though it's interesting and fairly well though out, I have to admit that the Secret really is giving suspension of disbelief a run for its money. The way Differentiation ignores air but not water raises more questions. If not holes, the plot has structural weaknesses.

As for the characters, well the Powerful ones are truly at their best. Celestia and Discord inspire all the respect they're due along with a few different forms of awe.
The Bad ones are as vile as anyone can ask for. Some chapters are enough I think to make even the most jaded sociopaths' blood pressure gain a few percents in anger.
And then the mane seven are good. It's faint praise and that's how I mean it. They're well written, but that's not the reason I ended up loving this story so much.

But what's really setting it apart is that it feels like a story that was truly planned from the start.
I could see all the pieces but didn't realize they were falling into place. I was given numerous, repeated clues, chances, and foreshadowing — only some of which I caught. The author beat me fair and square, outsmarted me all the way through, and that's what keeps my attention and makes me turn the pages.

Now some people are going to feel that the style is hard to understand sometimes. That's nonsense, the prose is rich and if something doesn't make sense that's only because you missed that the obvious is currently in the process of crashing down around you and will only truly hit in a few chapters. And yes the pace is pretty slow — 90% through the story, plot's over, and 50k words remain — but at no point does it get boring. It's a long story and it's a damn good one.
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>nominate https://www.fimfiction.net/story/440461/the-many-resurrections-of-twilight-sparkle for comedy

This fic is just plain funny. It's well written, the characters are generally in character, and it has funny, dumb things happening without needing the characters to act overly stupid to get those things to happen.
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>>33998843
Anon, I'm only 1/5th and I'm enjoying it too. I love how much of a cunt Coordinator is and how emotionally retarded ponies are compared to hoomans. Some parts make me genuinely laugh too, like this one

>""Directisn't part of anything you do. You keep to the shadows more than Princess Luna, and there are times when you almost seem to do a better job at creating them."
That got him a slight nod. "I do my part,Lord Presence.""

If you continue into the Triptych stories, please let us me know if they're worthwhile.
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>>33999924
>If you continue into the Triptych stories, please let us me know if they're worthwhile.
Yes
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/437709/doppelgngers

This ones good.
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>>33998843
Triptych is definitely one of the more divisive stories in the fandom, and not without some fair criticism - the early chapters especially show the writer finding their feet; if you look through their earlier short stories and more recent ones, you'll see the same. But by the early-middle the writing has much improved, and even with that issue Triptych is one of the few stories out of this fandom that left me feeling truly emotionally satisfied - and even wanting more. When I got to the end it really did give the sense of a saga being ended. All the results bar one were wrapped up, and it seems like the author is approaching that last bit right now.
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Did Twilight get her cutie mark before or after meeting Cadence? It was after, right? I'm trying to remember how Tyrantestia fics explain Twilight being foalsit by a princess.

Actually, that's a lie. I'm trying to remember what ___ said about it.
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>>34001256
There's not enough information to conclusively say.
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>>34001277
Actually, I lied. The flashback in ACW shows cutie mark-less Twilight.
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>>34001281
I thought so.

So how do Tyrantestia fics explain Twilight, a complete nobody who may be from a good family, getting the attention of a princess? The "groomed for the Element of Magic" explanation doesn't work without handwaving cutie marks.
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>>34001301
twilight is a eugenics project
idk, i don't read tyrantlestia fics
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>>34001301
How do you explain it?
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Hey look, my favorite trainfic got another sequel: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/443238/
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>>34001739
I have a deep and innate prejudice against fics prominently featuring trains
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>>34000387
>“Drat,” Evil Twilight seethed as Pinkie Pie pulled her out of the kitchen by the tail. “I was on the verge of greatness! I was this close!”
fuck off
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>>34002071
That's weird, anon.
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>>34002071
I guess you could say you're getting fear from the rails
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>>34002076
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Hey guys, what do you think about this: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/436202/through-the-aurora . I think stpry have some potential, but mc has a big chance of becoming Mary Sue (and kinda already is)
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>>34003062
I've seen that a few times and the initial premise sounded interesting, and I like the other fic from that author I've read. The only problem is:

>Human

So that kills my desire to read it.
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>>34003345
Isn't basically every Starscribe story
>human
? Usually with a language barrier and a sex change, too, it seems.
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>>34001256
Fuck. I opened TMA back up and I've ended up on a scene that's never made sense to me. I fucking swear it - I'm certain that Celestia's plan in TMA doesn't make sense. If I ever am to do a reread, it'll be to try and fail to figure her out. And how was Twilight abandoned twice? Regardless... If Twilight didn't get her Cutie Mark until her entrance exam, how could she be the planned replacement for Sunset? I suppose that Twilight must've been good at magic to even get in to the exam, but that's a stretch and still fails to explain Cadence.

I sometimes wonder, when did the makers of the show stop caring about continuity? ACW or even earlier?
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>>34003449
>abandoned twice
She's talking about Celestia letting Sunset Shimmer run away and later denying Twilight Sparkle mentorship.
>how was she the replacement
Well, the Flare - when she got the cutie mark - was what make her unsuitable as a replacement. Presumably, that means she was suitable, previously. It's been years (I think you still have the screencap of the post I wrote when I just finished reading it) so I don't remember the details but presumably Celestia knew Twilight was unusually strong/gifted. Don't they later mention that Celestia suspected Twilight's origins all along? Or not exactly, but at least that she knew something was unusual from the very start.
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>>34003534
>spoiler
But there's no relationship between Sunset and Twilight yet. This is something like chapter 8.

>but presumably Celestia knew Twilight was unusually strong/gifted.
I know of no evidence for this anywhere, not even in canon.

Ok never mind. It's in the first fucking chapter. I'm retarded.

>other spoiler
The only real tip that I remember was that shit in the hospital. I can't recall anything THAT explicit, unless we're counting the chapter where Twilight tells Celestia to get the fuck off of her spaceship.
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>>34003534
>Celestia knows what happened to Sunset
She doesn't. The first chapter is in her perspective and it's right there.
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>fanfic has a character having a horrible nightmare
>Luna doesn't show up
EVERY. SINGLE. TIME.
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>>34003751
>fanfic where character is having a horrible nightmare
>luna shows up, banishes the dream and then introduces herself for convenient character introduction
happens a lot more i'd wager
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Anyone know what the best changeling fic is? Want to read something changeling related.
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>>34003885
Mendacity
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>>34003885
Mendacity
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>>34003885
http://198.27.67.67:8000/story/57/2
Gave me everything I ever wanted from a changeling story and then some, but is toxic to the thread.
>>34003896
>>34003918
Is hardly a changeling story. It's a celtic lore fanfic that happens to have a changeling as its main character. Mendax's kelpie friend does more changeling things than Mendax herself.
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>>34003885

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/87982/derplicity if you're looking for something fun and easy

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/206017/queen-of-queens if you're looking for (pre-nu-ling) worldbuilding

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/81260/subjunctive if you're looking for a long read
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>>34003885
I dunno about the best but this is probably the best changeling centric fic I've ever read
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/52953/without-a-hive
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>>34003701
>spoiler
God dammit I'm going to end up reading this shit
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>>34004094
Strange, the spaceship makes a lot of people drop the fic. To some it seems to come out of nowhere, but to my memory you'll see it coming if you know your trigonometry.
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>>34003954
>>34004071
doubt it's a coincidence these two have the same author, the guy knows how to changeling
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Its July 4th and Chink didnt post an update for GAOA a.a.a "Ponk really wants in Sunset's panties: the fanfic"...is the madness we all know him for making its yearly resurrection today?
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Hmm, sleep or resurrect this thread? Hard choice. I'll have to roll up another fic from the LW group. Better be a short one... I choose Post-SingulariTwi!

Well... the synopsis is making this look very LessWrong. What am I in for? A Magical Mystery Cure sequel?
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>>34006643
I am immediately confused.
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>>34006643
>>34006646
I'm like halfway through and it's been nothing but set-up so far. I'm either wasting my time or reading propaganda. I'm not sure which. It's reminding me of A Dash of Ethics.
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>>34006643
>>34006646
>>34006663
Fic finished. I have almost nothing to say. The fic just doesn't seem to do anything. There's like 6k words of Twilight slowly coming to terms with her situation, but it all just feels pointless. It's a competent enough death story to qualify as a sad fic, but there's just nothing here. What I've screenshotted is basically 70% of the fic.

I'm really at a loss here. It's not often that you read 8k words and have nothing to say about them. Is tiredness blinding me or am I making true observations? I really don't know. Maybe someone else will give it a read? The thread is fucking dead anyway. It's good enough if you want a sad fic or the sort of fic that has to specifically deny being in the optimalverse.
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Oh and just to follow up on >>34006646, nothing mentioned in that screenshot ever came back. It seems completely separate from the story.
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>>34006646

I hate it just for the ascii starburst / scene break
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Hi, anons. Does anyone want to edit my clopfic(Shining Armor and Flurry Heart body swap)?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F0yWuyCeZ_fTQd7ZXmPEj4433MZkZCaojhg5KLBxDqA/edit#
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https://youtu.be/KmFSpVALOqo

Umm, did Skirts write the first verse?
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>>34007267
Watching this movie, I now understand where the scitwi is a slut meme comes from
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Another day, another page 10, another feature box, let's take it from the top

>shimmer gets fucked by horses, episode 23
>1k comedy Twilight ranting at Celestia for being an incompetent shit ft. fake goofy villain
>anthro clopfic changeling gangbang inspired by kanashiipanda
>Human comes back to Equestria, falls in love with Starlight, but Twilight has a crush on him too
>Wallflower from eqg commits sudoku, Sunset asks why as she's dying
>Apple Bloom x Diamond Tiara (rated teen)
>existential comedy with Trixie
>that "OC in Sombra's Crystal Empire" story again
>a fucking Spyro crossover
>Friendship Games, but instead of Games, it's Yugioh
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>>34008043
>episode 23
If only. I can't get enough of this shit. The most hot fetish ever.
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Wonder what happened to that guy who wanted to be a pony and was contacting spiritual folks.

>>34008043
>Friendship Games, but instead of Games, it's Yugioh
I approve, but who the fuck would make this? It can't be a kid, but no adult YGO fan would make fics of it.
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>nominate https://www.fimfiction.net/story/14777/contraptionology for comedy

This fic is hilarious, the word play can be on the nose but that's part of what makes it charming. AJ as the consistent narrator gives a unique voice to the comedy as it unfolds, and even the twist (as much as it can be called that) is well foreshadowed. It's written technically well, and though the word count is somewhat padded (from the aforementioned AJ-isms and reflections, mostly) it certainly doesn't overstay its welcome and the concluding chapters are some of the most charming. Would read again/10.
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>>34008043
I'm curious about the Spyro fic but this is the last sentence of the first paragraph.
>There were even marble hallways that were built into the hills, so dragons could go right through a hill and not have to bother going around them, while the houses that each of them lived in were a little different from each other, as a few lived in small castle like buildings, a few took up residence in large stone buildings, and a few chose to live in intricate stone towers.
This shit is a mess right? Or am I bring overly critical?
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>>34009333
well, it's certainly not good
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>>34009333
With the exception of some dialogue, there is not a single sentence in the first chapter with less than 3 commas.
>"Indeed." Nestor said, as he was happy to hear that his fellow Leaders had been able to get here safely, despite the fact that the lands they had come from wouldn't have any enemies for them to worry about, not when the only threat was contained in a faraway land, before he glanced outside to the courtyard, where a single dragon egg rested, "Today is the Year of the Dragon Festival, as I'm sure you all know by now, and the fairies have told me that there will only be one egg hatching today, the purple dragon egg that we have been watching for the last year.
help
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>>34009333
It's really clumsy writing, but in the "beginner writer" way, not the "hopelessly autist" way.
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>>34008394
>Wonder what happened to that guy who wanted to be a pony and was contacting spiritual folks.

Don't you remember? He was legit, Regi got turned into a pony and can barely type now.
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>>34009333
it's generally shitty writing. The beginning of that paragraph is no better.

But hey it has 51-0 ratio so it must be good(No. Bronies just like eat shit)
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Fimfic.net:
>a% great fics
>b% good fics
>c% mediocre fics
>d% bad fics
>e% shit fics
>f% guilty pleasure fics (e.g. "so bad it's good")
Solve.

Personally, I think that it's at least 50% mediocrity. Most fics aren't good or bad, they're completely unexceptional. As for the other numbers, I think that guilty pleasures outweigh great fics.
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>>34008101
Yup. Sunset retaining her pony instincts and urges is top-quality hawt. Hope this one digs into the sensory assault of the smell and feel and look of a stallion for her.
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>>34009333
The fact that this "paragraph" is all one sentence says all you need to know about this story.
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>>34007018
well, not sure if anyone else was gonna look at it, but I've done with editing. It's published now. Also, self-promotion post. Why not.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/443066/heated-exchange
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>read ocalhoun's blink
>think about it every time a character teleports in any other fic
Fuck
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Just going to leave this here, one of the only good human in equestria stories out there

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/53317/no-i-am-not-a-brony-get-me-outta-equestria
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>>34011321

>douchbag OC get's transported to Equestria, gets all the ponies to jack off to how smart he is, then becomes an alicorn and hooks up with his waifu harem, but "It's not a self-insert, honest! It's totally a parody that just happens to be indistinguishable from the real McCoy!"

Fuck that whole series.
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>>34011459
You know the Alicorn one isn't canon to the series, it's it's own thing and is not meant to be taken seriously.

The main series is a well written story, with actual character development and heart. Granted, at the beginning, TD is an asshole, but as the series progresses he slowly drops the rough exterior, and while he still hates the situation he's in, hell he spent 6 years trying to find a way home, he eventually comes to terms with it. TD is a well rounded character and is not a self insert, I've met Bronywriter, and he is nothing like TD.
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I think Chink is broken - note that he's already posted TWO chapters on the 4th!
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/863106/just-curious-if-anyone-wants-a-chapter-tomorrow
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>>34011321
All right, can someone read a few chapters and let us know exactly why it's shit? I'd do it myself but I already wasted two hours of my life on Fallout, so I'd rather leave this one to some other anon.
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>>34011662
It's not, that's the thing, it's a genuinely funny and well written story
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>>33997742
I've been a casual reader of Fimfic for like 7 years and the warm tingles have faded over time. I think it just comes with the territory.
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>>34011682
Yeah, see, I don't believe you. That's why I'm asking for a second opinion.
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>>34011321
Gee thanks for sharing one of the most viewed and known about stories on the entire site.
>>34011662
It's essentially the story a good majority of the HiE cliches at least partly originated from. It's well written as far as a lack grammatical errors and piecing scenes together goes, but the writing style comes off faggoty or immature or some mix of those. Any character that has a specific style of talking comes off as ooc because he writes their dialogue as if they don't, Celestia in the opening chapters being a good example. By cy+5 standards it's a 5 or 6/10.
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>>34011662
The mc is pretty grating, the story doesn't really expand anywhere beyond the title (human in equestria; human not happy), and the writing is okay at best.
It's not a terrible story, but unless you're really thirsty for HiE it's going to fall a few adjectives away from "good".
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>>34009922
People have died fucking horses.
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>>34011813
Have you read the sequels, The MC, TD, gets quite a bit of development across those stories.
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>>34011801
>cy+5 standards
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>>34012032
Lurk for ten quadrillion years before posting newfag
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Austraeoh good.
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>>34012017
People have died fucking people, what's your point?
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>>34013546
That sex with 3D is evil.
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>>34001301
>getting the attention of a princess
Unironically what >>34001313 said. She's literally a centuries long eugenics project in a few Tyrantlestia fics.

>>34003449
>ACW or even earlier?
After ACW. That's when Renzetti left as story editor and we got the procession of editors leading to Haber fucking things up over the last three seasons.

>>34003534
I think Faust mentioned Celestia had a hunch and had them give Twilight the dragon egg as the test to see what would happen.

>>34003885
Mendacity was great and I'm still shocked the Fae shit never percolated more into fanon, while the "Bon Bon is a changeling" did.

>>34008101
t. Kenneth Pinyan

>>34010545
>read ocalhoun's blink
>wonder how horribly inefficient a teleport spell that creates matter and teleports twice as far as intended would be and why no one bothered trying to improve it in thousands of years
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>>34013818
It can't be after ACW. ACW already messed things up by introducing Cadence and a big brother that we've never heard of.
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>>34013599
Your waifu so shit she gave me a std.
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>>34008951
Hey anon, I haven't had much time to read lately but I'm 3 chapters into this and my mouth hurts from laughing so much. Thanks for posting it.
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>>34013818
>I'm still shocked the Fae shit never percolated more into fanon
I'm not surprised. few fanon contributors have ever read a book, and fanon has added very little mythology to whats already canon.

mendacity, pirene and DoaM are the only major titles I can think of that have even touched on the subject
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>>34015119
Loved Mendacity, reading Pirene now and was just thinking about how I'm living all the fae stuff. Now you made me sad. I'm not reading DoaM.

Though I was thinking earlier that while I love faerie portrayals when they appear, I've never actually read the source material and wouldn't even know where to start. The closest thing I've read was Tolkien's ramblings about faerie, which is kinda sad. Do you have any recommendations for getting into actual Celtic mythology?
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So I think we all know that OC's tend to be shit.

So I was wondering what is the best OC in a fanfic.
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>>34015187
Hey.
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>>34015139
Pic related is considered one of the best
https://norse-mythology.org/best-books-celtic-mythology/ would be a decent place to start

>I'm not reading DoaM.
I wouldnt blame you, and ponies being post-post-post-post-post-apocalypse fae is a fairly recent addition to the plotline anyway
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well no matter what I do, I can't seem to get unbanned from fimfiction discord.

Tis sucks.
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>>34015336
Why'd you get banned?
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>>34015187
The One Who Got Away.
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>>34015313
Nice, thanks anon!
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>>34015187
There's a myriad of good OCs, simply because a good writer will know how to write good characters - it's one of the fundamental skills of story writing. The show staff aren't some kind of superhuman genius writing team, whose created characters can never be surpassed.
When a bad author tries to write a story, maybe OCs tend to be more horrible because at least canon non-background characters have a well set established mold. If the writer doesn't go too far OOC to be jarring, it'll work out. And if they do, people won't blame the characters, they'll blame it as "OOC". On the other hand, OCs don't have a guiding template so it's entirely the writer's responsibility to make them good, and additionally if they're shit it's always the concept of the OC that's blamed, since there's no established "character" for them to be "OOC" from. Oh and finally self-inserts are essentially always gonna be OCs by definition.

None of this is a problem for decent writers. I feel like this is asking "we all know prose tends to be shit, so what are some fics with good prose". Just take any good fic.
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>>34015336
First of all, why do you want to use the discord anyway
Second, how hard do they fucking ban you? With a new account, a different IP, and cleared cookies, can you really not get in?
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God dammit, I still need to find an opinion on Post-SingulariTwi.
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>>34015767
Do you? Do you really?
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>>34015313
>ponies are fae
is this a recent development? of the canon species, i thought only changelings were fae
i understand they tend to pick up that trait in an effort to explain their ability to derive sustenance from emotion as opposed to any food
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>>34015767
Post it again because I can't be fucked to find it and I'll give you an opinion
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>aag: tbs, chapter 14

Remember how Twilight adopted her brother's rape baby? Well, Shining Dawn is basically a teenager, despite being literally one year old (it's genetic memory, I ain't gotta explain shit), and that means she needs to go to HIGH SCHOOL. Blah blah royal-watchers nobles drama who gives a fuck. Twiggy decides she should attend Sterling's school in Seattle. Sterling will also be attending Sterling's school in Seattle, even though Sterling's entire family is supposedly moving to Canterlot so that Luna and her dad can make some more freaky hybrid babies (because this fic doesn't have enough of those already).

>aag: tbs, chapter 16

More bullshit about this stupid portrait. Rarity's personality has degenerated even further, to the point she won't even speak DJ's (pony) name.

Rarity tries to bully DJ's chosen photographer into giving up the commission. She doesn't even bother to check if it worked (it didn't) before commissioning Racist Asshole #768 to paint her instead. Racist Asshole actually hates Rarity (she got him in some kind of trouble for being racist against Elusive's wife), but he's on board with this anyway, because he sees it as an opportunity for revenge against Rarity, humans, and mudponies in general.

Oh yeah, and Luna gets DJ's photographer to do her own portrait as well, because in the 35 years she's been back from the moon, not a single pony in all of Equestria has been willing to do it.
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>>34016077
>aag: tbs, chapter 15
This chapter is interesting because the author suddenly remembered that he set his story in the year 2047, so maybe there should be some sci-fi shit going on. He namedrops AI drone ships, then back to more of the same.

Remember the Coalition of Generic Racists, the ones who hate ponies so much that they executed a random human kid on live TV? Well, they've got themselves a drone ship carrying god knows what horrible anti-magic metamaterials. Regular customs inspections don't exist in the year 2047, so the only way to find out what's on that boat is to send literally one thousand BXI agents to raid it five minutes before it casts off.

The raid is a total clusterfuck. The bad guys blow up two Australian Harbour Patrol ships with rocket launchers, and send in enough reinforcements on the ground to distract the literally one thousand BXI agents while their main ship makes its escape. One named character dies in the firefight (I've already forgotten who or why we're supposed to care about him). But, surprise! He was merely pretending to be shot in the head, all part of a scheme to bolster the credibility of the changeling agent aboard the ship.

As the bad guys make their escape, the Australian Navy is busy sitting around with their thumbs up their asses, but not to worry: there's an Equestriani warship and one from 'MURICA, ready to save the motherfucking day. The bad guys have an ace in the hole, though. It seems that in the year 2047, you can just buy old warships, guns and all, and the bad guys have two of them, just chilling out on the ocean somewhere. Satellites don't real in the year 2047, so nobody knows they're there. The plan, I guess, is for the CGR warships to take the good guys by surprise, while their cargo ship escapes to parts unknown.
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First thing I find myself hating from Triptych: Spike is an annoying little fucking cunt and I wish he'd die soon (early) so that he'd stop shitting the fic with his stupid fucking words.
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>>34016077
>>34016081

aaaaahhhh, the usual brand of Shinsanity. It's been too long.
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>>34015365
>>34015395
Yea, it seems that we had argument and I told regi to commit sudoku and shit happened.
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>>34016259
>Told Regi to die
Glad you got banned m9.
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>>34016151
It sure is something special. What the hell kind of terrorists have the resources and manpower to buy and operate not one, but two honest-to-god warships?

I bet family reunions are all kinds of fun for Shining Armor, now that there's a changeling in the F A M I L Y - and moreover, a changeling with his DNA, as a result of that time Chrysalis mind-controlled and repeatedly raped him, all those years ago.

I hope we get more Sterling chapters. 14 doesn't count because she barely gets to do anything aside from losing at video games. Just like with DJ, Shinzakura skipped right over all the most interesting parts of Sterling's story, but she's still the most interesting character in this entire fic.
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>>34015914
>i thought only changelings were fae
because of mendacity, most people make that association

>is this a recent development?
Its come up a few times in the last half dozen or so chapters. pic related is from 2-3 chapters back

>>34016259
That old homo is still alive? I figured he'd have an hero'd ages ago
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>>34016423
I read Mendacity long after I read other fics that count changelings as fae and it was totally natural. Mendacity can't take full credit for this pattern, especially as changelings are not totally off the actual changeling folklore, itself tied to fae legends. The changeling property of eating emotions quite fae-like and fairly unique in the show (other examples being the likewise fae-based windigoes).

>that DoaM passage
Ugh. It would make sense if the story was still based on canon but only makes me regret not dropping sooner since it just introduces more shitty inconsistencies.
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I'm surprised how many stories on the "Longest" page are still consistently updating.
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>>34016463
That's fucking stupid. How the hell would you get to 'Longest' if you stopped posting content?
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>>34016467
Well The Chase hasn't updated in three years. I figured there would still be more complete or abandoned fics.
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>>34016463
>DoaM
returned to longest fic, still going
>the chase
long dead
>MLP time loops
dead
>extended holiday
alive, but how can something be that long, yet never be brought up in conversation?
>piercing the heavens
alive, but again never comes up in conversation
>lost element
alive, but a 7th element HiE, so I get why everyone rightfully ignores it
> My Little Pony: Sora's Misadventures in Equestria
alive, but a kingdom hearts crossover, so i get why its never mentioned
>FoE:PH
huh an extralong fic thats actually complete. But its FoE, so its garbage
>A Thief's Tale: The Road to Redemption
another completed. but its anthro HiE, so guaranteed garbage
>FoE commonwealth
more Foe trash thats still updating
>The olden world
>Inspired by Imploding Colon's Austraeoh.
alive and never mentioned anywhere
>songs of the spheres
eqg, human, crossover. I completely understand why ive never heard of it
>a journey beyond sanity
E rated ponified HiE, never heard of it
>A new hero
a (possible 7th element) series rehash/fixfic
> Dadonequus Discord (Book 1)
completed. 1.4 million words, completed in 7 months. you do the math
>starlight over detrot:a noir tale
I've got nothing
>man of war
luna fucking edgy human wizard commando in equestria whos million year dead friends are the elements of harmony. 7 years and still going
>its complicated
twilight and rarity fucking edgy human teenage commando in equestria. still updating
>legacy
sentient battle tank in rquestria. dead.
>hecates orphanage
sequel to something. complete. never heard of it

I'm not sure what surprises me more- that so many things in the longest 20 are still updating, or that so many are completed.

I'm also surprised that half of those are things which 've never heard of. you'd think long assed fics might come up in conversation at some point
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>>34016563
>you'd think long assed fics might come up in conversation at some point

Nobody reads that shit. I guess it might come up in a discussion of "why editors are fucking angels from heaven" or something. Seriously, writers, more words != better!
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>>34016563
>>34016611
Besides those there's also a few "series" that are as long or longer than those singular fics.
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>>34015999
You're a kind man of many digits.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/186686/post-singularitwi
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This picture is messing with my head. The last time that I counted it, I got that there were just under 40 fics that I still need to read. Now that I've read two more fics and counted again, I get 40.

Anyway, I read https://www.fimfiction.net/story/109040/the-last-optimization last night. As best as I can tell, it's unreadable unless you're a physics nerd and probably bad even if you are one. I'm confident that I'm right about that and that the fic should be ignored by everyone, but I'd enjoy seeing a physics nerd contradict me.
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>>34017145
>Now that I've read two more fics and counted again, I get 40.

Roko's Basilisk is warning you, boyo.
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>>34017241
So you're telling me that God has been built, and he wants me to read more fics?
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>>34017251
God will be built, and if you don't donate to finance his creation he'll force a simulation of you to read bad My Little Pony fanfiction.
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>>34017145
The two very first sentences:
>Entropy could not be defeated.
>Celestia had fought it; she had tried repeatedly and multiply
Physics nerd here, you're absolutely right
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>>34016563
Project Horizons is garbage for more than being FoE.
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>>34017294
>>34017258
Good to know, thanks. I'll do my duty and move on to my next one.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/218598/heat-sink-spike-helps-celestia-cool-off
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>>34017366
Oh boy, are you feeling it Mister Krabs?
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>>34017366
>>34017372
I'm actually having a really good time here. The fic appears to be describing Celestia's slow and cyclic transformation in to a solar rape machine.
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>>34017382
>solar rape machine
So they turn her in to a nuclear reactor!

Rationality!
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>>34017366
>>34017391
I'm done. That was fucking hilarious. It's too bad that it was abandoned.
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/101769/25/triptych/symbolism

Great chapter! Reminded me of Beksinski's art or Skirts' Last Tear In Tartarus. I rate awesome/possum.
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Is this author on crack?
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/34910/Blank%21/stories
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Reading Starting Strength and failing to achieve proper squat form is making me feel like even less of a man than when I read FiMfics. I find no shame in ponies, but my form is disgraceful.
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>find fic that I want to read
>fic is a sequel
>go to original fic
>also a sequel
I'm in for a long night. https://www.fimfiction.net/story/150781/nightmares-are-tragic seems to be the original. Is it known here?
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>>34018225
Never heard of it. Premise sounds very "early fandom" to me. Do let us know if it turns out to be any good.
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>>34018248
Published: Dec 7th, 2013
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>>33988262
What's a weird idea that you'd like to see done seriously?
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>>34018248
It's framing possessed!NNM as an "I'm edgy because I'm smart" character. I've occasionally liked the dark tone, but I'm in to the third chapter and don't feel like I'd have any regrets if I dropped the fic immediately.
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>>34003449
Didn't we just have that discussion at >>33485199?
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>>34018336
Huh, so we did. In February.
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>>34018225
Well shit. This seems to be the only other mention of the fic in the archives. Notice anything strange?
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>>34018314
Humans develop the technology to custom-grow artificial sentient ponies (and other fictional creatures); with show-based personalities modified to be devoted to their owners.
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>>34018314 >>34018418
That said, I'm not OP.
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>>34018418
I see you've been lurking in the Pony Preservation Project thread.
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>>34018775
Don't even know what that is. Just thinking of tulpas taken to the next level.
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>>34018836
c >>33963949

Basically they're currently training a neural net to do voice synthesis of ponies, starting with Twilight Sparkle.
https://instaud.io/3UAi
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>>34016411
Isnt Shining Armor dead in the AAGverse?
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"Then she rushed forward, planted her forelegs across Pinkie's back, pressed her face into the curly mane, and refused to move."

Wish this happened more in Triptych desusepukufam
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>>34018925
Oh shit, you're right. How the hell did that even happen...?

OK, I looked it up. And by "looked it up" I mean I had to search through the actual fic, because there was nothing in my notes about his death. Turns out he just kind of randomly died during the backstory. It wasn't even for something important, just some random battle against changelings, where he happened to inhale some kind of "nutrient fluid" that's poisonous to ponies. The details get mentioned a couple times in the early chapters, then never come up again.

>It had been fifteen years ago that the stallion she seduced, Shining Armor, had fallen from inhaling nutrient fluids for changeling nymphs – fluids which, to ponies, were pure poison. At his loss, Chrysalis found herself grieving; she’d spent only a few weeks with the stallion, but the time had been as close to love as a changeling could ever get.
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Damn, and here I thought an old dedfic was finally back
In retrospect, if it really had been that Paradise, it probably would have gotten the #1 update slot instead of #3
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""It's got to bedeep," Rainbow insisted. "This is a high dive! If I don't get somethingdeep, I could crack my head on the bottom instead of justtouchingit! Do you know how hard it is to see straight down through this much water?""

Hey, Rainbow Dash! https://youtu.be/0C5KlKSGUho
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>>34016081
>Remember the Coalition of Generic Racists, the ones who hate ponies so much that they executed a random human kid on live TV? Well, they've got themselves a drone ship carrying god knows what horrible anti-magic metamaterials. Regular customs inspections don't exist in the year 2047, so the only way to find out what's on that boat is to send literally one thousand BXI agents to raid it five minutes before it casts off.
Through the groggy haze of waking I read this and thought "Oh, is somebody reading Conversion Bureau fics?"
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>>34017110
Well to be honest, I don't have any strong opinion on it. The prose is competent but the story itself is a bit uninteresting. Twilight deciding Anon Q Miseryguts can go fuck himself is the highlight of the story for me, but Anon himself is uninteresting. I don't really understand what's got him so frustrated, either. He can just live Twilight's life again, or he can live as another pony, or he can do something else entirely, so why is he so hung up on Twilight-Anon choosing to...not revert back to human anon, I guess? What did he expect?

I'm probably overthinking it at this point, but what is the point of the story? Anon fails to realize the folly of forcing a consciousness that is technically his own, although subjectively someone else, to deal with his own issues? Is it a rumination on MLP escapism being taken to its logical extreme? Why doesn't anon just simulate some horse orgies for a while instead of throwing a shitfit when Twilight doesn't stay in the equestria simulation? What did he even want her to do, anyways?

Whatever, I'm definitely thinking too hard about it. 6/10, competent but doesn't particularly excel. Twilight was reasonably well written, Anon is a tremendous homofaggot with shit imagination. +1 for the Permutation City namedrop.
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>>34019713
The HLF from TCB honestly makes more sense than the AAG version. For some reason, Shinzakura insists on making each and every HDL member a former member of some major racist organization. All the white ones are from the KKK (or whichever Australian white supremacist organization he read about on Wikipedia), all the black ones are from the Black Panthers, and they've all overcome their racism enough to work together, because at least [other race] people are still people.
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>Nightmares Are Tragic
I think that I'm done with this fic. I dropped it at some point in chapter 4. I'm not sure if I'd call it a rationalfic, but that's the framework that seems to be the best for explaining where it goes wrong. Imagine if you tried to write a canon-compliant rationalfic of episode two that was set from possessed!NMM's perspective. Can you see how it doesn't work? Aside from the bits that I can only assume to be build-up for NNM's redemption, the fic mostly consists of the author trying to come up with rational explanations for NNM's actions during episode two. I won't attack them, I'll use a cliff! Oh, the cliff didn't work. They must be too smart for ambushes! I'll have to magic a manticore! You get the idea. A skim of chapter 6 seems to reveal that NNM made the trees ghostly because she was in a bad mood.

Apparently this sort of thing is the author's (Jordan179's) approach to a lot of his fics. For example, I can only assume that this is rational!Dragonshy https://www.fimfiction.net/story/188699/dragonshyness but on the other hand, he calls this entire series "Shadow Wars" so maybe there's a little more going on. I doubt that I'll give him another chance, but he seems to have kept this shit going for six years. There might be some potential here, but I'm not going to be the one to find it.

>>34020095
I think that's about as far as I could get. You seem to have said all that there is to be said. The whole thing just seemed pointless. Maybe I should've put that in my summary rather than focusing on how much time was wasted on set up.

>>34020342
Either 1 year after the last update or 1 year after the author has last shown any signs of being alive.
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>>34020351
Line, I got a line!
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>>34020351
>Oh, the cliff didn't work. They must be too smart for ambushes!
To be fair, I'd read a story about a smart villain who's so far up their own ass they think everyone else is also a genius when they're just lucky.
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>>34020428
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/150781/nightmares-are-tragic
Get reading.
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Why doesn't anyone ever look at the feature box when I update?
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>>34021061
>looking at the feature box
>ever
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I'd like to have a story of mine featured but it hasn't happened so far. I guess if I'm ever desperate enough I could just write some awful porn, since that always gets featured.
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Well Luna is being an unfair cunt to Twilight in Little Memories and the worst thing is Rainbow Dash should be telling her off but isn't and now the story is bending to make Luna seem right too.
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>>34021200
just don't forget to slap a cover with huge boobs on it.
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>>34021367
>Little Memories
I'm like 10 chapters behind, trying to decide whether it's worth catching up. Does the plot stop revolving around Twilight and her bullshit amnesia at some point?
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>>34020342
I never assume a fic will update, even when the author says they have a chapter ready and waiting to be posted.
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"A few dozen were mailed to schools of all sorts, and the one originally gifted to the elementary facility wound up being the hardest to track and destroy, especially once that one prodigy got her field around it."

Triptych anon halp pls, is Estee reffering to Sunset here? Does she exist in the story's world without EQG happening or is the "prodigy" someone else?
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>>34022095
That's kind of what the whole plot of this entry seems to be about. So so far no.
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What's your favorite completed fic where for a while you weren't sure it would actually be completed, but in the end it actually was?
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>>34022457
There are none, they all died.
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Are there any genuinely scary fics? I'm tempted to look through the horror tag but I feel like it would be a waste of my time.
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>>34022497
you are the reason no one writes horror.
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>>34022512
I'm pretty sure horror being shit is the reason no one writes horror.
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>>34020342
Never say never.
>>34021061
What is your fic?
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>>33998843
Pls man
>>34022419
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>>34022612
>Never say never.
This. Miracles can happen.
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>>34022612
Empty/Sunken Horizons. I usually update Friday afternoons.

My thirst for comments is... unhealthy. And insatiable.
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>>34022744
Oh, I've had the first one on my RL shelf for quite a while now.
Once I'm done with my current batch of stories, I'll read that one.
I'll even leave comments, Pinkie Promise.
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>>34022758
Oh you're so sweet.

I love comments so much.
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>>34022744
Your story is still popular. Mine doesn't even have 500 views yet. How do you think I feel?
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>>34022832
I know how you feel, believe me. My first stories were similarly overlooked, but I was able to take some solace in the comments that I got and my good ratio. Stick with it, and if nothing else works then write about something more popular. That's more or less what I did.

Truthfully my newer stories are more successful than I had ever really thought they'd be, but my hunger for critical approval has never gone away. Unfortunately, the big name reviewers are understandably leery about touching long stories.
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>>34022629
>go from 10k+ word chapters 5 years ago to 3k word chapters recently
thats a warning sign that the writers conscience had gotten to them, so they came back but arent nearly as into it as they used to be

expect it to die again soon
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>>34022898
Looks like the first 8 chapters were all written very reliably once a week, and now 5 years later another 7 written very reliably once a week.

My estimate is that this guy is good at time management and stopped writing when he went to college. Now he has less free time but still wants to update weekly, so you get shorter chapters.
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>>34022898
A skilled writer needs fewer words than an unskilled one. He may well have gone off and wrote other stuff, honed his craft, and now he's finishing this story up.
Or you could just worry about shit that might happen someday. I suppose everyone needs a hobby, but borrowing troubles from the future is an odd one if you ask me.
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>>34022934
>A skilled writer needs fewer words than an unskilled one.
idk about this senpai. I would agree with something more like "a skilled writer can hit a word count goal more reliably," but shorter chapters are absolutely not an indication of skill. Just look at every amateur who writes an entire war story in 100 words, or the seasoned storycrafters that can stretch a single week into a few hundred thousand and keep it interesting.

Length has absolutely zero correlation with quality.
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>>34022457
Final Solution
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>>34023034
>Length has absolutely zero correlation with quality.
I wouldn't say zero. Look how many autists write sprawling 200k+ word unreadable monstrosities. Unskilled writers frequently don't know when to stop, or what to leave out of a story.
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Reading through the Through The Well of Pirene now, and well first of all this is fucking great and why didn't I read it earlier. However, I have a question: I'm at the part where Amelia is on the airship, and she tells Maille that the master blacksmith guy in Mag Mell knew she was there the whole time, when she was eavesdropping. However, I don't remember there being indication of that; how does Amelia come to that conclusion? I probably missed something, but what exactly?

Unless Amelia is just lying/guessing.
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>>34023316
The thing is, those monstrosities aren't hideous because they're long. They're hideous because they're written by an autist. Autists don't know when to stop, yes, and that can mean that they keep stringing out a story that should have ended long ago, but it can also mean that they end a story before it really resolves the conflict or skim over a lot of good potential content with low word counts.

There are plenty of good long stories. Harmony Theory is nearly 600k and the only issue with it is that it's dead. Bulletproof Heart, 300k, and the closest it gets to a real issue is that it's anthro, but that's just a matter of taste. Fallout: Equestria; flawed, yes, but certainly not a bad story and it's 620k, and then you have the small selection of good spinoffs that are similar or longer. Enchanted Library: 330k. Diaries of a Madman is fucking 2.7 million words and I've heard nothing but praise from people that keep up with it.

There are a few things that correlate with bad writing, but word count certainly isn't one of them. A good writer knows what size their strength is at and they write stories of that length, and they come out good whether it's 90k about two ponies hugging, 12k about a spirit making a friend, or a 500k exercise in worldbuilding. An amateur can fuck up a bite-size one shot as much as they can any epic.
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>>34023388
Enchanted Library leaves you really wanting more, imo, with the other princesses still trapped and Discord fucking around.
How's the sequel so far, btw? I haven't gotten around to picking it up yet.
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>>34023388
There are genuinely good long stories, and I absolutely agree with you in general, but holy fuck the examples you picked make it seem like you're false-flagging to subtly convince people of the opposite of what you're trying to argue. Seriously? An anthro fic, FoE after we just had a huge argument about it - and then DoaM of all fucking things? Even Austraeoh gets more praise than DoaM, and the consensus is that Austraeoh is perhaps enjoyable but definitely no literary masterpiece.
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>>34023467
Now look here, I'm not usually a fan of anthro outside of porn. I was extremely reluctant to read Bulletproof Heart, but I'm telling you, if you're a fan of adventure, excellent character development, or westerns at all, or even just not opposed to them, you absolutely must read Bulletproof Heart.

It's a fucking shame because that story is a masterpiece, but it's anthro so nobody will touch it. I didn't want to touch it and now I can't sing its praise high enough. I understand why the author did it, too, cause writing a western with no fingers is a tall order. How do you have a gun duel when the pistol makes no fucking sense in a world full of equines? If you get to the end of the second chapter and you don't want to keep going, then you must be literally heartless.

I haven't seen any discussion on this thread about DoaM so idk the consensus on it, and I haven't read it myself cause I'm so disgusted by the concept of HiE in general, but my editors love it, so I trust their judgment.

PLEASE READ BULLETPROOF HEART. It kills me that it's so underrated just because ponyfags can't comprehend that sometimes a good author just needs fingers to tell his story.
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>>34023388
>The thing is, those monstrosities aren't hideous because they're long
I was not trying to convince you that long stories are bad, I was saying that bad writers tend to go on too long. When I see an unreasonably long story, I immediately know which way to bet on whether the author sucks.

Also, I've rarely if ever felt a story was ruined by being too succinct or straight to the point. Parsimony is a virtue all its own IMO. I can't think of any stories that match up to your hypothetical one ruined by a bad writer who just didn't write enough, actually. (Leaving out "the author got hit by a bus or something and left it forever incomplete" of course)
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>>34023488
>I'm not usually a fan of anthro outside of porn
Not helping your case there buddy
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Some actual good long stories by the way:
>Background Pony (lmao)
>Message in a Bottle
>A Soot-Covered World "tri"logy (i.e. DoWaS and FS)
>Enchanted Library


TMA
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I'm in the mood for some punishment, I think. Anyone care to read an old fic I did? It never really garnered much feedback, so I've always been kind of in limbo about whether it was any good or not.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/258927/1/friends-are-where-you-find-them
It's pretty short and not exactly heavy lifting, but I'd appreciate any sort of critique y'all could offer.
Patiently awaiting it's first downvote!
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>>34023511
When I'm talking about stories being too short, I'm not referring to the sort of short, very focused affairs that avoid opening up too many plot threads and thus can cover topics that might be very deep in low word counts. I'm talking more about like the noobs that write a story about, say, a war between two nations where half the cast dies and all this shit goes down, and they cover it all in about 300 words that read like it was ripped from an 8 year old girl's diary entry. If you haven't seen it before, then I'd advise you trawl the new stories column a bit and eventually you'll hit on one. The point is that bad authors can exist on both sides of the word count spectrum.

Ultimately it doesn't matter though, because no matter how long the story is you only have to read the beginning to see if the next chapter is worth reading, and so on.

>>34023525
What, you guys don't like smut with humanoid bodies? I sure as hecc ain't interested in horses.

I'm just saying, I had the same reservations about reading an anthro story, and it took a lot of convincing for me to finally give it a chance. Is there a particular reason that you don't like anthro stories? If it's because you just can't stand non-pony ponies, then the story isn't for you anymore than a good HiE is for me. If it's because you associate anthros with shit writing, then this is me telling you that this is absolutely an exception to the rule and if you consider yourself a serious reader of any degree then you shouldn't let that very understandable stigma keep you from enjoying such an excellently written story.

I just did a search for the anthro tag, sorted by rating. Honestly as much as I've always thought it was just a porn gimmick I'm shocked at how little there is aside from the porn. I think I can say with fair accuracy that Bulletproof Heart is hands down the best anthro story on the site, and probably the best western, and definitely among the best adventures.
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>>34023555
>What, you guys don't like smut with humanoid bodies?
Make a thread about how bronies are furries and tell me how that goes down
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Shouldn't Displaced into Nothing have updated by now? Wasn't the author posting teasers on his Patreon?
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>>34022419
Cozy Glow?
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>>34022898
How did you figure that out?
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>>34023555
>I sure as hecc ain't interested in horses.
I think this may be the wrong fandom for you.
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>>34023744
I like reading and writing adventures about them. Where I lose interest is in fucking furry quadrupeds with weird donut labia.
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>>34023756
And yet you're interested in furry anthropomorphic amalgamations? You are a literal furry my dude. >>>/trash/
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>>34023759
I mean, yeah, I'm a furry, but that's cause I like stories about non-humanoid characters. I find it generally a lot more unique than your typical fantasy or sci-fi where everybody is basically a human with a quirk. If you want to hate me for it, then I guess that's your prerogative?

But, you know, here we are on a Scandinavian horse hunting enthusiast forum arguing about fan fiction.

As for furry porn, what can I say, it's just way more creative and plentiful when you're looking for smut and comics. I like anthro clopfics cause I'm attracted to the characters' personalities, and it's a lot easier to find anthro than straight up humanized stuff and not very hard to do the extra work of imagining them as humans.
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>>34023773
>it's just way more creative
>creators who aren't able to make stories about horses, so they just make humans with horse heads and ocasional extra limbs
Sure thing.
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>>34023554
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/258927/friends-are-where-you-find-them
Fixed your link. Very sneaky, btw
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>>34023783
Wait, did I actually fuck it up somehow? I just copied it straight from the address bar.
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>>34023555
that one actually has a good reason for being anthro, with the guns, but it has very little reason to be pony fanfic. the characters are all OCs with mlp names (spike is a criminal boss or something, iirc), the setting has little to do with the world of mlp, and the plot is very standard western. it might be good but i don't see why it's on fimfic.

>>34023684
shhhh
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>>34023488
>How do you have a gun duel when the pistol makes no fucking sense in a world full of equines?
most would say 'dont have a fucking gun duel in a world full of nofingers', but hey thats just common sense talking

>>34023695
experience. my tracking shelf is stuffed with ancient stories that went dead, then years later the writer returned to much acclaim, only for the new updates to be much shorter and lower quality than before. After an update or three, they quietly went inactive again.

>>34023786
>I just copied it straight from the address bar.
directly to the chapter, giving you one free read from anyone that opens the link
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>>34023796
I actually felt like it earned its spot as a ponyfic. The characters are still all very recognizable and the Elements of Harmony play an intriguing part. Spike isn't a crime a boss at all; he's a banker, and his relationship with Rarity in the fic feels like a much more mature version of the one they have in the show.

The story would be lesser if it wasn't MLP, I feel. One advantage that fan fiction has over original works is how the author can play on the reader's preconceptions, and I think he did a great job of using the themes and ideas from the show and the fan community. It's made me quite intrigued to see how he builds on it all in the sequel.

>>34023778
Are you telling me that you find regular porn to be more creative than furry shit?

>>34023839
>most would say 'dont have a fucking gun duel in a world full of nofingers', but hey thats just common sense talking
So you'd rather just veto the entire western genre than give the characters fingers? Cause the gun duel is a pretty central element of the western, as is the bond between a cowboy and their mount, and you can't really have either of those with pony characters. But fuck, I guess you just really hate fingers so much that any story with them must be a burning trash heap, regardless of how much talent or effort the story actually displays. I suppose it's ultimately your choice if you want to disregard good fiction over such trivial aspects.
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>>34023786
You cut off the chapter name, but not the chapter number, so it was still a direct chapter link. Anything starting with /story/<number>/<number>/ is a chapter link, regardless of what appears later.
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>>34023845
This just makes me wonder how one can actually do a duel without making the characters anthro. I mean, sure, you could just say 'they're unicorns, they shoot magic,' but that feels like the lazy option.
Right off the bat, my mind just goes to rapid bucking. Two ponies staring each other down, with the duel decided by who can turn around and kick the other faster. But even that feels more like fisticuffs.
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>>34023839
>>34023847
Motherfucker... Please believe that was done out of abject stupidity and not cunning.
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>>34023856
People dueled for centuries before guns were invented.
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>>34023858
So what your saying is, the pony equivalent of a duel is a joust?
Anyway, what I mean is the same kind of 'rapid draw' duel that is a staple of the western genre. Not the 'two knights sword fighting' kind of duel.
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>>34023845
>as is the bond between a cowboy and their mount, and you can't really have either of those with pony characters
you can have ponies mounting other ponies. I'm perfectly fine with that
>that any story with them must be a burning trash heap
yes, the anthro tag is a warning tag, not a genre
> regardless of how much talent or effort the story actually displays
if the writer had talent, then he wouldnt need fingers as a crutch to tell his story
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>>34023845
>So you'd rather just veto the entire western genre than give the characters fingers? Cause the gun duel is a pretty central element of the western, as is the bond between a cowboy and their mount, and you can't really have either of those with pony characters.
Yes, either adapt guns to ponies (plenty of fics have done this - 2/3 races can likely do so natively with minimal effort, and earth ponies making up a full third of the population in average will absolutely not just sit on the sidelines unarmed watching everyone else prance around with guns), or adapt duels to ponies (mouth-operated crossbows, melee/blade duels, loose medieval-style duels with varied weaponry which could range from unicorn spells to earth pony lassoes).
As for mounts, yes, if you cannot make a good western story without having a humanoid riding an equine, maybe you shouldn't write MLP westerns. There are a lot of other elements in a western which you could structure your story around to highlight.

Ultimately, if mounts, finger-operated guns, etc. are so central to your story, then yes - maybe MLP isn't the right setting. Nothing about MLP seems inherently suitable to the western genre anyway, so there's very little reason to not just write original furry fiction unless you specifically want to write about the ponies, in which case write about the fucking ponies. "Oh it's interesting to see the MLP dynamics and how they play out in a western setting" - yeah well it's also interesting to see pony dynamics and how they play out in a western setting; if you're gonna be lazy and give that up, just make your own fucking setting.
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>>34023876
>you can have ponies mounting other ponies.
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Oh, hey, it actually got downvoted. Welp, I'm gonna go to bed.
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>>34023888
>just make your own fucking setting
What do you call writing an AU Equestria where all the ponies are anthro if not your own setting? There are themes and characters taken from MLP that the story revolves around, but just as much is taken from the western genre.

>mouth-operated crossbows, melee/blade duels, loose medieval-style duels with varied weaponry which could range from unicorn spells to earth pony lassoes
even more retarded than mouth guns, not western, not western

>>34023876
you can have ponies mounting other ponies. I'm perfectly fine with that
Is this a meme?
>yes, the anthro tag is a warning tag, not a genre
With an attitude like that it's a shock you ever started watching a children's show in the first place.
>if the writer had talent, then he wouldnt need fingers as a crutch to tell his story
I don't think this story would be as good as it is if it wasn't anthro. I just don't see how you can't understand that there's no such thing as a universally bad decision in writing. The only requirement is that the end result reads good, and so far you haven't leveraged any complaints against the actual story. Universally shunning anything without even looking into it is absolutely retarded.

Does anybody have anything negative to say about the story that even bothered to open up the first chapter? If you're all just gonna keep ragging on how anthro is a universal sin and it's literally impossible to write a good anthro story without even giving it a chance, then I don't really see why I'm bothering.

For those of you that are more open-minded, Bulletproof Heart is a masterfully written story, and I encourage you to set your preconceptions aside and give it the same chance that you presumably gave a little girl's toy commercial at one point in your life.
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>>34023915
>so far you haven't leveraged any complaints against the actual story.
Because I havent read it, nor do I intend to.
I have no interest in anthro ponies, humanized ponies, or EqG, so I'm not going to read anything which contains any of those

> I don't really see why I'm bothering.
me either. Not sure how long you've been hanging out in this thread, but pretty much anyone here will agree that anthro is a universal sin and it's literally impossible to write a good anthro story
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>nominate https://www.fimfiction.net/story/43466/nopony-needs-to-know for Slice of Life
A touching one-shot about Applejack and Rainbow. Very well-written, and with great dialogues.
>end
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>>34023925
>I have no interest in anthro ponies, humanized ponies, or EqG, so I'm not going to read anything which contains any of those
You seem to have interest in declaring them objectively bad, and that's my issue. It's fine if you don't like a certain trope or genre or tag, but at least show the author some respect instead of arguing with somebody who actually read it, enjoyed it, and is trying to get the story some much-deserved additional exposure. What do you gain out of disputing recommendations for stories you've never read and have no intention to read?
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>>34024091
>show the author some respect
No, fuck the guy who decides guns are a necessary element to his story featuring characters that are incapable of using them, and thusly has to mutilate them in order to facilitate his story. If your characters require the use of hands, then write your fanfiction around an IP which already has them. Go write some steven universe cowboy shit, for that would make more sense and be physiologically fitting.

I wouldnt write a story about dogs who can fly and use the ninja turtles as the foundation of that story.

>What do you gain out of disputing recommendations for stories you've never read and have no intention to read?
discouraging other >nohooves aficionados from defiling a pony thread on a pony board with their shit taste.
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>>34024124
>No, fuck the guy who decides guns are a necessary element to his story featuring characters that are incapable of using them, and thusly has to mutilate them in order to facilitate his story. If your characters require the use of hands, then write your fanfiction around an IP which already has them. Go write some steven universe cowboy shit, for that would make more sense and be physiologically fitting.

I don't like anthro but you're autistic.
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>>34024124
>thusly
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>>34024127
slightly spergy, but the points are valid
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>>34024134
Second on that.
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>>34024134
>>34024156
I completely disagree. There's nothing wrong with humanized or EQG fics.
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>>34024124
>defiling a pony thread on a pony board with their shit taste
ja, hands are verboten! ve must keep unser ponyland clean of these trash-tier impurities and gas all ze anthros before zey corrupt die kinder!
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>>34024162
But if you'd like to read about humans doing human things, then there's literally everything else ever written that isn't fanfiction. Go read a book, anon
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>>34024181
What if I want to read about pony characters doing human things?
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>>34023915
>What do you call writing an AU Equestria where all the ponies are anthro if not your own setting
A cheap rip-off where you don't wanna write a pony story but are too lazy/incompetent to create your own world so you just take a ready-made one and butcher it.
>even more retarded than mouth guns, not western, not western
So according to your narrow definition of "western", no, western with ponies is not possible. If I defined a genre where it was mandatory to have a hoof fight as a core feature of the genre, you couldn't write it in a human setting either. Usually, though, it's the general feel and setting that defines a genre, not any single very particular type of object or very specific action. And the whole idea and challenge of writing unconvential ponyfics is adapting the genre to ponies, and figuring out how to make it work.

Anyway the further this goes the more I'm feeling like I've been majorily rused.
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>>34023488 >>34023555 >>34023796 >>34023845 >>34023856 >>34023876 >>34023888 >>34023915
You do realize that there's another species the author could have used that has fingers and *isn't* inextricably associated with creepy insular fetishists?

>>34023488 >>34023845 >>34023915
It's amazing how you're able to posture yourself as the superior open-minded intellectual for reading anthropomorphic pony fiction.
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>>34022623
Sorry, I've only read Tryptich and I'm about to start Anchor Foal. Everything is interwoven, so I don't have the answer to that question yet.
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>>34024162
Technically, EqG fics are a valid genre, since EqG is an actual franchise. Now, writing fanfiction for EqG sounds like a horrible idea, much like unironic Barney fanfiction probably wouldn't garner much respect (except Barney is at least a respectable cartoon for toddlers and to a degree almost classic in its own genre, while EqG targets much older kids and is completely uninspired and unoriginal in many ways).

>>34024267
The MLP characters are in no way super original or never before seen. Most are in fact somewhat caricatured versions of classic archetypes: the bookish one, the shy one, the down-to-earth one, the jock, etc. And then they get "character development", like the shy one learning a dozen times over not to be shy, but you're gonna find character development in any moderately well-written fiction.

There might not be a story featuring EXACTLY six main-ish characters with EXACTLY these archetypes, but I find it hard to believe that your taste is that specific.

Alternatively, if your argument is "I don't just want 'the bookish one' or whatever, I want Twilight Sparkle the character from MLP", then I'm sorry to tell you but that story isn't about Twilight Sparkle the character from MLP. It's about an author-made character that is modelled approximately on the show's archetype, and which happens to have the same name because the author dressed it as an MLP fanfiction. If this is what you're after, go find a story about "the bookish one" and find-replace the name used in that story with "Twilight Sparkle". You might even get a more entertaining story, especially if there are deviations from show character canon, since MLP isn't the end all be all of character design and writing.
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>>34024274
>you don't wanna write a pony story but are too lazy/incompetent to create your own world so you just take a ready-made one and butcher it
Imagine wanting to write about pony characters but also wanting to write in your own setting. Sounds like the peak of laziness.

>>34024283
You mean humans? Because then you miss out on horns and wings, and maybe cutie marks, and it makes all the non-pony races less diverse too. There's nothing overly sexualized about the characters in the story. The author made the right choice to tell the tale he wanted, and he told it well. It just annoys me to see such a well formed story get shit on for something as trite as this. Fuck, I don't even like anthro!
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>>34024091
If you don't want arguments, don't open by telling people that they "absolutely must" read something and only someone who's heartless or doesn't comprehend writing would refuse to.
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>>34024313
>There's nothing overly sexualized about the characters in the story.
>second tag after "MLP: FiM" is "Sex"
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>>34024324
if you can't handle a fade to black and a teen sex rating then maybe you shouldn't be on this website
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>>34024337
Right, that's why people don't read Sex/Anthro-tagged stories. We're just not mature enough to handle them.
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I don't think there are enough fics set in the early days of Equestria so I think I might finally start writing the one I came up with.
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>>34024371
it makes sense on mature stories that are obviously faggoty porn, not so much on teen stories where two characters get shipped like in 90% of writing
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>>34024374
I've seen a few decent or decent-looking ones; but we could always use more. Remember that canon's full of contradictions, so use what you like and discard the rest.
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>>34023693
She didn't exist when that chapter was written.

>>34024301
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I don't know what you anons are talking so much about, but I bet it's that one or two autistic know it alls who kept going on and on about how Austraeoh was shit and how >PROSE PROSE PROSE has to be nice and simple. To the anon who knows they're right, stop it.
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>>34024302
I don't understand EQG fics either. Apparently the shorts were better than the movies, but from what I've seen of the movies, I don't see why you'd make fics for it other than porn.
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>>34024391
One of my favorite fics is Vanner's Children of the Sun but even that just takes place right after the Nightmare Moon fiasco. I want to go back to shortly after the founding.
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>>34024463
You know what I don't fucking understand? EqG porn.
I mean if you're a normal person there's actual ponies.
If you're the kind of guy who likes the show but only faps to humans, there's humanized.
If you're a furry and want something spicier than just humans, there's anthro.
And then there's EqG for ????
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Inspired by one anon's maniacal defense of it, I looked to see if anyone had written a riff of Bulletproof Heart, but no dice. I did find a fanfiction review site that tore into one of his other stories, though:

>But Tyrant requires the reader to accept a lot of seemingly improbable decisions leading up to the confrontation which is the focus of the fic. One must believe that Twilight would, on one hand, refuse to take any aggressive action against violent revolutionaries, up to and including letting innocents be slaughtered in the name of maintaining her nonviolence toward ponies... yet, on the other hand, refuses to abdicate, surrender, or even simply leave the capital, knowing that she's the cause of this revolution. It also requires that one accept that ponies as a group would engage in a violent civil war on the premise that Twilight is a murderous tyrant--explicitly on this singular premise--despite all evidence to the contrary, for years. To put it lightly, one is asked to swallow a lot, with little to nothing in the way of explanation or justification.

>The grievances of the rebels are shallow revenge and anger, and are almost totally nonsensical in the context the fic provides. As Twilight puts it, "There is no logical explanation for how you all came to the conclusion that I am evil, dictatorial or corrupt"... and she's not wrong. As a result, this story feels rather hollow, in the same way that debating the pros and cons of robbing convenience stores would: there's not a legitimate case to be made for one side.

Sounds like bad storytelling decisions are this author's calling card.
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/356199/dear-small-pony-book

I like this one. Has an interesting take on Thorax where he is probably younger then he is in the show.
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Fuck, I've been reading through this guy's reviews for the last twenty minutes, and his burns on stuff he doesn't like are great. I'm gonna quote some bits from his lowest rated reviews. Here's The Combinatorics Project:

>I simply have no words to describe how baffling this all is to me. I know in the pre-reading comments I talked about not being afraid to be ridiculous with the premise, but I was kind of assuming when I wrote that that "random comedy" would be the endgame. Reading this, especially the later chapters, feels more like an extended foray into someone's increasingly nonsensical headcanon than it does like the deliberate use of absurdity.

>Have you ever had someone start telling you about something crazy, and you're laughing along with them as they keep talking, until you realize they're being serious? I have a friend who told me once, at great length, about how the western US had been "completely irradiated" by fallout from Fukushima, and was "basically uninhabitable" already; according to him, it was going to be weeks, maybe months, before every living thing within a few hundred miles of the Pacific Ocean started dropping dead from radiation poisoning, and this was all being covered up to prevent a panic. It's kind of funny, but also kind of unsettling, when someone doesn't seem to realize how silly the things they're saying sound (says the guy writing lengthy fanfic reviews. I know, I know).

>Reading this story felt like that to me. It was sometimes entertaining, and some parts (at least, in the early chapters) didn't strain credulity far beyond the levels already reached via the shipping, but most of the story came across as someone throwing worldbuilding elements out willy-nilly without any regard for what sense, if any, they made.
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Here's some bits from the review of My Roommate is a Vampire:

>My Roommate is a Vampire is full of memes; unfortunately, they're mostly bad. Often, they're "just" non-sequitur gags that only make sense in a meta- context, but Dennis the Menace actually manages to use several in such a way that they inhibit comprehension. For example, an early chapter ends with Vinyl gasping as Octavia offhandedly pulls a half-eaten sandwich from the fridge and offers it to her. Why? Because that's a thing that happened in Epic Wub Time, presumably. Regardless, neither the sandwich nor the reaction are never mentioned again, which (considering the position of emphasis which they're given, as a cliffhanger chapter ending) leaves the reader grasping for meaning where there turns out to be none.

>The writing is a letdown; the author's decent vocabulary belies repetitive word choice (and incredible redundancy: "[it] was basically your basic run-of-the-mill..." is used without comic intent, and it's not an isolated incident), and tense slips, missed words, and the like are disappointingly common.

>Things have a distressing tendency to happen in Roommate for no obvious reason, save that the plot demands it. It's hard to give examples without delving into spoilers, but Octavia's life-changing event towards the middle of the fic is only the most obvious example of something happening with no foreshadowing, no really good explanation, and in a manner which defies suspension of disbelief. This problem also extends to character logic, as Octavia initiates and then moves through various stages of her relationship with Vinyl based mostly on the needs of the plot. Far too much of this story consists of incidents which form a narrative arc, but lack any logical connection to give that arc resonance.
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>>34024558

And here's The Golden Armor:

>One of the more common pitfalls authors can fall into is allowing things to happen for no reason other than because the story demands it. At its best, this practice results in a series of suspiciously convenient coincidences which strain credulity but can be glossed over. At its worst, it results in characters enacting a series of non sequiturs which may form the outline of a story, but lack the coherence or reason to create investment.

>The Golden Armor suffers from this problem from the start, where the two main characters are literally thrown together for no reason other than to show how wackily mismatched they are, are permitted to become recruits for no reason other than to advance the plot, and play teenage "do you like me?" games for no reason other than to establish some romantic tension.
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>>34024483
>can't find a riff of the story you want to hate
>find a negative review of a completely different story four years older from the author's first year on the site
>decide that literally everything he's ever written since must be bad

It would take less effort to just start the first chapter of Bulletproof Heart and judge it yourself, you know.
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This one's for Post Nuptials:

>To be completely honest, I'm a little skeptical just based on the name--"Darth Link 22" is the sort of name I associate with Call of Duty players/obscenity-shouters, not authors.

>Considering that this story is primarily a series of conversations, most of the actual emotion and reaction seems to be relegated to narration. Often, it's not even necessary information, as the emotion is adequately conveyed in the conversation itself, which effectively makes the story twice as long as it "should" be by incessantly repeating this or once more spelling out that. The result is that in many places, Post Nuptials nearly grinds to a halt.

>This story is, nominally, an attempt to read some depth into the immediate aftermath of A Canterlot Wedding, and as I said, I feel like there's fertile ground there for an author to exploit. However, this story uses that as a jumping-off point to inject drama, emotional trauma, and latent feelings of self-deficiency into more than a dozen other episodes. While a certain amount of this makes sense as emotional ground-laying for the various ponies' reactions, the sheer number of alternate episode readings and revelations piles on to the point of ridiculousness. It quickly comes to seem like every single episode of the show left deep psychological wounds on at least one pony, and the effect is to attenuate the importance of the event at the center of this story, rather than support it.

>>34024569

This is much more fun than reading that fic could possibly be.
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>>34024469
EqG for Sunset Shimmer and a canon-based setting.
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>>34024582
>This is much more fun than reading that fic could possibly be.
Well I can't argue with that. I think anybody would be hard pressed to write a serious story more entertaining than reading riffs or burns, or even a comical one.
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I'll stop shitting up the thread now, but first, here's Foal of the Forest:

>So, the reason I take issue with Dawn Lightwing isn't because he displays those traits; it's because of the problem from which those traits all spring, to whit: he's a fundamentally dull character. From his Lt. Data-like dialogue to his almost total emotional passivity to the fact that essentially everything he does in the entire story is reactionary (rather than borne of any sort of personal interest or initiative), Lightwing is less a character than an otherwise unmemorable vehicle for all of those symptoms. There are some hints of actual personality toward the very end of the story, but 100,000 words is simply too long a wait to introduce any personal characteristics. For the rest of the fic, he's just an unrealistically unchildlike (not simply toughened beyond his years; he talks, thinks, and behaves like an emotionally stunted adult, not a child (emotionally stunted or otherwise)) cypher, and the fact that his defining characteristics are things like "can fly better than Rainbow Dash, is more magical than Twilight Sparkle, and can turn aside Applejack's kicks without effort" makes him fundamentally unlikable.

>Frankly, the titular foal himself wasn't even my biggest problem with the story; that would be the subplot in the early going about a serial attempted rapist, which appears to exist solely for the sake of letting Lightwing prove how badass he is (he quite literally disappears from the story, nary to be mentioned again, as soon as Dawn finishes beating him up). Leaving aside any question of how tasteful it is to use rape that way in a story in the first place, the rendition here includes some awfully questionable characterization of both the rapist and the victims--I can't go into too many details without spoilers, but the speed with which Fluttershy's friends were pushing her back onto the dating scene literally days after she was violently sexually assaulted appalled me.
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>>34024463
It's because Sunset is actually an interesting character who gets some good, solid character development in EqG 1+2.

Though, I should also point out, The Fishbowl is pretty damn good and barely has Sunset in it at all.

>>34024465
Have you seen A Bug on a Stick?
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>>34023857
Nice try anon, but you stole some portion of those whopping 500 views and I'm going to take them back by force if necessary.
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>>34024645
Oh, yeah, because the ten or so views I 'stole' were worth losing your good will to the point that someone decided to arbitrarily downvote the story.
Excellent trade. I am a tactical genius.
I just wanted someone to read my story and tell me what they thought. Full stop.
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>>34024614
Haven't read it. The premise of it kind of puts me off and I'm actually not a huge fan of Chrysalis/Changeling fics.
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>>34024656
Holy shit anon it was a goof, sorry, I thought the "take them back by force" bit would tip you off
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>>34024663
>The premise of it kind of puts me off
Just FYI, I wouldn't judge that fic by its description. What it's actually about is young Celestia and Luna growing up in post-HWE Equestria, along with a friendly little eldritch abomination they call "Chrysalis".
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>>34024665
I'm feeling a little down about this whole experience. Apologies for snapping at you.
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>>34023467
>Austraeoh, DoaM
There is no thread consensus on Austraeoh. I maintain that its popularity originates from updating often and skits' participation in the thread. It's far more liked than DoaM because it's not HiE. The thread hates HiE and almost refuses to discuss it.
I absolutely don't know where you saw consistent praise for DoaM in this thread, I've seen nothing but disparagement, 95% of which is from people who haven't read it and don't intend to. Even the HiE thread does not look favorably on DoaM.

I've read and eventually dropped both, DoaM is decidedly better than Austraeoh and it is not very good.
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>>34024614
I'd say that Sunset has the potential to be interesting rather than saying that she is interesting. In EqG 1, she's basically just a stand in for Trixie.
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>>34024817
>It's far more liked than DoaM because it's not HiE.
Yeah, no. DoaM's writing is just not good, it's cheap as a dollar store book. And I'm not even talking about the gratuitous amounts of porn chapters.
Everything is over the top, cheesy and/or stupid. At no point have I ever had any strong feelings when reading DoaM, the kind that makes you turn pages late into the night.
It's just bland wordfood in all-you-can-eat quantities.

And yes, the MC has all the typical flaws of an HiE so that doesn't help, but that's just the icing on the cake.
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>>34024853
>writing is just not good, it's cheap as a dollar store book
Austraeoh has no high ground on this whatsoever.
>At no point have I ever had any strong feelings when reading DoaM
That's probably just you. The second half of Nightmare Night was a lot of fun. Most of the second visit to the cat kingdom was fun and interesting. I don't feel like going through the whole list, but it had high points. The porn chapters are indeed shit, whatmustido can't write smut.

>the MC has all the typical flaws of an HiE so that doesn't help
I find both Austraeoh and DoaM to be most easily compared to shounen anime. The MC is overpowered and largely obnoxious and uninteresting; the good stuff comes primarily from the supporting cast (most of the secondary and tertiary characterization in DoaM is kickass, this is its greatest advantage over Austraeoh by far) and the general environment/worldbuilding.
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>>34024826
>Sunset has the potential to be interesting rather than saying that she is interesting
I don't think that's a distinction worth making in the context of fanfiction, which is all about exploring the potential left open by the source material

>>34024888
Isn't DoaM the one where the main character has the same name as some of the author's old alt accounts, but it's totally not a self insert, for real you guise?
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>>34024896
It's a big story. A lot of it can be categorized as self-insert / wish fulfillment. The author's defense is that Navarone suffers a lot so it's not self-insert.
Navarone suffers a loooot. I would say that it's both self insert and not self insert.
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>>34024483
Ok but like here's a legitimate case for robbing convenience stores: free conveniences
And yes it is unethical and immoral and also risky, but it is a legitimate case. If you're unethical, have no morals, and - let's say - know you can avoid the risk (e.g. you're a nigger in a shittiest ghetto where police don't go, or something), then robbing the store is legitimately a justified course of action. From that specific immoral, unethical point of view you're using, of course.

In other words, there are clear pros and cons in both cases, and one can imagine a situation - a rare one, but not an unrealistic or infeasible one - where the pros of robbing outweigh the cons, from a certain perspective.
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how do I get talked about in fimfiction thread as a god amongst mortals? I want to be described as a missed writer that will never come back. That would be a dream come true.
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>>34024817
By the way, can some true oldfag tell me whether skirts actually used to post here?
Because I've been here since like 2015-ish (eternal newfag etc.), and while I haven't lurked 100% of the time, I haven't heard anything whatsoever about skirts ever visiting, up until he came by a few times just recently (long after Odrsjot died). And this isn't the first time this particular anon claims skirts visiting causes Austraeoh popularity.
So who's the newfag here? Did skirts ever visit back in the early days, personally spawning a following for the story itt, and I'm just far too new to remember that? Or was skirts's recent visit the only one, and this anon seems to think that Austraeoh only became popular within the last couple of months?
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>>34024908
You know this kind of reminds me of Lunar Guardsman. That one explains the edge with a hostile multiverse, does DoaM give any sort of rationale or is it just "ponies but everything's super dark and edgy lmoa xd"
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>>34023430
TEK is great, there's a lot of raritwi interpersonal stuff to deal with first which kinda slows down the overarching grand adventure. But then again we're at the third of TEL's length only, and the first third of Library was slower too, and I expect Kingdom's pace to pick up a lot more soon enough, after Luna hopefully gets freed after the big Seeking Night plan.
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>>34024992
Man, the conclusions people jump to are pretty ridiculous. Skirts visits often, just not every thread. Austraeoh's been a hot topic almost since its first publishing.
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>>34024998
>does DoaM give any sort of rationale
Pony racism is a consistent theme. It's not "dark and edgy lmoa xd" in the sense that for the most part the ponies are not malicious. They're just like, oh he's a weird monster with no magic. Generally they avoid Navarone or regard him with a "what the fuck is that thing" low grade disrespectful attitude.
The dark stuff is exploitation. Celestia in particular, but some other ponies realize Navarone can be used as a problem solver but as a noncitizen he has no rights and can be discarded as a fall guy and blackmailed. It's not unique to ponies, most of the races (and there are many) think they're the best and treat Navarone the same way. This applies to the first 90 chapters or so, after which Navarone has collected a cadre and independence and there is a sequel-like thematic shift.
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>>34024817
Oh die in a fucking ditch
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Keep defending "i upend a thesaurus over the paragraph" as a legitimate writing technique.
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>>34025141
Because anything other than simple retard baby shit looking like it was made for 10 year olds is "uppening thesaurus". Fuck you, you clearly don't know what you're fucking talking about. You have shit taste with literature and shit ideas with this EQG discussion.

You are the cancer of Fanfiction, and I'd wish you'd croak.
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>>34025153
It's not clever and literary, it's just wrong. Like writing "uppening a thesaurus" when you meant "upending".
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>>34025184
>It's wrong
Says the person who dislikes authors like Shakespeare, Blake, etc... Fuck off

>>34025158
Fuck you, too.
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>he really believes there's just one person that calls out Austraeoh's flaws
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>>34025203
I just spent the day defending an anthro story and now you're giving me cancer. Isolated insults won't get you anywhere.
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>>34025215
It's two faggots who call out Austraeoh for the wrong reasons. Yes, it's flawed, but it's prose isn't one of the reasons why it is.

>>34025226
Of course you'd defend anthro. It's all """ironic""", ain't it?
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>>34025275
>Of course you'd defend anthro. It's all """ironic""", ain't it?
It's just one good story. Do I know you?
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>>34024992
I know skirts lurked 4chan from a few years ago, but he's only posted in these threads since a few months ago.
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>>34024447
Wasn't that just Twilight she's referring to here? I mean, was it explicitly stated Twilight never got hooves on the book before encountering the original in his library?
Anyway, while EQG doesn't exist in the continuum, I was under the impression Sunset did. Although with Estee's damnable habit to imply even the most inane shit rather than spell it out it's next to impossible to verify without re-reading just about everything.
(Okay, it grew on me, but the "stand-alone, no-prior-reading necessary" disclaimer is bullshit, anyone attempting to get on the ride without having read at least the first third of Triptych, Mark of Appeal and several of the follow-up stories is bound to hate it.)
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>>34024979
You missed the train, but you can write something big that would not end up as a shitshow.
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>>34025614
Speaking of trains, where's AJnon?
There was only one ity bitty chapter left in the rewrite of Fearof the Rail.
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>>34024992
I've been lurking on 4chan longer than most y'all have been alive. But only recently have I followed the manic impulse to actually extend my typing tentacles through the digi-ether. I think what made me do it at first was noticing some ridiculous "white-knighting" on behalf of Austraeoh fanboyism... or it's not white-knighting? But instead grammatical gatekeeping?

F'naaa. I dunno. It's okay to dislike my stuff. The writing's imperfect, but "fun." Or at least it once was fun. Mayhaps it'll be fun again sometime.

Gotta keep the hope alive. If not hope, then at least the erection. (inb4 "neck yourself, fill-in-the-edgy-slur-here")
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>>34025648
I'll fill your edgy slur~
I read a few of your femboy stories. Good fun.
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>>34025685
I knew you'd come around, Zaid(!)
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>>34025648
i'm sorry, you'll never be able to convince >>34025275 your prose is bad
have a consolation rainbow dash
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>>34025694
I really liked this one: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/430172/midnight-in-the-garden-of-principals-and-fembois
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>>34025697
I've imagined continuing that "narrative," so to speak. But it's so dayum similar to the other ideas that I have that I've put it off. F'naaa.

The current epic I'm updating weekly is more or less the MacDonaldization of all of my "pink" ideas, so maybe it's for the best that some other things remain un-continued.

In any case, I appreciate the kind nod to the stuff that most people (rightfully so) aren't fans of. Kudos.
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>>34025215
Actually, I believe it's just one person who read through DoaM and is now convinced it's pretty great. I wouldn't be surprised if there were two or three people disliking Austraeoh.
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>>34025485
Bah, I read a bunch of sidestories first and when I went to read Tryptich, sure, some stuff was spelled out for me and I was like "oh, this is the exact definition of [some italicised term]" but at no point did I have my fundamental understanding upended: context clues had been enough in almost every case.
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>>34025648
>I've been lurking on 4chan longer than most y'all have been alive. But only recently have I followed the manic impulse to actually extend my typing tentacles through the digi-ether.
Thought so. Point is the anon claiming people like Easthorse only because you posted here is completely full of shit.
>>34025695
Why does her cutie mark extend practically past her ankle
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>>34025959
>>34025959
>but my editors love it, so I trust their judgment
he didn't even read it
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>>34025974
>the anon claiming people like Easthorse only because you posted here is completely full of shit
There is a timeline, dipshit, I shouldn't have to fully delve every minor detail. Skirts fan interaction is a large contributing factor, whether it was here or on FimFiction or fucking reddit for all I care
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>>34026014
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>>34025648
>I've been lurking on 4chan longer than most y'all have been alive.
It's kinda scary that we've reached a time when this can be hypothetically true.
I mean, shit, in two years, 4chan itself will no longer be underageb&.
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>>34025648
You unironically use emojis, you type like a faggot here, you have some sort of complex about writing faggot fanfics, and you avatarfag. I don't believe for half a second you've been on this site longer than a year retard
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>>34026084
You missed the part where it's a roleplay.
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>>34026093
As EQG!
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>>34026084
Skirts is dependant on a high sodium intake. I'll thank you on his behalf for your contribution.
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>>34026219
Getting assblasted doesn't help your case pal
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>>34026084
Fairly certain he's intentionally acting like a faggot, whether ironically or not
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>>34025621
Building up strength for it, it looks like a really bad one.

Also trying to write my own shit and making little headway, along with hunting for a different job and some other stuff. I'll see if I can give it a crack this weekend.
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>>34024707
I'm going to give you a view just for your maturity. If there's one thing that I love about 4chan, it's the lack of teenagers in threads like this.
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>>34025648
>I've been lurking on 4chan longer than most y'all have been alive.
Is 4chan old enough for that to be possible? Assuming that we're not underaged, of course.
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>>34026442
I'm at least mature enough to own up to my mistakes, I guess. Hope you like it, but feel free to tell me it sucks if that's your take on it.
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>>34026416
Do your best, Anon!
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>>34026462
>Assuming that we're not underaged, of course.
Are you implying we're not all little girls, Anon?
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>>34026780
I thought we were all traps?
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Fics for that "giving my grandfather tech support over the phone for nearly two hours and still not getting the job done" feel?

>>34026780
I thought that we all wanted to be little girls?
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Simple answer to all those fags who want their stories and attention they seek so badly. Just contribute in groups and gather a mass amount of followers then write a one shot story and take in the splendor.
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>>34027721
As a fag recently shitting up the thread, I can say that views and attention don't really mean a thing to me, I just want feedback.
If I wanted those tasty thumbs and eyeballs, I'd actually finish a story instead of letting them rot, or write more porn.
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>>34027836
I just want to hit the 500 view milestone. My current fic has a dedicated readerbase and every chapter at least gets a few comments.
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>>34027859
Nice. You'll get there, I'm sure. In my experience it's not all it's cracked up to be, though.
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Read What Is Love? and it was decent. Some grammatical errors bugged me, and the characterization had a rocky start, especially with the protagonist being obnoxious for the first two chapters, but that got quite a bit better in a hurry and the story of Cadance and Armor's breakup (which I was initially unconvinced of) actually felt believable in the end.

My question is: Should I bother with the sequel, This Is Love? More would be kinda nice, but I dunno if I want two hundred thousand goddamn words more, so I'm really teetering on the fence here.
. Can anybody testify as to its quality? Is it as good, or (hopefully) better than the original? Does his writing improve? Does he stop writing "what and the hell?" all the time, or maybe learn how to use "thou" properly before having Luna screw it up yet again?
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""So when a friend reads to you," Rarity quietly continued, "your natural listening position is to lie down so that your head is resting on his forelegs?""

Haha Twilight a slut
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>>34027987
>liking a fic written specifically to destroy a canonically happy marriage in order to instead ship the female with a self-insert HiE OC

Everything about this premise pisses me off and you should be ashamed of yourself for enjoying it.
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>>34028058
What, your parents got divorced and you're still mad about it? Sometimes happy marriages just go south, and it's your fault.
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>>34027859
What's it about?
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>>34028073
Wait so you're saying it's that Anon's fault my uncle and aunt got divorced?
>>34028058
Fuck you, Anon!
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I just read that one anon's "Friends are where you find them". Wasn't sure what to expect, but it was sweet. Took me back to my own early schooldays.
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>>34028379
I just read it too. Nothing spectacular, but like you said, it was sweet.

Author-anon, two things

1. This fic has no real conflict or narrative arc. Nothing gets resolved in the end, and in fact there's nothing to resolve. Instead, you could have done something like:
>Twilight's bored and hates school
>gets a reading assignment
>learns about the joys of books
>gets permission from the teacher to read when she's done with her classwork
>now she loves school because she gets to sit in the back and read most of the day

2. In dialogue, try to put each character's actions in the same paragraph as their speech. You've got this scene:
>“Um, honey, have you been, well… Giggling and gasping tonight?” Velvet looked at him in consternation.
>“When is the last time I’ve giggled like a schoolfoal? I thought it was you!” Night arched an eyebrow at his obviously sleep deprived wife.
>“Because I giggle like a schoolfoal all the time, yes. Those upper octaves are my demesne, by birth and by right. Besides, I seem to recall a fairly outrageous bout of giggling over the society pages last week. Some faux pas by one of your old classmates at the Gala I believe?” Velvet Blushed furiously, stomping her hoof lightly.
>“It was ONE TIME…” Velvet suddenly cut herself short as both ponies turned their heads toward a sound of faint giggling. Coming from the door right next to them. That led into their daughters bedroom. Their daughter that was a schoolfoal. As they both slowly saw the other come to the same conclusion, they grinned sheepishly at eachother.
Which is extremely confusing, partly because there are no dialogue tags, but mostly because the character named immediately after each of the first three lines is actually the opposite character from the one who just spoke.
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>>34028436
>This fic has no real conflict or narrative arc
I didn't read it, but I contest the need for a story like this to have such a thing.
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>>34026902

....?
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>>34028217
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/318439/MagicS

This is me, I've mentioned my fics here before and such. Currently writing my Starlight story and I hope I can hit 500 views on it before I finish publishing it.
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>>34028561
I'm liking the Starlight one. I fell behind, but I'm gonna try to catch up soonish.
Also.
>470 views
You're getting there, pal.
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I'm an artfag who's always been more into story telling for comic reasons. I want to try writing but I'm completely new to written word by itself as a medium. Mostly interested for fun, but anything to watch out for or focus on getting better at as a beginner?
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>>34028436
Well, it does kind of have the exact theme you mentioned, although it's very subdued and the payoff is kind of her getting the chance to go to celestia's school instead of getting to read most of the day.
I definitely could have been more overt about it, though, yeah.
As for the dialogue between Twilight's parents, I honestly don't remember if I even had a reason for doing it that way.
Anyway, thanks very very much for your thoughts!
>>34028379
That's what I was going for, so i'm glad the feeling translated.
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>>34028786
The first and most common error is not reading: >>33988262 see Ezn's guide
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Hello I will write a 3000-4000 word story from whoever replies to me first. When replying, write a story idea as detailed as possible.

Thanks and good luck.
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>>34028851
AiE/HiE Chrysalis smut involving shapeshifting into different character(s) and degradation
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>>34025275
>Yes, it's flawed, but it's prose isn't one of the reasons why it is

I agree. Skirts prose is incredibly poetic. What are your favourite examples?
Mine are these:

>Rainbow flashed her a hard glare. "Now, patience; and remember patience is the great thing, and above all things else we must avoid anything like being or becoming out of patience."

>Logan from the corner where he was knotting easily a scarf about the loose collar of his tennis shirt spoke,"Rainbow Dash, have you stopped to consider that you snorted glue over night and farted up this whole stupid fever dream of a plan?!?”

>Signatures of all things Rainbow is here to read, seaspawn and seawrack, the nearing tide, that rusty boot.

>Rainbow closed her eyes to hear her hooves crush crackling wrack and shells.

This is my favourite.

>Ember hugged Rainbow, breathing heavily as her eyes moistened. "See now. There all the time, and ever shall be: world without end."
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>>34028921
You got it
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>>34028992
>Slowclap.gif

Masterful. Our very own Rhodes scholar.
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>>34029035
Absolutely peerless.
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>>34028921
Finished
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/444084/taken-by-the-queen

password Deligent
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>>34029287
Made it to the second paragraph, died.
It's awful, good job.
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>>34029294
How is it awful? Seems fine to me.
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>>34029294
>made it to the second paragraph
Opinion discarded
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>>34029294
Made it for you for free and you shit on it. Why should anyone do anything for this thread if their going to be ungrateful.
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>>34029308
This is 4chan, mate. If one in three comments isn't a troll it's a fucking miracle, and that doesn't even account for shit taste.
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>>34029297
I wasn't the original requester, so I won't take full responsibility for this travesty. However, I did reply with the thumbs up so I'll cover the first paragraph for you. Problems exist at the forest, tree and leaf level so all issues can't be addressed in a single pass. The overarching problem is that you have no mastery of the English language or basic storytelling technique. There are a dozen tense changes here alone, and it's written in a bizarre incomplete DM-like 2nd person perspective while being ostensibly a 3rd person fic.
>The area around here was pitch black.
Past tense. "The area around Anonymous was pitch black."
>A sound of water trickled down from some unknown waterfall.
Present tense.
>The sound of squish and the groans of some pony held back against something.
Grammatically incoherent. "He heard the sound of squishing and the groans of some pony bound to something.
>An attempt to get up would be met with a sticky substance that pulled back down.
Future tense, passive voice. "He attempted to get up but met with resistance from a sticky substance."
>It seemed there would be no escape.
Present tense.
>Not even to cry out for help would suffice.
"Not even an outcry for help would suffice."
>The place they were in had to be several kilometers deep.
>No sight of sunlight anywhere.
This sentence should be combined into the previous one.
>A dark notion crept up the spine.
Notions can't do this. "the spine" is wrong for more reasons than just "spine", but it takes too much effort to explain why. I can only assume you mean "A dark notion crept into his mind.
>This would be the end of his own life.
Future tense. redundant word "own"
>There would be no time to struggle.
>He had truly lost everything in the end.
Past tense.

I didn't get very specific about the tenses, and changing them isn't inherently wrong but the way you are doing it is, and makes it much harder to read than necessary.
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>>34029308
Sycophants that expect trash to be praised simply because it was made "for the thread" should off themselves.
Even if I did ask for it, and I didn't, I wouldn't praise it because it's fucking awful.
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>>34029308
Just because you did something for free doesn't mean people have to like it when it's shit.
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>>34029354
That's certainly pretty bad. Yup. My instinct to not read that has panned out.
I still stand by >>34029348 this comment, though.
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>>34029361
>I still stand by >>34029348 this comment, though.
So you agree it's bad, but also agree with the guy whining that people don't praise him for it regardless?
I don't understand. I thought people who made it in here generally understood this isn't DeviantArt.
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>>34029354
At a medium level, the initial description of the environment needs to be both expanded and broken up. Anon is further able to discern details at inappropriately varying levels of accuracy. For example, how does he know that he is several kilometers deep? How does he know the voice is of a pony? How does he know said pony is restrained if he can't see on account of there not being light? The lack of light is unnecessarily repeated.
On the whole, I rate the first paragraph unsalvageable. I can only assume the rest of the story is just as bad.
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>>34029369
No, I agree it's bad, but trolls and shit taste exist so freaking out over one comment is stupid.
Thankfully people here tend to be quick to substantiate.
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>>34029354
>>34029358
>>34029360
>>34029361
>>34029369
>>34029371
>>34029376
FINE link me a website so I can learn the tenses then. Apparently my writing is so absolutely unsalvageable even though there are way worse shit out there.
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>>34029396
>>34028845
google.com
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>>34029399
I've looked at ezns guide a billion times and my writing isnt perfect but it shouldnt be a travesty. Whatever time for tense learning.
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>>34029400
You haven't absorbed anything from it. I will admit that it makes assumptions about a higher level of competency than you are offering, but I've already expended the limit of my effort budget for this particular lost cause. The other part of the post I linked is also relevant: if you just fucking look at the way other people tell stories you should be able to pick up better habits.
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>>34029396
read actual novels and try to copy the writing style of the authors you like. Grammar books are for degenerates.
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>>34029410
>Grammar books are for degenerates.
Found >>34025275
You still didn't answer >>34029354
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>>34029396

There's always someone worse. Yes, you're a lot better than a bunch of schizo furfags and sixteen year old edgelords on FimFic, congrats, but so would be a random guy picked off the street.

I can't give you writing advice (I don't write) or tense advice (English isn't my first language to begin with), what I can tell you is that at this point your prose is simply unpleasant to read and the language mechanics errors exacerbate the problem. You need to brush up on the rules of punctuation, capitalization, the correct use of quotation marks where they signify dialogue etc. For example you have an infuriating habit of putting a full stop outside, plus there was the clusterfuck where you had a question mark, followed by an end quote, followed by a full stop. This works with parentheses in certain cases, but not with quotation marks.
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>>34028992
Thank you for actually showing objective mistakes instead of fine lines with flowery prose calling them shit and incorrect. Yes, these are Austraeoh's flaws.
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>>34029463
These errors are so ubiquitous they are part and parcel of Austraeoh's prose. More than enough other examples have been posted that prove the point, only to be discarded by you and your Austraeoh defense force buddies. You say it's "flowery" because it's possible, with effort, to discern the intended meaning, most of the time.
Normal people recognize it as "wrong."
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>>34029488
>These errors are so ubiquitous they are part and parcel of Austraeoh's prose
Wrong, and the fact you can't discern the examples shows how much of a retard you.

>More than enough other examples have been posted that prove the point
Wrong examples posted by people who have never read anything besides fanfiction.

>Austraeoh defense force buddies
It's literally just me. Even Skirts said he wrote like shit, fuck off.

>You say it's "flowery" because it's possible, with effort, to discern the intended meaning
>Effort
Lmao, you have to put "effort" to understand? But seriously, go read classical literature.

>Normal people recognize it as "wrong."
Stupid dumbies who like lesswrong and shit riffs, sure. Go read TMA.
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>>34029501
>YER JUST A PLEB WHO DUNT READ CLASSIX

I love Shakespeare. Skirts' prose is pretentious purple trash.
The fact you can't differentiate between the two just shows that you're drawn to flowery prose for the hipster bragging rights alone rather than any intrinsic value.
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Ah yes, the prose
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>>34029538
The lavender unicorn
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>>34029532
>I love Shakespeare. Skirts' prose is pretentious purple trash.
Then why is it that the multiple times I quoted Shakespeare, Milton, Blake, and Joyce (people caught on Joyce) with the lie that it was written by Skirts, did I get 3-4 replies saying how it was shit, incoherent and purple?

>The fact you can't differentiate between the two just shows that you're drawn to flowery prose for the hipster bragging rights alone rather than any intrinsic value.
Hmmmmmmmmm....
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>>34028851
>>34029287
>"3000-4000 words"
>2158 word, Complete
Uh-uh
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>>34029544
The very good unicorn and sometimes alicorn.
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Grammar nazis the thread
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sour grapes the shitposter
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>>34028786
If you're serious about learning how to write, start with short one-shots and really focus on the fundamentals. Dialogue, scene composition, authentic characters, conflict and resolution. These are the kinds of things that will pay off the most in the long run when you've got a few practice stories under your belt and you publish your first really serious work. Don't be too concerned with lack of reader response, because unless you write a hit right off the bat you're unlikely to get any.

A writing community is crucial. The School For New Writers (SFNW) is a FimFic group with over a hundred written lectures on all facets of writing. If you join the Discord server and ping the Dean then he'll read up to 5k words of your writing and give you VERY detailed feedback. Don't be disheartened when his comments come up to more words than your draft. He also might be busy or forget, so be persistent. He won't mind being reminded.

Also, read! Read critically! Ask yourself, how has this author structured his story and his scenes and his paragraphs and his sentences? What can I learn from this author? Try to incorporate those lessons and see how they come out. At first your writing will probably look a lot like your favorite author's, but over time you'll develop your own style and come into your own.

If you have specific issues, ask in your writing community of choice. Many more experienced authors are happy to help. However, writing is an extremely artistic field and you'll sometimes have two well-known authors disagreeing over the advice they give you. There's ultimately no right answer; if it reads well, that's fine, and experimenting is great fun.

Also, find an editor.
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>>34029287
Here is what you need

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=uLOB6hj3M_Q

Also, dont post your work in here. They will downvote your story if it doesnt fit with their needs. Good luck and smile.
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>>34028992
Honestly as bad as these are, Rainbow's line about "avoid anything like being or becoming out of patience" sounds just like something she'd say in an impatient hurry and got a chuckle out of me.

It was intended as a joke, right?
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>>34029547
>Then why is it that the multiple times I quoted Shakespeare, Milton, Blake, and Joyce
I just got here again after months, so you won't roast me on something I took no part in.
Anyway it's just in-group/out-group bias. They have their mind made up about Skirts, so they'll try their darndest to nitpick at shit they've been told he wrote. Then again, I bet you went out of your way to pick the most breakneck parts, took them out of context to rid them of any meaning, and then gloated when they told you it was shit.
Doesn't relate to my point. Skirts just blows a lot of hot air for ages on end. Anyway, I was a big fan at one point, if you can believe it.
>Hmmmmmmmmm....
Deep.
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>>34028992
Unironically thanks for posting this. These fake Skirts quotes are written in an unusual style and sometimes difficult to understand, but in the end, they're all grammatically correct and use words in standard ways. The only usage I didn't immediately recognize was "wrack" as a noun, which is, in fact, legitimate: "wrack (n): The remains; a wreck."

Contrast with these real Skirts quotes, containing actual errors.
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>>34029577
I quoted Paradise Lost, Song Of Innocence and of Experience, Hamlet and Ulysses. And popular quotes, not anything obscure.

>Anyway, I was a big fan at one point, if you can believe it.
No, I can. It doesn't surprise me at all that people that read Fanfiction would have shit taste in literature and no understanding of writing. I'm arguing a bunch of fucking Cartmans, I have to stop.

>Deep.
Epic.

>>34028992
>>34029715
How do you not see the difference? The lines in that pic are ok, and the ones from the anon you mentioned are shit.
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>>34029742
>The lines in that pic are ok
Random bookfag passing through. The first line is passable for an amateur, but its imagery is awkward as fuck -- is the light dancing or swathing? Make up your mind! Reminds me of Thomas Friedman, who constantly breaks his own metaphors, often in mid sentence.
Second line misuses loathsome, critic is right.
Third line's criticism is also correct, unless that shadow was being dunked in soapy water or something, he's using "bathe" backwards.
Fourth one is just a basic grammatical error, why are you saying that's correct? "No less than five" doesn't remotely mean what the author intends to convey. "More than four" could put those mountains almost anywhere on the page except "far off, near to the edge."
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>>34030019
Cringe
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>>34030041
>>>/reddit/
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>that feel of a really good story that sucks you in and then you spend your day to day realising how boring and mundane your life is and asking yourself what is the point
I am pretty much happy with my life and never depressed or anything, except when I find an amazing story. Why do I keep doing this to myself
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So question, does this herokuapp bot work at all? On the website linked in OP, I don't see any nominations and comments from the past few threads. Or am I an idiot and misunderstood something?
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>>34030722
It does, but OP's retarded. Instead of using their big brain and swapping out the IP for the new herokuapp for the old one, they just copypasta'd all the links, including the outdated one. The new link is a few replies down here.
>>33992076
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Bump. Who's your favorite horseficcer? Mine, obviously, is myself.
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>>34031606
I have a soft spot for KitsuneRisu, other than that, probably Cold in Gardez.
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>>34031606
Toss up between Getmeouttahere and Flutterpriest.
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>>34031606
Skirts, CiG, Regi.

>>34032134
Silly skirts.
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>>34032165
Silly Zaid
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>>34032134
7/10
Next time mistype some words and correct them to the wrong word.
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>>34032134
I'm reminded of Don Delillo

Airborne Sissification Event
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>>34032134
Although I certainly don't like that it does make it more apparent to me that I kind of have the opposite problem. My prose is so plain and I don't describe things well enough. I could do for hitting a nice balance between that and this.
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>>34032565
Yeah, that balance would still be too complex and purple. Keep it nice, simple, dumbed down for you to be lived here. Whatever you do, do NOT use metaphors or you will be considered shit.
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>>34031606
I'm sure I'll get a lot of shit for it, but I've got a soft spot for Chengar. CiG is one of my faves, too.
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Post Fluttershy x Anon stories
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>>34032134
>Fluttershy existed
Wow this is art I raelly hate it
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I still want to hear more about these EqG Yu-Gi-Oh fics.
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>>34029501
>Go read TMA
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/437952/cozy-glow-daughter-extraordinaire

I found this to be surprisingly good.
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>>34033741
There was pretty cool Yugioh greentext in one of the rgre threads. Where are they btw?
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>>34034242
>eqg
>yugioh
>greentext
>rgre
>cool

one of these things is not like the other. One of these things just doesnt belong
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>>34034354
EqG?
Because a RGRE yugioh greentext would be aswesome dumb fun.
A young girl is possesed by Cleopatra's spirit and uses her wit and luck bending powers to punish evil doers.
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>>34032598
Ouch, you sound really butthurt. Did you get called out for using a clumsy or busted metaphor, or did you just get shat on by a troll? Either way, it's gonna be okay, anon! There's no need to be upset. It's all just words on a screen, after all.
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God I love the internet. Sometimes you just make one wrong turn and suddenly find you've gone WAY down the rabbit hole
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>>34034823
You know what? Why not, it's fucking 2019. Go be a pony or whatever, the show's ending.
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I'm barely awake but I won't be able to sleep for at least another half hour. Odds I read a fic, evens I don't. Hopefully sleepy reading isn't a horrible idea.
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>>34035242
And what are the odds you'll ignore evens.
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>>34035262
I was thinking the same when I posted that. Naturally, I then went and made the mistake of opening up my reading list and finding a fic that's tempted me in to reading it anyway.
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Rational!Twilight is best Twilight. Prove me wrong. Ok, I know, Paranoid!Twilight is better.
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>>34035302
Ancient!Sovereign!Luna is also best Luna.

Also, I think that dwœmercraft might be a modern Googlewhack.
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>>34035302
Too bad that Sci!Twi is a bit shitty. After >>34035330, I'm worried that this fic spends too many words on stuff like this, but I don't know how to specify what I mean by that. It's spending too many words of stressing character traits that it's either already stressed or don't need stressing?
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PERFECTION
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Has anyone here ever read a fanfic that is so cringy, that you legitimately thought the author was autistic?
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>>34035776
That isn't something special, a good majority of fics on the site are cringy as all get out & were probably written by either an autist or a child.
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>>34032134
Time isn't a crime, it is fine.
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>>34034823
/ptfg/ would like a word
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>>34036068
About what? Tumblr otherkin-ism can get pretty wack, but this particular case is pretty tame. She's not even claiming mental shifts, much less physical shifts or non-human DNA.
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>>34029561
Bless you sir this is some good advice.

Even though my grammar and punctuation is horrible I still think I may be used to stories in a general sense. I've always focused on thematic aspects of film or comics and the like. I don't read a lot of books but I sometimes pick up a fic and I find it's the most immersive medium for sure. I usually get cold feet when I want to write because I'm not used to it but once I start it's hard to break the groove. It's incredibly enjoyable even just for fun.

I'm used to drawing and writing comics, so things like dialogue come easy. Rather what I'm most interested in is creating elaborate scenes and descriptions that really immerse a reader without feeling like the prose is too drawn out and repetitive, I tend to go overboard with that. That might just be a thing You develop with experience or something though.

Also I'm curious how often writers are also artists. Are there any cases where a writer adds their own artwork to enhance it (besides just going for comics)? Seems like it could get convoluted but I'd love to see an attempt where it works well.
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I have no spirit to write anymore. All I can think about is suicide. That sounds pretty nice.
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>>34036528
that's because something is happening to you, it's called "growing up", get a job and stop thinking about mutilating yourself you fucking retard
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>>34036528
Give it a shot. All the cool kids are doing it
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[Pt. 1]

>>34016081
>is for the CGR warships to take the good guys by surprise
Is it finally happening? Is it time for the carrier battle group to get sunk and piss off Spacebattles?

>>34016563
>might come up in conversation at some point
That would require people to read them and since they'll almost all either completely mediocre or garbage, that won't happen.

>>34018225
It's on my RL, but that's all I know about it. That and the shipping being Twiluna evidently.

>>34018995
>the Judge from Ace Attorney
Every single fucking time I see something new. It's like a curse. And I still can't get over how he used an actual admiral from the 50s. I don't think Byrd could have ever imagined where his legacy would end up.

>>34020342
A year after the last time the author logged in. Then it goes to the deadfic folder.

>>34022457
Only one that rose from the dead for me was The Night That Never Ended, and it had a pretty shitty ending.

>>34023388
>deadfic
>anthro
>FO:E
>DoaM
You're not exactly making a solid case, here.

>>34023488
>makes no fucking sense in a world full of equines
This is where originality comes in. Rather than twist the setting to fit the story, you have to come up with something fresh and different. I'm reading a pony fanfic because I want ponies and the unique setting and premises that comes with them. If I wanted bipedal characters having a gun duel, I'd just open the Libby app and read an actual western novel.

>>34023511
>was ruined by being too succinct or straight to the point
Rushing through the story is one of the most common problems fanfics have.
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[Pt. 2]

>>34023555
>I sure as hecc ain't interested in horses
You're masturbating to anthro horses. You're already sliding down the slope and are currently in the "th-they're still bipedal s-so it's fine" stage of denial. Next, they'll get progressively more horse-like until you wind up like that one anon who was disgusted when pony porn was drawn with them having shoulders.

>>34023845
>veto the entire western genre
So the entire genre is defined by gunfights? Life on the frontier, where conflict between settlers and natives abounds and the central government is hundreds of miles away, where bandits and outlaws wander, where geopolitical tensions with the neighboring country might spill over, where a rush for new resources creates chaos and riches--none of that matters if there aren't muh guns?

>>34023856
>actually do a duel
The entire concept of dueling or "firefights" would be radically different in Equestria. Fanfic writers struggle because they think it's a simple swap. You replace guns with X. Really, you have to completely rethink how conflict would work in the setting given the lack of firearms and additions of multiple species and magic. But fanfic writers are too lazy to do that, so they either make them human/anthro or just use magic lasers.

It's like guns itself. You have to completely rethink the design, function, and strategic use if you implement them, rather than just duct taping a pistol to a hoof.

>>34023915
>if not your own setting
A fanfic. That's what it's called when you don't use your own characters, in your own world, with your own lore and history, and your own plots and ideas.

>>34029396
Purdue OWL https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/grammar/verb_tenses/index.html

The OWL's one of the college standards for learning English grammar.
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>>34036195
About making up terms for attention. Like half of /ptfg/ would probably sympathise with her, but they're not going about calling themselves otherkin, they just recognise that it's not a normal mental state and post about it on anonymous bhutanese forums and otherwise try to lead a normal life. (Honestly, this is giving me a better perspective of what the fuck other "otherkin" are about.)
They'd also like a word with you, because again this "rabbit hole" is nothing more than a /ptfg/ tier autist who happens to be on tumblr rather than /mlp/.
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>>34036401
>Also I'm curious how often writers are also artists. Are there any cases where a writer adds their own artwork to enhance it (besides just going for comics)?
It's not the norm but you do find that here and there; it can be really nice. In general, illustrated books are a thing (even for "serious" novels, not just for kid's books) and so having the artwork be directly from the author and exactly as they imagined is a big plus.
Tolkien is one example that comes to mind, as he drew quite a few illustrations, especially for The Hobbit, plus plenty of maps too (with the help of his son IIRC).
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>>34036704
>that one anon who was disgusted when pony porn was drawn with them having shoulders
Is this phrasing implying that there's only one anon who cares about anatomy in his horses? Human shoulders don't belong on ponies and look weird, whether in porn or not. (I'm assuming you mean human shoulders, since a horse without any shoulders whatsoever would probably look even more weird.)
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>>34035776
Plenty of times. Such as when I read my own, older stories
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>>34036977
>Human shoulders don't belong on ponies and look weird
Thank you! It looks horrible.
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>>34035776
Any good rationalfic. If it doesn't remind you of your autistic youth, then it wasn't rational enough.
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>>34035281
Competent comedy, but every scene feels too long. Drop it after chapter 1.

>>34036528
Do some exercise.
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>>34035776

Honestly? Cringy writing or plot isn't usually what tips me off. It's meta stuff.

Like the Tran story (not to be confused with the train story). The single biggest tip-off that it was written by a legit autist isn't the power fantasy, the lack of empathy, or the obsession with listing objects; those are all things normal bad writers might do, too. No, it's that every single chapter of the story had a wordcount divisible by 500. So the author presumably would upload his chapters, then go through and selectively add or delete words to get to a nice, "even" number.

THAT is autism.
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>>34037449
I can't find the fic in fimfiction site. Did he already delete it?
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>>34037708
Yup.
It's not on FiMFetch, either.
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>>34036401
Grammar and punctuation is basically the easiest part of writing to learn. There's almost always an objectively right answer when it comes to them, so as long as you aren't a goldfish you should be able to figure it out pretty fast. That said, I have met aspiring writers who are goldfish and it is incredibly frustrating trying to teach them things.

You should be cautious about equating writing to more visual mediums like comic and film. If you want to create an "elaborate scene or description" then honestly a comic panel or a few seconds of film would do a much better job than any written words would. The strength of writing is not in the conveyance of visual ideas, but in much subtler things like immersion and empathy. It's a style thing of course, but personally I don't ever spend long on descriptions.

Some writers are artists, yes. Most writer-artist people just make comics. I find that including images into the text is often little more than a giant immersion breaker, and a lot of more critical readers will be turned off. The unwashed masses probably won't mind, but I'm not really writing for them, myself.

And yes, there are great written works that use pictures in the text, but those are published on real paper. A picture baked into the paper can be done so much more cleanly and sleekly and it can match the formatting perfectly. It can fill a whole page and be glanced over instead of having to be shoved between two paragraphs and scrolled past. If you want a rare good example of pictures being used in the text of a FimFic, then check out Just A Little Batty. The scene breaks are pictures that are very clever. They don't break immersion and they even look different based on if you're reading in night or day mode.

For most cases though if you want to use your art skills to enhance your writing, then just draw your own cover art and draw companion images or comics that you link in blogs or author's notes. Keep them separate from the prose.
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>>34036704
>Next, they'll get progressively more horse-like until you wind up like that one anon who was disgusted when pony porn was drawn with them having shoulders.
Honestly I've already tried going all the way to full-on clop. There's so much content and I figured there was no point in fighting it anymore. I just can't get into it. A horse has none of the body parts that I'm attracted to. At least with an anthro story I can imagine them with human faces.
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>>34037994
>he doesn't like eyes, legs, or ears
What are you, gay?
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>>34035776
Pretty sure the author of Twilight's World is a legit autismo.
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>>34037708
>>34037768
geez cant embed images in files any more and posting links autoflags as spam
try going to /stayingsaneinapeacefulworld-79264
on file dropper
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>>34037708
>>34037768
>>34038273

Looks like he deleted his story. On the plus side, he's got a new fic with a suspiciously similar set-up that's ongoing:

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/381784/if-you-want-peace-prepare-for-war

Hey, and his autism is getting better! Now he only goes in and "corrects" his wordcount to the nearest 250 words.
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>>34038273
>cant embed images in files
What are you trying to do, exactly?
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>>34035776
I don't trust anyone who reads, let alone writes, pony fan fiction while claiming not to be autistic. "Cringiness" has nothing to do with it; moments in the show make me cringe harder than possibly anything I've read.
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>>34038471
we used to be able to post pics with rars embedded in them.
download a pic, change file extension to rar, unrar it, enjoy whatever was in there.

the site now detects and prevents such a thing from happening.

i was attempting to share staying sane, since apparently it doesnt exist anywhere else.

hence the cut up filedropper link
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>>34038501
I mean you still can, you just need to have the right tools
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>>34038519
yeah no thanks.

End of thread, page 7 and falling
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>>34038580
how does the whole page thing even work?
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>>34038609
What?
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>>34038626
like where are the pages? when does it go from page 7 to page 8? it's just one long page
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>>34038662
bruh
Is this what happens when people get used to catalog?
Do people not remember the pain of going through the pages to look for threads that may interest them?
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>>34038675
You need to configure the native extension for it to display like yours does. If anon needs to refocus his eyes, it's on the bottom right corner (where the post count is).

And no, people don't remember going through the pages like that. Even back when I was a complete newfag and fearing that I'd be arrested for browsing /b/ hey, I wasn't wrong. Loli is legally equal to real pizza in my country, you'd learn to use noko.
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>>34038680
I see where the page count is. what I don't understand is what it's counting.

is that how many pages back you have to go on /mlp/ to find the thread? are threads just listed chronologically from new to old?
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>>34038686
>is that how many pages back you have to go on /mlp/ to find the thread?
Yes.

>are threads just listed chronologically from new to old?
How can you possibly not know that? It's in bump order, like any other forum ever. Is Reddit different or something?
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>>34038696
>Is Reddit different or something?
Well, yes - Reddit sorts by a combination of creation date and number of upvotes. Anon's still a raging newfag who needs to lurk moar, though
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>>34038774
Good to know. That reminds me, I was supposed to make a Reddit account last month.
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>>34038696
see I thought it was in bump order, but I've never seen the thread go down in pages. if it's bump order then shouldn't we go back to page 1 everytime somebody replies?
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>>34038862
Anon it's gone for 7 to 9 whilst you've been posting. We're not on page 1 because we're past the bump limit. How fucking new are you?
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>>34038890
>Anon it's gone for 7 to 9 whilst you've been posting.
I said "go down" not "go up," unless you consider 9 to be down from 7.

also wtf is the bump limit?
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>>34038903
>also wtf is the bump limit?
USE THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE
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>>34038910
>USE THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE
lol do you not know what "wtf" stands for?
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I apologise to this thread and everything that Moot ever stood for. In treating >>34038913 like a decent human being, I have broken from out time-honour tradition of hostility towards newfags. In doing so, I have allowed this child to learn our ways and spread his retardation far and wide. I have no doubt that my foolishness has damaged this website and hurt one of the things that I hold most dear about it - the lack of fucking children.

Please, fuck off newfag, before you destroy all that we hold dear. As is tradition, I will stop spoon-feeding you and cease all replies. The more I hate it, the stronger it will get.
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>>34038922
I mean how am I supposed to find out what the bump limit is besides asking? isn't it different on every board?
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>>34037982
By the way just want to add that if you put pictures in your text, be prepared for users to see this.
They'll read it offline using fimfic's default export (which doesn't bundle images), your hosting provider will give up, and even if you use imgur I've found that more often than not after a couple of years there's a strong chance of the image disappearing into the void (to say nothing of imgur's atrocious compression, so perhaps also avoid using it in the first place).
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>>34038938
imgur blocked fimfiction as a referrer last i checked
or maybe it was derpibooru
either way, hosting images for stories is a commitment that almost nobody is prepared for
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>>34038935
You fucking lurk moar you collossal cuck
If you're that impatient just get boards.json from the API
>>34038903
You just said yourself that page 1 is where newly bumped threads go, so clearly you have an understanding of that at least, so why are you confused about 9 being down from 7
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>>34038958
>why are you confused about 9 being down from 7
idk senpai most people consider 9 to be above 7. its a bigger number, 2 above 7. how can it be above 7 but also below it? your not making any sense
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>>34038982
If I'm in a race and I come in at third place did I place above or below the guy in second place
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>>34039071
you placed behind the guy in 2nd place, unless you were racing vertically in which case youd be below physically, but 3 is still above 2
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>>34038903
okay newfriend, each thread is limited to 500 replies, after which it stops bumping. once that happens, new threads get bumped above it and it begins falling towards the back of the pack.
once it hits the end of page 10, the next thread created will bin this one.

now lurkmoar and/or gtfo

also page 10. whose got next thread?
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>>34039120
Whoever does better remember to use the new herokuapp stuff.
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>>34039135
oh you havent gotten bored of it yet?
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>>34039135
Speaking of that, shouldn't we have moved past Comedy by now? List Anon pls
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>>34039222
There was never any restriction on what categories can be nominated or when; don't blame the app runner for this, you dumbasses. Just nominate stories for whatever category you want to make, if nobody cares about your shit category then it won't catch, the end.
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I've made a few more suggestions already. Horror, Dark, Slice of Life. But honestly >>34039277 is right. There's a whole list of Genre tags on FimFic and any one is viable. I'm sure someone will want to nominate Starlight Over Detrot for Mystery. I've never read it myself.
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Has anybody read "My Little Marriage - Mary Is A Mare"? It looks suspiciously like an AAG knockoff...
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I swear to fucking Christ above, I'm going to go on a rampage the next time I see a Displaced story. How the fuck has THIS concept been the one to stick around? Why not Chess Game of the Gods or League of Humans Acting Villainously? At least those featured OC abilities, not crossovers where you don't have to give a fuck about the crossover's character because ti wasn't REALLY them. Why hasn't some new fad supplanted this in the last five fucking years?
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>>34039451
I read it cause I'm into PiE and TF shit. It wasn't that good. The overarching plot moves pretty slow, though it did seem like it was potentially heading somewhere interesting. Then the author decided he wanted to be one of the cool kids like Brandon Sanderson and crossed over all his fics with all his other fics (like 5 or 6 fics in total), and then stopped updating shortly after.

I think another anon posted a review at some point (check the archives), and was even more negative toward it than I was.

>>34039534
Isn't Displaced mostly dead at this point, though? I haven't seen one in the feature box in ages.
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>>34039551
Depends on what you mean by "Alive." If you mean "headlining the site," then Displaced is as dead as disco. If you mean "scurrying through the cracks and recieving a fucking deluge of new, shit stories and updates to older shit stories, none of which makes a blip on the radar," then Displaced is about as far from dead as can be.
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>>34039559
Basically Displaced is as dead as FO:E spinoffs.
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>>34039559
>none of which makes a blip on the radar
So in other words, it's the sort of thing you'll only find if you really seek it out?
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>>34039580
Exactly, wich I guess answers my original question. Why is Displaced so parasitically long lasting? Because picking your most favoritist overpowered anime character and writing your brain in their body is easy. Just as easy as writing a Fallout story. Shit sucks, someone gets turned into a mutant at some point, a woobie dies, the heroes stop the villains from fucking up the wasteland even more than it already is, but ultimately, it's still the post-apocalypse, so shit sucks.
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>>34039581
No, you'll find a fucking ton of it just looking for new HiE, which is why I know about it despite hating them.

Know what I wish stuck around for a while? The Power Lottery, that shit was fun. Authors having to strethc themselves and figure out how the powers could work. One guy had it be that the random powers were caused by shifting demensions so that humans could escape the demons invading Earth, and they use the side-effect of dimensional travel, the powers, to start kicking demon ass when they try to invade Equestria. Shit was tight.
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>>34039593
Easy to use framing devices will never truly die in the realm of fanfiction. A Displaced story is the lowest possible fruit. You just pick your favorite fictional character, give yourself their powers, and then write yourself in Equestria. Every character, plot point, and locale is given to you freely to fuck up.

Then you get to "high quality" Displaced. Now that's a trip. By Luna that's a trip.
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So is anyone planning on making a new thread or what?
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>>34039593
>Why is Displaced so parasitically long lasting?
Is is though? just because a handful of people are still keeping their shit alive? I havent seen a new displaced fic in a while. though i also havent checked the front page in a long time.

I know chessverse is dead, as is ponyfall or whatever that was called. I'm assuming lohav is actually dead too?

What about the other flavor of the month verses? proper noun verbs a noun? what other bandwagons did everyone jump on?
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>>34039642
I did the last couple threads, but I'm very drunk right now.
Also, sorry I forgot t update the herokuapp thing.
I trust you can do it guys.
I believe in you.
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>>34039666
But Anon, I haven't lurked long enough and I really don't want to have to read this whole thread for a second time...
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>>34037994
I pity you, and your obliviousness to the sensuous delights of the pastern.
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>>34038273
>Pretentious military bronies enter Equestria and acts holier-than-thou to the ponies
why
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>>34039747
If only I could be so degenerate, I could enjoy a dozen new free smut stories a day.
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We're second to last in the catalogue, someone please do the thread, I'm about to pass out.



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